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Well, AJ's gonna have to get used to this sort of sight. It'll happen - a lot.
So KJ, which pony dies first?
.................
Can't say. After all, we are only on the first episode...........
1758536 use the damned fire axe next time it saves time and bullets. not to mention it makes sure the person is dead along with the walker.
1759140 y'know, I thought the same thing while replaying the game once. But then I got to thinking... if I was in her position, I'm not sure I would've trusted some stranger to bury an axe in my skull, even assuming it would kill me right away. I would rather take my chances with a quick death, or wait to turn. Though, it would've been interesting if they had included that option.
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indeed, but there are other quick means of doing that besides gun-point suicide, a noose, drowning,the list goes on... im not proud that i just typed that...
1759991 Oh man, this comment section is getting grim.
1760014 yay lets have a blood bath party. their can be spleen balloons and intestine banners; ohohoh maybe even a stomach pinata.
as for the suicides as long as the damage is to the brain the walker wont rise again.
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to be fair, its a mature story about humans and 3 ponies in a brutal zombie apoctalyptic wasteland where mutilations and corpse eating are the norm, plus it has involved gruesome (well for other people it might be) deaths, a soon-to-be-turned suicidal woman, and killing innocent children under the assumption that they had been bitten, so compared to the story, the comments arent that bad
1768466 Well, I've got 4 episodes---potentially 24 chapters to think about it...
1771547 I can't promise anything other than my best...
Ugh, for some reason I can only read this when I'm not signed in, it won't let me look even when I "confirm" I'm over 18.
Good thing I read this before signing in then.
I'm going to get my Constructive Criticism from a day old reading out of the way so that the praise I have for this fic will be even sweeter. For starters I noticed you spelled Herschel's name wrong, though I suppose that's no longer an issue with him out of the picture.
Secondly, you sometimes violate "Show Don't Tell" when you do a good enough job showing. For example, when Larry called Applejack "the inbred mule hick" and Dash "The Flying Pride Parade," you did not have to specify afterwards that he was referring to their associated attributes. Those are things you can trust your readers to figure out on their own.
That said...this has been a fun read so far. It's cool to see everyone interact with the ponies, especially Clementine. I could just imagine her horror at realizing Dash lives in a world without Spongebob Squarepants. On a more serious note, it is a shame that the ponies couldn't witness human civilization in progress before it started to unravel. Lyra would be so crushed to find out her favorite species are now endangered.
While it's nice to see you sticking to the basic plot, don't get too bogged down in the Stations of the Canon. Part of the fun with crossovers like these is to see the newcomers throw a monkey wrench in the works and see what happens from there. That said, I won't be too disappointed if our heroines managed to save BOTH certain someones in the next chapter. It's only the first episode and I can probably wait a little longer for points of divergence that big.
Speaking of which, can't wait to see how they react to the St. John family. Twilight might have been able to infer from Kenny mentioning being a fisherman that humans are at least omnivorous, but I imagine seeing the reality of it might be a little unnerving, especially since Episode 2 opens with Lee, Mark and Kenny out hunting (though I imagine that since Rainbow was friends with a Griffon, that any discomfort of living near omnivores might be mitigated).
Will any other Equestrian natives--ponies or otherwise--show up down the road? In the long-term, for some reason I picture ponies, griffons and Diamond Dogs learning about humanity's advances and sneaking into our lands to "salvage" our technology and art for fun and profit, and maybe some of them treat zombie meat as a delicacy if they include carrion in their appetites. /
Also, from one scene in the first chapter, I wasn't clear on something: Are you implying that Equestria is actually on Earth somewhere and just hidden? Something about the way I read Princess Celestia's comments seemed to imply that, or maybe it's just me.
In any case, hope you put up a new chapter soon. I noticed you updated rather frequently until December. Hope that's not a bad sign and that you're still working on this.
2087591 Thank you for the brief tips, first of all. My style of writing tends to waver sometimes since I start becoming self-conscience of mistakes or maybe I find myself rushing the pace of the story, or dragging it out...basically, it's challenging for me to find a balancing point for writing, but I'm usually satisfied with my work in the end, so I'll continue to do my best in this endeavor. As for where the story will go and how much the ponies will alter it, that's something that I have pretty much figured out for episode 1, and will have to give a bit more thought for the following episodes.
The main reason that I haven't been able to update my stories is primarily because of complications with the computer I normally use to do so. (This response is from my tablet) I'm currently saving up for a laptop as a replacement, though will other financial aspects in the way, I can't say for sure when that time will come. It has been hugging the absolute hell out of me knowing that readers are waiting for the next chapter and I'm simply unable to provide that. But as I said, I'm working on saving up enough so I can finally get back into it.
Thanks again for the feedback, it is much appreciated.
*bugging the hell out of me... Not hugging...bugging.
(Stupid-Ass autocorrect)
1869014 Yeeeeaaaahhh, see that's one of those things that I mentioned that I have a hard time finding a...consistency I guess you could call it. When I spend a lot of time continuously typing a story and trying to improve, I often find myself making mistakes such as this. It may be because I haven't 100% established a style of how I paragraph, or I may get multiple tips from readers that sometimes but very rarely contradict each other. I try to adapt in a sense, but it usually ends up with the problem that you presented here. I'm not always sure if I should take the time to clarify a character speaking, or if the narration or the actual dialouge should come first...like I said, it turns into a mess...
Again, it is something that I'll work on to the best of my abilities (until I inevitably mess it up again)
Sincerely, thank you for pointing this out.
So... About the dairy farm...
That's going to be grim for the ponies that could be used as a sack of meat that isn't making resources for the farmers.
...
I've been waiting for a fic about Lee and Clem. Thank you, good sir.
2184133 You are very welcome.
CAN NOT WAIT FOR CHAPTER 7! YOU BETTER POST IT SOON!
2192172 Should be up either tonight or tomorrow!
2193271 Yay!
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yay
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Hey guys, it might be by tonight or one more day since there was a mix up in sending my editor the chapter.
I'm really sorry.
Looks like I'm not the only one who wanted an axe option. Good to know I'm not alone in that field.
Its good to see your giving all 3 good individual scenes for our ponies :3no one outshineing the other
Few things: again the concept of whether or not the ponies would even turn into zombies comes into the picture... , With the keys, Twilight lifted a huge bear into the mountains without even seeing it, why can't she get the key?
5146433 cause hes keeping it in the lines with the game so lee will still se his brother one last time
Ahhh damn man... poor girl, and damn it Glenn, you goober.
jeebus.
Nicely written you dude.
Nicely written.
You made the wrong decision.
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I don't blame her for her decision. I honestly would've done the same thing than becoming a walker.