Kind of underwhelming. A story like this needs a joke at the end, or a twist, or something. As it is, it feels kind of like reading a list. "And then this sex happened! "And then that sex happened!" "And then after that, you'd never have guessed...but this still yet other sex happened, what a surprise!"

Seems like you tried to have the twist be Celestia joining in on the sex bandwagon at the end. But by that point it felt like just another "and sex happened" in the list.

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Alright, let me see if I can get a redemption on a bonus chapter. Appreciate the criticism.

I agre whit 11550803 that this is mostly just "list of pepole I fucked" it did get a small chukle.
Some more refinment and expoliation and you might have a fun little sumt story.

Lol

nice work

I know what this story tries to do, but it just.... don't click to me.

I don't know wjy, but it just doesn't. I started to skip some parts halfway because it didn't grab my attention that much.

Again, don't know why but it did not get me in the mood (seriously, no pun intended) to read all of it.

Very stupid and silly, I love it.

So...what's Celestia going to do if Luna's conclusion to this situation is "don't fix it"?

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Probably something along the lines of, "Well, when in Rome..."

The real question is why doesn’t she already have a sex cult?

That said, this is really really rough. Misspelling “dragons”? Come on man. I know schools teach people not to use spell check but that’s just terrible.

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Wait, I'm confused, where did I misspell dragons?

Edit: Ah, found it, weird typo. Always trying to keep an eye out but my brain likes to overlook these.

2 instances of divine being misspelled as Devine, not sure why the capital D, idk if your device was auto correcting to a surname or what.

Good story tho, got a few chuckles out of me

Ok. I'm curious where this could go. I mean, just how crazy could this wacky world get?

Ok this is just funny, I can just picture her calmly explaining all this😂

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Yeah I feel like I need to watch the auto correct more than my own typos. Its come in handy plenty of times which is why I keep it on but it has its downsides.
Hopefully that covers all the typos in this.

Escalation is the name of the game when it comes to the rumor mill.... But even then that escalated INCREDIBLY quickly

Discord approves!

Luna leaned back and thought for a moment. "Well I haven't had sex with Starlight or Fluttershy yet."

"Oh thank the heavens, someponies who are still sensible."

"Their currently leading the Ponyville branch of my Sex Cult."

In our town, in our town...

But how are they doing that without their "divine mandate"?

Uh...damn. Most interesting,

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I liked it, I felt that the punchline was that luna had unironically wanted to get banished back to the moon rather than deal with the mess she made.

Nothing wrong with sex cults just so long as it's not gonna end in death

11551890
lets hope they dont murder fuck a chaos god into existence

I wonder how cadence is dealing with all of this

11552085
Probably either being proud or being jealous.

Enthusiastic long walks. Is that a Hellsing abridged reference I spy?

11552033
Well shit. It’s just like the elder all over again.

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Luna felt her jaw hit the floor as Celestia walked out the throne room butt naked. The realization hitting her like a ton of bricks. " Oh dear... Hmm... I was kind of banking on sister's help with this one. "

Wait is celestia going outside to join in on the orgy or to have sex?

Now I actually kind of want to see a chapter of what happens when she got out there.

But still did Tia just go out there to have sex.

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Yeah, I mention it in the bonus chapter, she went out to join the orgy. Also love seeing the Warhammer 40k references, just got into 40k a few months ago.

Thanks, it has pockets!

Oh, hey! I haven't seen Cult-leader Fluttershy in a while. (Or would that be Clit-leader Fluttershy now?) I just hope that Lord Smooze doesn't get jealous.