Lol He needs to meet Fancy pants soon. The only noble in canterlot that doesn't have his head up his ass. Great story though; I'm going to follow this.
1553170 Yup, however shit hitting the fan is usually a device implemented to keep things interesting so that you don't get the same stuff over and over. However, as the story is going right now there is an abundance of interesting interactions going on which hopefully will delay that having to occur by quite a bit. If this is day to day life in Canterlot then I can keep reading quite a bit more of just that.
Okay, I haven't read any of your story yet, but scrolling through the comments, the story should be interesting. I hope I can get past the whole 2nd-person thing, I mean, me? Having a relationship with a goddess? A PONY goddess, at that? And I'm still a human? I'll keep my fingers crossed & hope I don't throw up at that.
Without turning around, you raise your hand and extend your middle finger in the general direction of his voice.
Luckily, ponies don’t understand this rude gesture which you have just publically displayed. Flipping ponies off is the only thing you can do to keep from cursing them out in the middle of the street.
I really like this side of Celestia, making her a bit OOC makes her a bit more approchable as a character, but you also keep her true to her original personality.
You know, of all the fics that I've had the pleasure of reading on this fine, pony filled site, I have never once made a comment. While this may come as a surprise to some of the much more active ponies on this site -and even some of the lesser ones- It most certainly is true. If you hadn't noticed yet, this should be seen as a great honor indeed! It is not often that I give public praise to fan literature on the internet (Or really any kind of thing on the internet, for that matter). To begin this comment in ernest, I'm going to say that I didn't read this story because it was clop, or because I drool over every single Celestia fic out there; I read it for one reason: the fact that it is second person. In all reality, I've found that peole tend to fear that perspective, for whatever reason but I love it; atleast, when it's done well. And you certainly do it well, even though I feel that you've translated more of your personality and quirks into the character as opposed to a more general, bland, easy to relate to, typical 2nd person character. While some might feel a little disconcerted by this, I do not and say that it adds an great level of charm to your story, and I've found myself giggling like a school girl numerous times (humor is something I plan on touching on later~). The character is witty and loveable and I simply love the way he deals with certain situations. Being a cynic myself, I guess I can relate to him more with how he deals with cetain ponies (The way he/I addressed the drunkards will remain favorite part throughout the fic). The only thing that I object to was the scene where he first met the doctor, while his initial reaction was fine, I believe that he became accustumed to the ponies almost to quickly. Waking up in a strange world filled with talking equines feels like it'd take a bit more than "two hours" of talking with Dr.Feel-Good, to get over and maybe could've been expanded by an extra paragraph. On the topic of pacing, I do feel that you're doing a much better job with it than you did in the first chapter, to this I top my hat as not many new authors are so open to advice from others. I might suggest a bit more detail, but the dialog and humor seems to make up for the lack of descriptive text.
To wrap up this little bit of constructive-praise, I'd like to speak of both the clop and humor. To begin, I'm going to say that I ave read a hefty ammount of clop. Not because I get off to it, but because I like to see myself as a reading buff and enjoy the change every now and then. The sex scene between the character and Celestia, had excellent pacing. Not too fast, not too slow, very good. Now, I feel that the scene over all was tastefully done, if such a thing even can be said about smut in general. There wasn't a crazy ammount of sick detail to make me feel like I needed to towel off afterword, but enough to make me feel satisfied at the end. As for your humor, well... I love it. It's quirky, obscene and fits the character perfectly. You write it naturally, which is something you should be proud of, not many people can do that and often try to hard to make the reader laugh. So, there we go. This is the end of my comment; it is almost 4am in the morning for this maryland brony and he is very tired after reading through all 30 some thousand words in one sitting. I'm sure that I'll have more to say about the fic when I get a chance to think about it more in depth, so if you're intrigued by this, do shoot me a PM and I shall be all to happy to slake your thirst. I think I've writen quite enough (And made more than enough sleep fueled grammer errors) for one night.
