A man is transported into Equestria under mysterious circumstances, arriving as a clump of dormant cells, awoken by his metiorite's harsh impact. What awaits him next?
Interesting to see how fast he fell into cold and calculated infector. If most of the human population was given that power/infection I doubt the result would be any different.
Hmm, looking good so far, I get that he has been alone in his head for a long time and might be a little mad but he has gone almost full psycho lol. I do get the feeling that maybe he might get a wake up call later, maybe looking through the eyes of a pony as they are about to kill their foals or just a pony hiding and pleading for someone to save them and that snaps him out of it.
I also have a prediction but I'll put a spoiler bar over it in case it's even close to what's planned.
So it has been made clear that he has the minds and memories of the ponies he has infected in himself so maybe if/when he snaps out of psycho mode he can either reverse the infection or maybe grow them new bodies since we know he can make copies of organisms once he has "eaten" enough of them. Or maybe he is the villain of the story? Could go either way but I'm thinking he might snap out of it since he seemed like a regular guy before and with some of the comments you've made it looks like it might go that way.
So yeah, don't know if I'm even close with that prediction but the pieces are there so maybe, maybe not, either way, it's good so far, the pacing is good, can't see any obvious spelling/grammer mistakes and I commend you on all the scientific terms, if you are looking all those up then that's some dedication right there.
I get that he has been alone in his head for a long time and might be a little mad but he has gone almost full psycho lol
I may have overdone that a bit, but I think it's a somewhat logical reaction to what's happened to our protag. Also don't forget that he's hard coping with being a murderous asshole by trying to justify it with a 'sink or swim mentality'.
My options were as follows. Either a): I become a bleeding heart humanitarian and spare the poor creatures of this earth, remaining a slowly-spreading goo for the rest of my existence, or at the very least until the authorities find the grove of tree-spikes, and a mutilated body of a local farmer.
Or b): I come to terms with my situation, do whatever is needed, anticipate an intervention by building up a solid defense, and then... Well, ideally find a way to be human again, but at the very least secure my continued existence.
Wether or not the protag is right, is up to the reader.
So yeah, don't know if I'm even close with that prediction but the pieces are there so maybe, maybe not,
That's an interesting theory!
I commend you on all the scientific terms, if you are looking all those up then that's some dedication right there.
Funny story: I wanted to be a doctor when I was young, so looking up all the medical stuff was insanely fun, all the while adding a little something to the story. Glad you appreciated it!
11463924 Oh don't get me wrong, the first part wasn't a criticism, merely an observation, trust me, the fic I'm writing has a psycho Changeling queen eating people, at least your protag has the excuse of thinking he will die if he doesn't do it.
He does seem to be very balsa about making people into living bombs but if that's the character then that's the character, I wouldn't expect nor want you to change them from what you have planned. Although, if he is meant to be reluctant but resigned then that isn't shining through yet but again, if that's the idea then it's all good.
That's an interesting theory!
Thanks Yeah, don't know if it's even in the ballpark but it's the vibe I'm getting, could be way off of course.
Funny story: I wanted to be a doctor when I was young, so looking up all the medical stuff was insanely fun, all the while adding a little something to the story. Glad you appreciated it!
I get ya, did the same with my Changeling story and went done the rabbit hole of bug body parts lol.
I get ya, sis the same with my Changeling story and went done the rabbit hole of bug body parts lol.
Had enthomology during my first year of uni, that shit was weird as hell. I remember some guys found a live praying mantis at our uni's doorstep in november! My buddy nearly fainted when that thing tried to chew on the skin of his finger lol. Idk why he was so afraid of it, I don't think it even broke the skin of my palm when it tried to do the same.
Oh don't get me wrong, the first part wasn't a criticism, merely an observation,
It's all good, I'm just coping with not being confident in my abilities to write a character by trying to rationalise his actions that I though through and considered at least somewhat logical.
It's all good, I'm just coping with not being confident in my abilities to write a character by trying to rationalise his actions that I though through and considered at least somewhat logical.
Yeah, I know that feeling, it's going to be one of the big things I will have to work with on my own fic, not so much yet but later on they are going to have that kind of conflict with how the world I've made works.
11463948 i mean its logical in a how to infect and kill the most people way, he didnt have that much of a moral quandry about braeburn except seeing him in the mirror
I have no idea what your name is, or if you even have one anynore, infection. But I would advise scouting out the rest of the area. Might be some Buffalo you can find... heheh.
Hmm interesting, very curious makes me wonder what he's endgame is exactly, BTW the moment carriers were brought up I am thinking... This guy (The character) has played a lot of Halo...
Then again... The Gravemind might be one of the best mass assimilators one could emulate.
Hmm, I was expecting a more gradual decline rather than a complete drop-off of empathy, but this should still be interesting, nonetheless.
I'm hoping there's a turn about where he realizes the weight of what he's doing.
