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Hurray for a bit of normalcy.
one of them - one sheet
*****
Another good chapter today! The plot is moving along again and I guess we owe thanks to Boulder at least in part for some of it.
Dark Vision is the competent help that Tabitha has needed since she arrived in Equestria. Hopefully, they can have a sit down before much longer and start comparing notes. I'm sure that Dark can bring Tabitha up to speed and once that happens she'll be much better equipped to fulfill her role as Caretaker.
Then don't use it, use your new camera, silly. It'll take a little longer, but it will conserve an irreplaceable resource.
7524319 What's Boulder have to do with it?
In a perfect world, she'd take the greatest of care of that printer and never really use it. This world, and Tabitha, are not perfect.
She could try hawking her goods to the ponies, though that would be parting with what's left of her old world.
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Ah, he made that reference to Titanic that I assumed had inspired part of the scene with Ms. Pommell. Apologies if that was not the case and I assumed wrongly.
7524369 I'm guessing David thought you were referring to Maud's pet rock.
7524378 Not that I don't love Maud and her friend.
This chapter honestly felt like it and the previous chapter were a single unit that was chopped in half due to length. I don't think that's actually the case, but it feels that way given that this is largely a direct continuation of what was happening there.
To that end, this was a chapter of everyone being themselves. Coco and Tabitha's flirting was cute, though the stop-and-start nature of their relationship was being presented so strongly that it was just starting to brush against becoming irritable. It's understandable that Tabitha is afraid of going too fast (given her situation in general and her pheromones in particular), and Coco is afraid of pushing Tabitha, but it's entirely possible to be too cautious, and it's starting to feel that way here. Both of them are still quite clearly unsure of themselves, and not entirely comfortable with what they have because they don't know what they have, and all of the dancing around it, while not implausible, is starting to wear thin.
At this point, the two of them seem to have established that they like each other, and are becoming more comfortable around each other, and are even starting to figure out what they want for - and from - and each other, so at some point it'd be nice if the sense of awkwardness between them started to ease up. I get that their relationship is in its "honeymoon" period, but at some point it'd be nice if they got past worrying about what things meant or if they'd gone too far.
Luckily, there was some forward motion with regards to Dark. I have to say that I was surprised by the dynamic that was present with her and Tabitha in this chapter. It honestly sounded like Dark works for Tabitha now, given that she was asking to be given marching orders. I suspect that was just Dark's own pragmatism speaking, rather than her actually being at Tabitha's disposal, but it was still notable. She was also, as Tabitha noted, reading a bit too much into Tabitha's "just get more information" stance with regards to Spring. Wanting to know the lay of the land before you make a move doesn't mean you know what that move will be yet.
What was more notable was Tabitha's hesitance regarding getting her old body back. At this point, I think it's fair to say that she's realized that there's benefits that would be lost if she did. But on the other hoof, it's not necessarily too late to go back, insofar as her relationship with Coco is concerned. It's not like they've done anything yet (Coco's blowjob notwithstanding), so I doubt that the loss of her male organ would mean the death knell of what Tabitha has with Coco. Even the lack of pheromones wouldn't likely change that much, since I doubt Coco is that shallow.
I say that because it highlights that Tabitha wasn't being very honest with herself. She's not worried about losing her girlfriend if she loses those parts (and given how she's ignored her wings, they certainly don't seem to mean anything to her); rather, Tabitha's worried about what she will lose, which at this point is having sex as a male. It's not a coincidence that all of her sexual encounters (Razz notwithstanding) have been with her putting her new masculine features to work, and enjoying it greatly. She's incorporated that into her own sense of sexuality, and is pretty clearly loathe to give it up. She'd be well served to admit that to herself and go from there.
I have to wonder just how oblivious Spring is to everything that's happening. I suppose she has no reason to notice that Dark is starting to mark her territory...or has she noticed her while spying on Tabitha, hoping to see her plowing Coco? Or would Dark have noticed the spying? When magic's involved, the intrigue never ends...
7524402 I'm not sure how much faster the two can go when Coco literally give her a somewhat tawrdry picture of herself and they slept together.