So I went ahead and read the first three chapters in one go. It's 430 in the morning here. No regrets. I really love this story. I've been looking for something like this for a long time and you've done an excellent job. I love the romance. I love the interaction with the rest of the ponies, especially Luna. It's funny, romantic, not too raunchy but not too PG either. Perfect story. I can't wait to see where you go with it. And props on getting an editor.
Just read these 3 chapters in a only a few hours and you good sir/ma'am must know I love this story very much, the romance the hilarious interactions with others, makes me laugh really hard while the love making with celestia was tastefully done, and this being a love story with celestia and not luna or any of the other characters is a nice surprise as well.
Not to mention in this story it seems like celestia never had the time to be lovers with anyone until "me" so seeing her like this is actually adorable and I approve, greatly! And haveing luna being a prank loving immature little alicorn sister is funny as hell as well. XD please I hope to see more updates soon upvote and fave from me.
1554261 This guy knows what he's talking about, and I second him! This story is amazing, and you have definitely earned the right to be proud for it! I hope you don't stop running out of ideas for (me) to do, so I can figure out why (I) came here.
Okay, on to my comment. Ahem...
I have and am enjoying this story much more than I thought I would. Originally, I thought going out with a mare would weird me out too much, and keep me from enjoying this to my utmost ability. I mean, me? The only human in Equestria? Sleeping with a full-grown mare, that just so happens to be the sun Goddess? My first thought; whoa, that's kinda... creepy. But obviously, I worked around that. My character is perfect, and I do believe what (I) do, I would do if the options were provided for me. But, with all due respect, I wouldn't actually wanna be this guy. There are some moments that I know I'd never do/say that you filled in for me. 'I'm the luckiest man in the world.' is a prime example that stuck out. First of all, no sexual intercourse whatsoever with living animals that aren't your species. That's my rule No. 1. I mean, I can suffice with kissing and touching, but I would NEVER go so low as to fuck the brains out of something that isn't human. And I'm sure most of the ponies - no, no, people - here second me. Regardless of whether Celestia is the most hypnotic creature in (my) life, or just to get off to something -- Nuh uh. Think I'd stick with Palmela.
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Whoa, uhh, my comment turned into a critic. Whoops. Sorry.
EDIT: I just thought of this... How would a female reader react while reading this?
I really like this so far. Yeah the whole stairs thing, If she has to give one birthday gift to the human, I'd ask for that elevator even a primitive one which uses pulleys, weights, locks and counter weights has to be better than climbing 8-10 flights of stairs everyday. Escalators are another option. Stairs suck.
You stroll into your office, sit down, open up the next file:
‘Private Shamrock,’ you read. ‘Let’s make this a good report.’
"Private Shamrock, I'm paring you with Staff Sergeant Shakes this upcoming March on Golden Arches Avenue, your mission is to capture the notorious H.M Burglar."
> If you had the option to go to the Caribbean on the condition you let go of Celestia, you would turn it down without a second thought. THE CARIBBEAN AINT THAT GREAT MATE! seriously, take it from me, iv'e been here my whole life (super hot, super humid, super duper annoying mosquitoes and tourists. oh god the tourists.)
1555963 Great job. I wanted to tear my hair out the first two chapters when there were its', or they're instead of their, etc, so thank you for helping make this more readable. XD (It sucks to be a pre-reader, you know? You see errors wherever you go, whether you want to or not! ; ; )
Good evening everybrony! For those who don't know, and for those who are colorblind, I am ScatMan and I write the story This Magic Moment. First, I would like to thank you all for your kind words. It means a lot to me. I love opening up my Dell and reading all the kind things you have to say. If you have something mean to say, I'm glad you haven't yet. Or else I may cry. Second, I would love to reply to all of your comments, but it's just not possible. It can't be done. So, if anyone truly has a question about me, my editor, or the story, and wants a legitimate response, I implore you to message me. If you message me, I guarantee I will respond. But I can't respond to all these comments. That's basically it really. Please continue commenting, continue reading, all that good stuff. I haven't started on the next chapter yet. So Imma go do that. Love you all. Thanks for reading and commenting! ScatMan
Ha ha. That was the only thing I could think of. I had to make some alternative offer for the main character to refute, and that's the first thing that came to my head. Sorry about the tourists. With love, ScatMan
1558441 Hehe~ glad you caught on to what i meant, im just saying that you should y'now cut the caribbean out and replace it with something like a "sex fantasy island" or "a shit ton of money" or somthin right?