Edit: looking back at the tags, I doubt it.
I really love the fact that you go into detail for all the processes that are happening, especially the sun light resistant cells.
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Isolation tends to do scary things to people, having no one to stop or criticize you has the same effect.
Our protag definitely needs an intervention, or at the very least somepony with a different perspective than him.
Damn this is dark, I like it though. The guy turned into a psychopath quicker than I thought he would
Just read up to this point and found this song that I find fits this story. https://youtu.be/t8hURaX54GA
Interesting to see how fast he fell into cold and calculated infector. If most of the human population was given that power/infection I doubt the result would be any different.
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Hmm, looking good so far, I get that he has been alone in his head for a long time and might be a little mad but he has gone almost full psycho lol.
I do get the feeling that maybe he might get a wake up call later, maybe looking through the eyes of a pony as they are about to kill their foals or just a pony hiding and pleading for someone to save them and that snaps him out of it.
I also have a prediction but I'll put a spoiler bar over it in case it's even close to what's planned.
So it has been made clear that he has the minds and memories of the ponies he has infected in himself so maybe if/when he snaps out of psycho mode he can either reverse the infection or maybe grow them new bodies since we know he can make copies of organisms once he has "eaten" enough of them. Or maybe he is the villain of the story? Could go either way but I'm thinking he might snap out of it since he seemed like a regular guy before and with some of the comments you've made it looks like it might go that way.
So yeah, don't know if I'm even close with that prediction but the pieces are there so maybe, maybe not, either way, it's good so far, the pacing is good, can't see any obvious spelling/grammer mistakes and I commend you on all the scientific terms, if you are looking all those up then that's some dedication right there.
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I may have overdone that a bit, but I think it's a somewhat logical reaction to what's happened to our protag. Also don't forget that he's hard coping with being a murderous asshole by trying to justify it with a 'sink or swim mentality'.
Wether or not the protag is right, is up to the reader.
That's an interesting theory!
Funny story: I wanted to be a doctor when I was young, so looking up all the medical stuff was insanely fun, all the while adding a little something to the story. Glad you appreciated it!
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Oh don't get me wrong, the first part wasn't a criticism, merely an observation, trust me, the fic I'm writing has a psycho Changeling queen eating people, at least your protag has the excuse of thinking he will die if he doesn't do it.
He does seem to be very balsa about making people into living bombs but if that's the character then that's the character, I wouldn't expect nor want you to change them from what you have planned. Although, if he is meant to be reluctant but resigned then that isn't shining through yet but again, if that's the idea then it's all good.
Thanks Yeah, don't know if it's even in the ballpark but it's the vibe I'm getting, could be way off of course.
I get ya, did the same with my Changeling story and went done the rabbit hole of bug body parts lol.
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Had enthomology during my first year of uni, that shit was weird as hell. I remember some guys found a live praying mantis at our uni's doorstep in november! My buddy nearly fainted when that thing tried to chew on the skin of his finger lol. Idk why he was so afraid of it, I don't think it even broke the skin of my palm when it tried to do the same.
It's all good, I'm just coping with not being confident in my abilities to write a character by trying to rationalise his actions that I though through and considered at least somewhat logical.
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Yeah, I know that feeling, it's going to be one of the big things I will have to work with on my own fic, not so much yet but later on they are going to have that kind of conflict with how the world I've made works.
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i mean its logical in a how to infect and kill the most people way, he didnt have that much of a moral quandry about braeburn except seeing him in the mirror
So he's like, half zombie virus, half Blacklight virus?
This story is very interesting, I look forwards to seeing more of it.
Interesting. Continue.
I get the feeling that the protag has become a sentient piece of the sludge that you fight in StarCraft.
So is this a sociopath in equestria story or is there no pretence to immersion here.
I have no idea what your name is, or if you even have one anynore, infection. But I would advise scouting out the rest of the area. Might be some Buffalo you can find... heheh.
And just like that i hate him and root for the ponies to wipe him out.
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Yeah, the dude's a dingus.
I was hoping this story would not be like this...another hopeful story down the drain.
Hey, this story gonna be updated anytime soon? Or did it die in it's infancy?
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I think it's that weird black shit from rainbow six siege DLC
I like the story and how you can tell the guy is getting his humanity taken from him
Hmm interesting, very curious makes me wonder what he's endgame is exactly, BTW the moment carriers were brought up I am thinking... This guy (The character) has played a lot of Halo...
Then again... The Gravemind might be one of the best mass assimilators one could emulate.
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Let's see what he's got.
is this story dead?
Ded story lol
this story fucking rules
Yeah. I was naive when I wrote the first comment. Okay. Let's see what happens next.
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Redheart better survive this fic. I will go ballistic if she doesn't.
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She's a cutie patootie, James wouldn't have the heart to hurt her, right?