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Now to take guesses on how many times she will fail before getting it right
I wonder what help is Dark talking about.
There's typo in the coverart I just noticed. Someone made a typo on the day values.
Some observations about the pheromones are pretty good, though. Maybe Due Note's family is just... not used to having strong urges.
I approve of Razz flying lessons, too.
If the gryphon is sending his sister round, it means Tabitha is really,
:Sunglasses:
Picking up the chicks?
Never mind that reporter wanting to get her,
In the centerfold?
sense of self - sense of self-consciousness(?)
erred on the blunt - erred on the side of blunt
For my hotel. - For my apartment building.(?)
with on of us - with one of us
but it's certainly been - but it'd certainly been --or-- but it had certainly been
As it turned - As it turned out
with a news card - with a press(?) card
the scent had stopped overwhelming - the scent had stopped being overwhelming --or-- the scent was no longer overwhelming
hate to sent such - hate to send such --(or for a freudian slip)-- hate to scent such
what next to get done - what to get done next
per square food - per square foot
grilled right enough - grilled just enough
remainder in her mouth - remainder into her mouth
*****
Quite the feast this morning!
I really liked this little slice of life chapter. It feels like things are moving along and the world is nudging Tabitha into doing more with her life than simply managing her apartment and being the Caretaker of a dimensional nexus.
Tabitha may not have control of her scent, but she is learning how to manage it, and that's almost as good. Now the fun part would be to see what happens if she intentionally turns it up to 11 for someone like Coco if they reach a point where they're comfortable being that intimate again.
The little pony nudging her to try her wings was a cute touch. If this were any place other than Equestria where friendship and harmony are the magic of the land, having a little foal urge Tabitha into going to a place with fewer ponies around might feel like a setup for a mugging. But this is magic pony land and helpful strangers are everywhere.
*****
Almost quite messily, at it turns out...
Tabitha should probably think about installing that ventilation system in her office and apartment sooner rather than later, though they'll need to be thoughtful about how and where they vent it. I can see the area around her apartment block turning into a lover's rendezvous if it collects in one spot.
Oh, nearly forgot. Magic notwithstanding, if this were anywhere but Equestria I would expect Tabitha to have a difficult time flying due to her center of mass being far forward of her wings. I don't think her male bits are quite enough to balance her out, though it makes me chuckle to imagine it. Still, it is a magical world so terran physics need not apply and she'll find some way to compensate if it's an issue at all.
I thought she owned an apartment building?
Otherwise nice to see Tabitha making more friends. They are the spice of life after all.
7527080 Damn typos...
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Ergh...I'll have to be quicker, ya beat me to the punch line!
"You could try there. There's hardly anyone ? compared to here."
Don't know, feels like a word is missing here, would say 'there' but that's repetitive, 'around' maybe?
"I think I'm going to get a friend for this." She nodded mostly to herself and left the little colt behind.
Nothing wrong, just tickled a funny bone (least those are still working) sounds a bit like "I need an adult!"
7527070 So many typos... I am filled with shame. ; ;
At least the story's moving along and things are happening and don't involve violence, sex, or dominating aliens.
7527128 Tweak!
7527132 Wondering if asking Razz to teach her to fly at the moment is a good idea, maybe if Bubbles was involved so Tabs can't be accused of trying to get Razz back, or if the griffon's sister signs up for an apartment, maybe ask for her help, her weight distribution is probably closer to a centaurs, (This is me thinking mechanical problem solving again)
It's a shame she doesn't have knowledge of the TV show, she'd know who to ask then.
7527162 It sounds like she's stripping her and throwing her up in the air, maybe 'to the chill air' or 'breezy air' IDK? Sorry if sounds this mean or something, not trying to be.
Damn grammar radar must have another glitch.orig08.deviantart.net/b580/f/2013/358/b/2/lunatic_twilight__glitch_animation_click___by_anime_mlp-d6z8fsk.gif
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Don't feel bad Mr. Silver, you're doing a great thing with your creative works as well as feeding hungry lunars.
One wonders how a griffin can spit without lips... but they manage to talk without them so I suppose I should really just relax.
Was it intended as "a leg" or were you meaning "my leg"
moving past
I think you've meant to place the italic on "You're", right?
7527613 Fixed!
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Like her, I'm confused. Is it "a cart grilling carrots" or "a cart of grilled carrots"?
7528051 They were on a surface, grilling peacefully. You could call them grilled, or grilling, and neither would be wrong.
7528051
7528243 And no one questions why you would serve a carrot this way. Talking ponies are one thing, but carrot dogs? That is some alternate reality alien horse food. Discords right, it's the details that make the alternate universe.
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7528051 vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/mlp/images/c/c3/Rarity_buying_a_hot_dog_S4E08.png/revision/20140107225146
7528243 No, I'm referring to how it's laid out.
A cart of grilling carrots
It sounds like the carrots themselves are doing the grilling, not being grilled
7528264 Never said it wasn't canon, just alien as twenty fucks.
Yum carrots!
Got appointments, now to set up some training! Let's find out exactly why you need magic to actually fly with a figure like that!
Keep going! ;)
Extra ".
7532411 Fixed!
I thought she was supposed to be a pegasus-centaur, not a lethian. *Badum TISH!*
Wasn't her last name Lawrence? It was in the first chapter... but then later you changed it to Taylor until someone pointed it out and you changed it back. Of course immediately after that you left in Coco reacting to the similarity between "Taylor" and "tailor".
Chapter 1;
Chapter 28;
Then in Chapter 28's comments Daremo posted;
So you changed that one to match the first chapter... Though the "tailor" connection is still there. I actually spent a good 20m researching and trying to figure out the connection between the name "Lawrence" and tailors... came up with bupkis.
EDIT: Follow up comment impending. Please standby.
8072276 Of course that quote from Chapter 28 was the last time the word "Lawrence" was used in the entire story. Taylor on the other hand...
Chapter 30;
Chapter 36;
Chapter 38;
Chapter 41;
Chapter 46;
Chapter 51;
Chapter 53;
Chapter 54;
So that is currently 12 "Taylor"s... verses 3 "Lawrence"s... 2 of which you changed after someone else said something. I think the error was probably the "Lawrence" in Chapter 1.