dude first of all its not beastiality its xenophilia as in they are a sentient sapient alien race especially if they are from another dimension or world or whatever. second bestiality is doing sexual things with non-sentient beings like animals that can't voice their consent not to mention that they cant communicate with us at all. the mlp ponies are different because they could give consent or not and they could communicate with us if need be. I believe there could be sentient sapient ponies out there in the universe right now. also saying that doing sexual things with alien races and then calling it beastiality would be an insult to said alien race especially if they are intelligent and can voice their consent or not.
But, I think you may have misinterpreted my comment to an extent. See, I don't really want anything sexually involved going on with me and anything that isn't human. That's the actual me talking. When I had the first-person words in parentheses, I was referring to my perspective in ScatMan's story here. (you know, how it's second-person?)
I don't know if we have a misunderstanding or if you're just mad at me, but if the whole I (I) thing confused you, then I can see how my comment may have contradicted itself.
It is always refreshing to see a Celestia centered fic with her being shown outside of the stereotypes of "Trollestia/Molestia" showing up in the story. She never seems to get enough proper attention, however you are doing one hell of a job in portraying her in this rather amazing story. I like how the format of this story is going so far, the flashbacks in the start giving the basis of his first encounters, while the rest of the chapter is dedicated to the day to day activities of the reader and the relationship with Celestia. Your portrayal of her is just amazing, and you're doing a damn good job with it being a second person story.
My thoughts are slightly discombobulated right now, but lots of words short damn fine job, and I look forward to more amazing chapters from you as I wholeheartedly love reading this story.
"If he bothers Luna, you will have him killed. It wouldn’t even be hard, especially considering he doesn’t lock his doors or windows."
I don't want to continue. I can't empathise with him at all - he's a horrible, selfish prick at best. Rooting for all the ponies giving him a hard time, while knowing they're all going to be shot down because he's the hero of the story... That's just torturing myself. So, I'm just going to step away.
Mr. Derpsby, Thanks for reading! I'm grateful that you took the time to read my story. It means a lot to me. Thank you for the feedback as well. It's always good to know what my readers think. However, I'm not forcing you to read the story. If you don't want to read it, that's fine. Don't read it. The quote you included in your comment was solely meant for comedy. It wasn't supposed to be taken seriously. At all. I'm not going to have the protagonist of the story murder anybody. It's not that kind of story. I'm sorry you did not enjoy the story. Have a splendid evening. ScatMan
1574228 Heh. That is quite a reading failure on my part then.
Wrong as it was, I was ready to take it at face value... Strange, really. And, I wanted to note: I didn't downvote your story, or anything like that. It's fairly well-written, I think. It's just, ah - something about the guy sets my teeth on edge, and I'm not sure I can articulate precisely what. In any case: Seeing just how much I'm prepared to think the worst of him, I doubt I could do your story any justice.
Mr. Derpsby, nevertheless, I am glad you took your time to read and critique my story. It means a lot to me. Just so you know. I'm sorry my protagonist angers you so. Trying to keep him as neutral as possible is something that I have not done very well, but whatever. I'm sorry you believe my story is strange. It is strange, I agree with you on that, but I'm sorry you don't like that. I thank you for not voting down my story. That also means a lot to me. Thank you for reading and commenting! ScatMan
I eat the nuggets of humor in your story much like m&ms. Thank you, Scatman. The m&ms are tasty. Sillyness aside; I sincerely appreciate the humor of your writing. Considering how much you care about victorNoodle's top five, you might like to know that your story as well is among my all time favorites of the 4-5 dozen that I've read. Again, thanks a lot for this great great story. I'm very much looking forward to your upcoming work. Cheers, buddy!