Did they go at it? No, but it was far from a chaste experience either for non-related folk. They're moving forward, so far I see, and going at their own pace, and that pace doesn't seem glacial. Both are growing comfortable with the other and are genuinely happy when the other is around.
I'm not sure what more they could do besides getting down to making little ponies or exchanging vows really. Oh! A date. They need one of those for sure.
7524454 It wasn't what they were doing, so much as it was the continual bouts of them second-guessing what they were doing. It felt like a lot of the interactions here were immediately followed by someone asking if they'd gone too far, if what they did was okay, etc. I'm just waiting for them to get to a place where they're comfortable enough to not keep worrying over having crossed a line.
7524468 As literal aliens, keeping oneself mindful of the hooves they could be stepping on and both having a respect for the other's view seems healthy. Neither seems to mind the other being a caring person, and it's only drawing them closer in the end, is it not?
7524369 Don't get me in trouble, Dave might banish me to Tartarus, I just was just making a comedic observation and having fun with comments trying to cheer up some ponies. I'm happy to know someone noticed though. I'm no collab writer like Damaged or Kiki. Not sure if Dave even noticed my comment?
7524350 Anyway...
printer
7524382 Ah thanks, I think?
Daremo is referring to this part of the comment I made yesterday...
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If you didn't see it, that's a scary coincidence, but probably not a big jump from similar thoughts.
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Tabs, you're in a world of magic, a unicorn with good magic ability (preferably one in a publisher print room) could copy samples of the ink and reproduce it even if it costs a fee, it's worth it. Failing that, it might be presumptuous, but ask Dark if she could politely ask if Luna or Tia might have skill at this.
Is Coco scared of Dark's position as a warden or whatever she is employed as, or her thestral heritage, not saying she's racist?
7524496 All my commentators are dirty collabers, whether they notice or not...
7524567 Seriously worried that I should be making these suggestions in your PM box now or get labeled a spoiler?
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7524635 Does anyone know what might stick?
7524635 I wouldn't worry about it. Since there's no way of knowing what David will or will not use, I don't think that it's a spoiler.
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Drawing from my own experiences with love and relationships, and for the record I fully understand that it probably applies only to me, the pacing of their relationship is proceeding at a natural pace. Perhaps it's progressed just a tad faster than natural as they're already physically intimate, but that could easily be the pheromones that caused things to jump ahead slightly.
They like one another. There is an element of physical attraction. They are now learning more about one another and getting a feeling for whether they are better together than apart. Good relationships are built on a solid foundation and it seems to me that they are working together to lay those foundations.
INB4 Dark Vision becomes the next Night Wing. Perhaps they're sisters?
Ink shouldn't be too difficult to get refilled, but paper. Might be a bit more difficult to get it at the level of quality the printer needs...
Keep going! ;)
a vary good chapter I really enjoyed it.
Author's Note:
What, two chapters without outright violence or mad breeding?
some times it is best to allow a story to grow on it's own.
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Nightwing? Expositize me, captain!
Ink is a problem, because modern printers are built to have very low nozzle tolerances. Pigment particles too large, solvent too viscous, you have a jammed printer head.
Paper can "easily" be cloned by spellwork. It's just very thin wood. The more inorganic or unnatural, the more difficult it is to reliably clone.
What Tabitha needs is a doorway to a tech civilization.
If you can use a magic spell to clone the atomically perfect position and spacing of random organic compounds, you should have a far easier time of cloning crystaline materials because the crystals are self defining, even if they are the strained silicon used in modern computer chips.
If you are going to go the crazily difficult way of the classic Star TRek transporter or Fly telepod, then, well,
You deserve everything you are going to get.
Dont ask me for story ideas. I tend to be Very good at my job of solving problems.
Lets just say I like the Dark Elf grenades in Thor.
7524402 It feels as if Tabs already has decided she definitely wants to:
1)not be a hermaphrodite.
2)not be a centaur
So there are 2 decisions left; 'Does she want to be human or pony?' and 'Does she return to female for familiarity and upset Spring or male to be with Coco on a more socially traditional and intimate level? One decision alone would mostly be easy, but the two at once is possibly confusing her.