{A/N} Wow I didn't think I would get this much criticism on this story. Might as well clear it up.
1. Grammar mistakes were fix. Thanks for the heads up grammar police. Your the best
2. Yes it is a bit based off of MLD. But look at it as a legacy to what Dashes' father did for her, she did for Scootaloo.
3. It was rushed. It was nearly Midnight when I finished that chapter.
Enough about me complaining about criticism for a crappy story. Next Chapter.
As Rainbow Dash opened her eyes in the morning, She was greeted by a clear blue sky and a warm, radiant sun. It seemed as if the weather itself was trying to greet Scootaloo into a world of peace and harmony. She smiled at how lovely at the day looked through the cloud window in her house.
Getting up and stretching her limbs she looked down to see little Scoots still asleep. Rainbow got the term sleeping like a baby now that she saw Scootaloo in a peaceful slumber. She couldn't believe on how adorable she was. Up until now she thought babies were cute but she was never one for taking care of one. Now she can see why Applejack and Rarity adored their sisters. Dash kept a mental reminder to take back what she said about the times when they were nearly obsessing over their newborn sisters.
Thats when she realized that she was going to have to introduce Scootaloo to the rest of her friends. She got excited by the thought of introducing her to them. Not sure whether to wake up Scootaloo or to let her sleep. Since the clock was dialed around eight. Rainbow dash decided that if she was gonna leave here, then she was gonna have to wake the infant to feed, bathe and if it happened, change her.
"Scootaloo." Rainbow put a hoof on her and began to pet her softly while whispering in her ear. When she spoke she could see the little Pegasuses wings flutter to life. Scootaloo remained asleep.
"Come on Scootaloo. It's time to wake up." She spoke a bit louder now. She saw the wings buzz like a bee's wings. She saw Scootaloos' eye lids open and her bright purple eyes looked around until she saw Dash looming over her. Scootaloo greeted her with her babbles and the word "Mama."
Scootaloo began to crawl around before Rainbow Dash picked her up and held her in her hooves as she fetcheed some formula milk that Applejack gave her last night.
"How long do I heat it for again?" She thought out loud. She remembered hearing to heat for around two minutes. Thinking that was probably the reasonable time, she put the bottle in the microwave and waited.
After a bit of waiting, Rainbow Dash got the bottle.
'How do you check temperature again?' She remembered Applejack checking it with her hoof. Rainbow pressed the bottle to her hoof and squeezed out some milk.
"DAW!" She yelped out in pain as the milk burned her. Scootaloo found humor in Dash's pain and was laughing while clapping hooves together.
"Wouldn't be so funny if it happened to you now would it?" Rainbow grumbled as she screwed the cap off and began to blow on the milk to cool it down. After a minute she tested it again,
"About 20 percent cooler. Perfect." She hovered over to Scootaloo with her wings and picked her up. Cradling her with one hoof and feeding with the bottle in the other, Scootaloo began gulping down milk.
"Geez kid slow down there." Dash said to her. She'd hate for her to get a tummy ache. She pulled the bottle out of Scootaloo's mouth after a while. Scootaloo began to look like she was trying to force something out herself. Rainbow picked her up and began to pat her on the back until she heard a burp. Before she put Scootaloo down, she smelled the dreaded smell every first time parent hates the smell of.
"Oh boy" Dash said out loud.
Rainbow Dash laid Scootaloo out on the table. She hovered over her with her wings and used her hooves to remove her diaper. Rainbow's mother used to say that she was thankful for her wings so she wouldn't have to use her mouth when she changed Dash when she was a baby.
After the powdering and changing, Scootaloo was changed. Scootaloo was still giggling from Rainbow Dash when she changed her since she saw misfortune to her.
"Oh so you think that was funny huh?" She asked the giggling toddler. Scootaloo kept laughing as if Rainbow hadn't said anything. "You know what I find funny?"
Before Scootaloo could babble out an answer, Dash had dug her hooves into the babies sides. Scootaloo squealed out with laughter as Rainbow tickled her. After a few seconds she stopped to let Scootaloo relax for a bit. The infant crawled over to her mother and hugged her. Rainbow Dash put a wing around her and pulled her closer.
After a morning of fun, Rainbow flew out of her house while carrying Scootaloo and flew off into her destination. Ponyville. On the way Rainbow kept thinking on how her friends would react? She had a thought that Applejack might have told them by now but that wouldn't matter as long as her friends greeted Scootaloo with open arms.
First stop was Fluttershy's place. Dash knew that if there was one pony who would be the most excited out of all her friends, it would be her. Landing just outside the entrance to her cottage. As Rainbow dash carried Scootaloo on her back, the toddler became amazed by the all the animals that lived in the cottage.
Rainbow got up to the door and knocked while saying "Hey Flutters. It's me. There somepony with me you're gonna want to meet."
Dash probably should have worded that last part better. Fluttershy has been known for being the most quiet of her friends but she didn't want to say that it was a baby she adopted from a cardboard box.
The door slowly creaked open. Fluttershy stared from behind her mane as she peaked outside.
"Hello there Rainbow Dash. Uhm where is this pony I was supposed to meet?"
Instead of talking, Rainbow Dash lowered her body and head to present Scootaloo. She heard Fluttershy gasp and she felt the weight off her shoulders and she stood up and Rainbow saw Fluttershy holding up Scootaloo.
"Whats it's name?"
"It's a she. Her name is Scootaloo."
"Where did you find her." It didn't take a brain to know that it wasn't Rainbow Dash's child.
"She was abandoned by her mother. I found her last night in a box." Dash said sadly.