You give a brief sum-up of Earth’s history…well you tell him whatever it is you know. Not much in Earth’s history except for wars and violence. This seemingly appalls the doctor, but he continues to listen to you anyway.
You think of how wonderful life withh Celestia is. She is the kindest, most beautiful creature you have ever had the pleasure of even knowing. Celestia is. She is the kindest, most beautiful creature you have ever had the pleasure. kindest, beautiful Apparently I haven't met Fluttershy yet. 1605700
1553217 If you see the Sparkles as a noble family, there are a few more nobles with their heads out of their asses.
As for the story itself: 2nd person is not my favourite and I tend to avoid it, especially HiE stories. It's quite good, though. I would, however, have handled that noble dude in an entirely different fashion. Pummeled him with words and arguments so hard he would be left speechless.
First!
I know how he feels. I wish I had someone to hold and say 'I love you' to. I'm so alone right now.
Well done. This was an intriging chapter to say the least. Can't wait to read more.
Lol'd. Great chapter, and it makes me loathe the day shit will inevitably hit the fan.
sorry cant do second person.
Lol He needs to meet Fancy pants soon. The only noble in canterlot that doesn't have his head up his ass. Great story though; I'm going to follow this.
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Yup, however shit hitting the fan is usually a device implemented to keep things interesting so that you don't get the same stuff over and over.
However, as the story is going right now there is an abundance of interesting interactions going on which hopefully will delay that having to occur by quite a bit. If this is day to day life in Canterlot then I can keep reading quite a bit more of just that.
Okay, I haven't read any of your story yet, but scrolling through the comments, the story should be interesting. I hope I can get past the whole 2nd-person thing, I mean, me? Having a relationship with a goddess? A PONY goddess, at that? And I'm still a human? I'll keep my fingers crossed & hope I don't throw up at that.
I'll give it a fave tonight, read it 2morow
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I SECOND THAT MOTION!!!
Any objections?
Hugs to all the lonely people!!!
Without turning around, you raise your hand and extend your middle finger in the general direction of his voice.
Luckily, ponies don’t understand this rude gesture which you have just publically displayed. Flipping ponies off is the only thing you can do to keep from cursing them out in the middle of the street.
YOU HAVE AN EDITER!!! *head implodes*
Bravo!
I really like this side of Celestia, making her a bit OOC makes her a bit more approchable as a character, but you also keep her true to her original personality.
You know, of all the fics that I've had the pleasure of reading on this fine, pony filled site, I have never once made a comment.
While this may come as a surprise to some of the much more active ponies on this site -and even some of the lesser ones- It most certainly is true. If you hadn't noticed yet, this should be seen as a great honor indeed! It is not often that I give public praise to fan literature on the internet (Or really any kind of thing on the internet, for that matter).
To begin this comment in ernest, I'm going to say that I didn't read this story because it was clop, or because I drool over every single Celestia fic out there; I read it for one reason: the fact that it is second person. In all reality, I've found that peole tend to fear that perspective, for whatever reason but I love it; atleast, when it's done well. And you certainly do it well, even though I feel that you've translated more of your personality and quirks into the character as opposed to a more general, bland, easy to relate to, typical 2nd person character. While some might feel a little disconcerted by this, I do not and say that it adds an great level of charm to your story, and I've found myself giggling like a school girl numerous times (humor is something I plan on touching on later~).
The character is witty and loveable and I simply love the way he deals with certain situations. Being a cynic myself, I guess I can relate to him more with how he deals with cetain ponies (The way he/I addressed the drunkards will remain favorite part throughout the fic). The only thing that I object to was the scene where he first met the doctor, while his initial reaction was fine, I believe that he became accustumed to the ponies almost to quickly. Waking up in a strange world filled with talking equines feels like it'd take a bit more than "two hours" of talking with Dr.Feel-Good, to get over and maybe could've been expanded by an extra paragraph.
On the topic of pacing, I do feel that you're doing a much better job with it than you did in the first chapter, to this I top my hat as not many new authors are so open to advice from others. I might suggest a bit more detail, but the dialog and humor seems to make up for the lack of descriptive text.
To wrap up this little bit of constructive-praise, I'd like to speak of both the clop and humor. To begin, I'm going to say that I ave read a hefty ammount of clop. Not because I get off to it, but because I like to see myself as a reading buff and enjoy the change every now and then. The sex scene between the character and Celestia, had excellent pacing. Not too fast, not too slow, very good. Now, I feel that the scene over all was tastefully done, if such a thing even can be said about smut in general. There wasn't a crazy ammount of sick detail to make me feel like I needed to towel off afterword, but enough to make me feel satisfied at the end. As for your humor, well... I love it. It's quirky, obscene and fits the character perfectly. You write it naturally, which is something you should be proud of, not many people can do that and often try to hard to make the reader laugh.
So, there we go. This is the end of my comment; it is almost 4am in the morning for this maryland brony and he is very tired after reading through all 30 some thousand words in one sitting. I'm sure that I'll have more to say about the fic when I get a chance to think about it more in depth, so if you're intrigued by this, do shoot me a PM and I shall be all to happy to slake your thirst. I think I've writen quite enough (And made more than enough sleep fueled grammer errors) for one night.
~TheTidbit
This is good.
Imma follow it.
Jolly good show ol boy!
So I went ahead and read the first three chapters in one go. It's 430 in the morning here. No regrets. I really love this story. I've been looking for something like this for a long time and you've done an excellent job. I love the romance. I love the interaction with the rest of the ponies, especially Luna. It's funny, romantic, not too raunchy but not too PG either. Perfect story. I can't wait to see where you go with it. And props on getting an editor.
Just read these 3 chapters in a only a few hours and you good sir/ma'am must know I love this story very much, the romance the hilarious interactions with others, makes me laugh really hard while the love making with celestia was tastefully done, and this being a love story with celestia and not luna or any of the other characters is a nice surprise as well.
Not to mention in this story it seems like celestia never had the time to be lovers with anyone until "me" so seeing her like this is actually adorable and I approve, greatly! And haveing luna being a prank loving immature little alicorn sister is funny as hell as well. XD please I hope to see more updates soon upvote and fave from me.
1554261 This guy knows what he's talking about, and I second him! This story is amazing, and you have definitely earned the right to be proud for it! I hope you don't stop running out of ideas for (me) to do, so I can figure out why (I) came here.
Okay, on to my comment. Ahem...
I have and am enjoying this story much more than I thought I would. Originally, I thought going out with a mare would weird me out too much, and keep me from enjoying this to my utmost ability. I mean, me? The only human in Equestria? Sleeping with a full-grown mare, that just so happens to be the sun Goddess? My first thought; whoa, that's kinda... creepy.
But obviously, I worked around that. My character is perfect, and I do believe what (I) do, I would do if the options were provided for me. But, with all due respect, I wouldn't actually wanna be this guy. There are some moments that I know I'd never do/say that you filled in for me. 'I'm the luckiest man in the world.' is a prime example that stuck out.
First of all, no sexual intercourse whatsoever with living animals that aren't your species. That's my rule No. 1. I mean, I can suffice with kissing and touching, but I would NEVER go so low as to fuck the brains out of something that isn't human. And I'm sure most of the ponies - no, no, people - here second me. Regardless of whether Celestia is the most hypnotic creature in (my) life, or just to get off to something -- Nuh uh. Think I'd stick with Palmela.
...
Whoa, uhh, my comment turned into a critic. Whoops. Sorry.
EDIT: I just thought of this... How would a female reader react while reading this?
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Who, little ol' me?