"Oh my the poor thing." She said while taking her inside. Rainbow followed her inside. It seemed as if any small woodland creature that could fit into Fluttershy's house had come to see Scootaloo.
"Now now everybody. We don't want to scare her." Fluttershy addressed her animals. Scootaloo seemed intrested in the animals and was reaching out to pet some of them.
"Oh come on Fluttershy. Let her pet one of them." Rainbow said slightly annoyed.
"Are you sure?"
"Yes I'm sure."
"Okay then." She placed Scootaloo down. The animals all walked up to her and Scootaloo began to play with all of them. Some of the animals brushing up against her while she petted other. When it came to Angel ,Fluttershy's pet rabbit, Scootaloo played with her ears.
"See Fluttershy. Nothing to worry about."
After a few minutes of Scootaloo playing with the animals. Rainbow Dash decided to go introduce Scootaloo to the rest of her friends.
"Wait, before you leave to go home at the end of the day, come back here and I will give you some baby food."
"You make baby food?"
"Of course Rainbow. I'm alway prepared for any kind of diet emergency."
"Alrighty then. See you later." She waved. Scootaloo waved back impersonating what Rainbow Dash was doing without knowing what it actually meant.
Good new chapter, though like people have said, it feels a bit rushed. You could do with slowing down a lot and detailing more of the events that occur. I.e. changing Scootaloo, feeding her could be added to. Not to mention instead of just saying they had a fun morning, you could have put in some cute scenes that show us that, and would lengthen your story beautifully.
But hey, I'm still enjoying it regardless!
Also still a few typo's here and there, I.e. " Up until now she thought babies were cut" I assume you mean cute, unless Rainbow Dash is referencing Cupcakes...
Very improved from the first chapter I was hoping someone would make a fanfic based on that comic.
1781080 Which one?
There is a comic from beavernator, fairly sure that is the name, that starts like this. Think it was called 'Scootaloo's perfect day', though it might be off. Look it up on Deviant Art
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Yes, cuuuut!
1782469 That comic was an inspiration for the story along with the cover art.
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You could be a problem... Try not to do too much "cuuuut"ing, okay? I don't want to have to write your name down.
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What are you talking about officer? There are no electric carving knives in my pocket!
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Oh, the irony of that statement... You haven't a clue who I am do you? You haven't heard of Kira before, have you?
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Umm.. Errr... Ummm... Nope, not at all.
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I am an unorthodox justice. I can kill a person simply by writing their name down in a notebook called the "Death Note". I can also make the time and events of the death of that person. My plans for this world are to rid it of all criminals and vile humans. You are a vile human. This is just a warning, though. I already killed Ryuzaki (also known as L), the world's best detective. He hunted me, so I hunted back. Besides him, millions of criminals have also died. Although the original Kira was killed by Near, I carry on his legacy. The world will be pure once more and I will become the god of this new world.
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Death Note + Electric Carving Knife = Cut up Death Note. But I suppose you can write pretty fast.
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Even if it's just a scrap of paper from the note, I can use it to it's full power. Even the smallest shred. I simply have to deploy a decoy or something that I own't reveal.
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Tell me, can you write on ashes?
*busts out the ruler again* Proofread, edit, THEN post.
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Uhhh Angel is a MALE Rabbit
You said he was a she
things to use instead of she or Rainbow
-the mare
-the older mare
-Dash
-the chromatic mare
-the Technicolor mare
-the older Pegasus
-the caretaker
and any thing else along ties lines
I'll be posting this on every chapter that has this problem from here on out
This comes out of the blue, but I see all too often authors with great ideas and stories (your's is one so far), but it is crippled by a sheer LACK. OF. COMMAS. Commas are an integral part of making your points clearer and help make dialogue sound more authentic in the reader's mind.
Just a few examples from this chapter:
--"Hello there Rainbow Dash."
--> "Hello there, Rainbow Dash." This shows that Rainbow Dash is clearly the one being spoken to
--"Oh my the poor thing."
--> "Oh my, the poor thing." this is a necessary pause. Try saying it with and without the pause, I can guarantee that it sounds 'right' with a pause
--"Now now everybody."
--> "Now, now, everybody." This implies that the second now is simply repetition for emphasis and that 'everybody' is being talked to
--"Oh come on Fluttershy."
--> "Oh, come on, Fluttershy." This implies the natural pauses made by a speaker again, also references Fluttershy as the one spoken to
--"See Fluttershy."
--> "See, Fluttershy?" Ignoring that there should be a question mark, the comma is necessary unless Rainbow is telling (or asking) someone else to look at Fluttershy
I'm sorry if this seems harsh, but I see this too much when you can really change the meaning of an entire sentence just by not having one tiny character.
Still not quite picking up the feels from this.
1. Grammar mistakes were fix. Thanks for the heads up grammar police. Your the best
should be:
1. Grammar mistakes were fixed. Thanks for the heads up, grammar police. You're the best.
Yes I understand that that grammar mistake was in an author's note, however, it is still there.
Rainbow got the term sleeping like a baby now that she saw Scootaloo in a peaceful slumber. should be Rainbow got the phrase sleeping like a baby now that she saw Scootaloo in a peaceful slumber. getting a term would be like understanding angel because of the way that Scootaloo was sleeping.
When she spoke she could see the little Pegasuses wings flutter to life. should be When she spoke she could see the little Pegasus's wings flutter to life.
"Whats it's name?" should be "What's its name?" as it's is the contraction meaning it is, and its means that something belongs to something
I would have woken Scootaloo up by yelling "WAKE THE FUCK UP, YOU LITTLE SHIT" at the top of my lungs, scaring her and then making her cry. LOL!!
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Wow, some people...