I really like this so far. Yeah the whole stairs thing, If she has to give one birthday gift to the human, I'd ask for that elevator even a primitive one which uses pulleys, weights, locks and counter weights has to be better than climbing 8-10 flights of stairs everyday. Escalators are another option. Stairs suck.
"Private Shamrock, I'm paring you with Staff Sergeant Shakes this upcoming March on Golden Arches Avenue, your mission is to capture the notorious H.M Burglar."
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> If you had the option to go to the Caribbean on the condition you let go of Celestia, you would turn it down without a second thought.
THE CARIBBEAN AINT THAT GREAT MATE! seriously, take it from me, iv'e been here my whole life (super hot, super humid, super duper annoying mosquitoes and tourists. oh god the tourists.)
1555963*runs away screaming bloody murder after fixing my head* BLOODY MURDER!!!*dissapears into the night
Oh please have moar soon.
1555963 Great job. I wanted to tear my hair out the first two chapters when there were its', or they're instead of their, etc, so thank you for helping make this more readable. XD (It sucks to be a pre-reader, you know? You see errors wherever you go, whether you want to or not! ; ; )
Good evening everybrony!
For those who don't know, and for those who are colorblind, I am ScatMan and I write the story This Magic Moment.
First, I would like to thank you all for your kind words. It means a lot to me. I love opening up my Dell and reading all the kind things you have to say.
If you have something mean to say, I'm glad you haven't yet. Or else I may cry.
Second, I would love to reply to all of your comments, but it's just not possible. It can't be done.
So, if anyone truly has a question about me, my editor, or the story, and wants a legitimate response, I implore you to message me. If you message me, I guarantee I will respond. But I can't respond to all these comments.
That's basically it really. Please continue commenting, continue reading, all that good stuff.
I haven't started on the next chapter yet. So Imma go do that.
Love you all. Thanks for reading and commenting!
ScatMan
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Ha ha. That was the only thing I could think of. I had to make some alternative offer for the main character to refute, and that's the first thing that came to my head.
Sorry about the tourists.
With love,
ScatMan
1558441 Hehe~ glad you caught on to what i meant, im just saying that you should y'now cut the caribbean out and replace it with something like a "sex fantasy island" or "a shit ton of money" or somthin right?
i laughed, i cried, i got a stiffy, those are all the signs i get when i have read a great fic keep it up!!! arch.413chan.net/Celestia_GoODJOB-(n1294939750551).png
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dude first of all its not beastiality its xenophilia as in they are a sentient sapient alien race especially if they are from another dimension or world or whatever. second bestiality is doing sexual things with non-sentient beings like animals that can't voice their consent not to mention that they cant communicate with us at all. the mlp ponies are different because they could give consent or not and they could communicate with us if need be. I believe there could be sentient sapient ponies out there in the universe right now. also saying that doing sexual things with alien races and then calling it beastiality would be an insult to said alien race especially if they are intelligent and can voice their consent or not.
1568316 I understand.
But, I think you may have misinterpreted my comment to an extent. See, I don't really want anything sexually involved going on with me and anything that isn't human. That's the actual me talking. When I had the first-person words in parentheses, I was referring to my perspective in ScatMan's story here. (you know, how it's second-person?)
I don't know if we have a misunderstanding or if you're just mad at me, but if the whole I (I) thing confused you, then I can see how my comment may have contradicted itself.
1568401 nah i aint mad just stating some facts about the differences and sorry if i came off that way.
It is always refreshing to see a Celestia centered fic with her being shown outside of the stereotypes of "Trollestia/Molestia" showing up in the story. She never seems to get enough proper attention, however you are doing one hell of a job in portraying her in this rather amazing story. I like how the format of this story is going so far, the flashbacks in the start giving the basis of his first encounters, while the rest of the chapter is dedicated to the day to day activities of the reader and the relationship with Celestia. Your portrayal of her is just amazing, and you're doing a damn good job with it being a second person story.
My thoughts are slightly discombobulated right now, but lots of words short damn fine job, and I look forward to more amazing chapters from you as I wholeheartedly love reading this story.
Eh, I think I'm out. After this:
"If he bothers Luna, you will have him killed. It wouldn’t even be hard, especially considering he doesn’t lock his doors or windows."
I don't want to continue. I can't empathise with him at all - he's a horrible, selfish prick at best. Rooting for all the ponies giving him a hard time, while knowing they're all going to be shot down because he's the hero of the story... That's just torturing myself. So, I'm just going to step away.
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Mr. Derpsby,
Thanks for reading! I'm grateful that you took the time to read my story. It means a lot to me.
Thank you for the feedback as well. It's always good to know what my readers think.
However, I'm not forcing you to read the story. If you don't want to read it, that's fine. Don't read it.
The quote you included in your comment was solely meant for comedy. It wasn't supposed to be taken seriously. At all. I'm not going to have the protagonist of the story murder anybody. It's not that kind of story.
I'm sorry you did not enjoy the story.
Have a splendid evening.
ScatMan
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Heh. That is quite a reading failure on my part then.
Wrong as it was, I was ready to take it at face value... Strange, really. And, I wanted to note: I didn't downvote your story, or anything like that. It's fairly well-written, I think. It's just, ah - something about the guy sets my teeth on edge, and I'm not sure I can articulate precisely what. In any case: Seeing just how much I'm prepared to think the worst of him, I doubt I could do your story any justice.
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Mr. Derpsby,
nevertheless, I am glad you took your time to read and critique my story.
It means a lot to me. Just so you know.
I'm sorry my protagonist angers you so. Trying to keep him as neutral as possible is something that I have not done very well, but whatever. I'm sorry you believe my story is strange. It is strange, I agree with you on that, but I'm sorry you don't like that.
I thank you for not voting down my story. That also means a lot to me.
Thank you for reading and commenting!
ScatMan
Keep up the great work, if it gets better I might put it in my top 5.
> Implying you care about my top 5 XD
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There is nothing in this world that I care about more than your top 5!
I shall double my efforts!
Thanks for reading!
With love,
ScatMan
MOAR!!!!!!! this is amazing so far can't wail for the next chapter keep up the good work
I eat the nuggets of humor in your story much like m&ms. Thank you, Scatman. The m&ms are tasty. Sillyness aside; I sincerely appreciate the humor of your writing. Considering how much you care about victorNoodle's top five, you might like to know that your story as well is among my all time favorites of the 4-5 dozen that I've read. Again, thanks a lot for this great great story. I'm very much looking forward to your upcoming work. Cheers, buddy!
Dear Mr. ScatMan2001,
MOAR CELESTIA WAIFU PLZ!
Sincerely,
Derpy Dom Esq. III
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My dearest Derpy Dom Esq. III,
OMG CHILL! Stop pressuring me!
Don't worry. Just be patient. I'm working.
Have a blessed day,
and may God have mercy on your soul,
ScatMan
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Oh, ok.
seriously though, great job so far.
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Don't cry! Prease!
It's OK!
I'm sorry.
Thank you for the compliment,
ScatMan
This line...
THIS. FUCKING. LINE.
You think of how wonderful life withh Celestia is. She is the kindest, most beautiful creature you have ever had the pleasure of even knowing.
Celestia is. She is the kindest, most beautiful creature you have ever had the pleasure.
kindest, beautiful
Apparently I haven't met Fluttershy yet. 1605700
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If you see the Sparkles as a noble family, there are a few more nobles with their heads out of their asses.
As for the story itself: 2nd person is not my favourite and I tend to avoid it, especially HiE stories. It's quite good, though.
I would, however, have handled that noble dude in an entirely different fashion. Pummeled him with words and arguments so hard he would be left speechless.
my answer to upper-crust assholes as followed quote Fuck your shit asshole unquote
Why do most of these canterlot based human stories have the human be part of the equestrian military?