Somehow this is the most dubious of consent I've read on this site. I'm not big on pregnancy play but it was still a hot scene. I'm interested in the mystery of this, too, though partly because that hits a memory play/mind control kind of angle.
Oh, shit. She planned this to happen during her heat? Fuck, that's unexpected and hot. You're really creative, you know that? I hope there is still some more mystery to solve and more questions to answer.
11324134 Thanks! Yeah, it's pretty fucking dubious. lol. I almost don't want to explain what exactly happened, because then you might lose that serious dub-con sensation. There's obviously some mind-fuckery going on...
11324139 Thanks! I doubt it's good writing, but I appreciate the input. I need to review/clean up the whole thing, so we'll see if I can refine the 2nd chapter a bit to be a little more spicy.
11324154 11324159 You know I love when you post on my stories! You're still my favorite author on the site. lol. Thanks for the comments! I'm far from clever, but some things seem to work. I have leagues to travel before I can write dubious steamy scenes like you can. The next bit is just porn, which will probably be poorly written, but I do intend to close this one out. This warrants three ends, two of which are comedy and one of which is the actual end. lol
11324214 It is quite good writing, both grammatically and especially on story progression. Even more so considering the average standard of clopfics.
And the second chapter is plenty spicy (I assume), it's just that I'm geared towards hypno/mc and other more exotic concepts like that. So when I read the second chapter my brain goes: "Shame we moved from the subtle implications of memory manipulation to the boring vanilla stuff of getting-fucked-from-both-sides-by-a-married-couple-while-collared-and-chained-with-real-gold-and-dozens-of-exotic-spells-in-front-of-most-of-your-friends-neighbors-and-business-acquaintances-all-waiting-their-own-turn-at-your-holes." It's definitely not through any fault of your own writing.
11324239 I guess that might be vanilla... Hmm... Should I have turned up the mind control? I thought that it was subtle without being too subtle, For example : She somehow keeps ending up where she needs to be She clicks everything in place with the overly complicated fetish setup without thinking about it Something is very clearly messing with her mind, especially in the second chapter. She waivers between completely into it, and alarmed and confused. Even the seemingly positive sensations usually have negative descriptions like "It wanted to run", "she couldn't twist away", and "She blinked back a panicked tear, unsure of if it was from fear or ecstasy".
11324263 To clarify, that was meant jokingly. I'm saying my brain tends to treat anything purely physical as "vanilla", regardless of actual kink factor. I'm pretty sure most people won't actually think that way, that's why I phrased it the way I did. Don't take my comments as a reason to change your story from what you planned, I'm probably not representative of your audience.
It definitely was just the right amount to subtle and I enjoyed it very much. Please don't start doubting yourself because of my failed attempt at joking, you're doing great.
Could Twilight always have had a hidden Jekyll and Hyde split personality that finally surfaced on its own? I think it's more likely that this is Discord's doing. He'd be thinking, "Oh, Twilight, you're much too boring! It's time you lived a little!"
11324665 Legit, one of the secret endings, non canon, is DIscord and Fluttershy sitting in Discord's house eating popcorn. Discord is like "Holy shit, she's actually going through with it! It was supposed to be a joke!" and Fluttershy is 120% toked and all "Told ya. I'm blitzed, but I think that means I get to wear the strap tonight, and you get to wear the ears, right?"
11324726 11324672 Somehow I haven't been writing much actual porn lately, so I figured I'd do that here. Glad you liked it, and thanks for the comments!
I feel torn. On one hand the story is well written, on the other I can help but feel that the mind control aspect is deeply disturbing for me (though that is probably a "me" problem)
Best case appears to be that Twilight indeed planned and set up everything herself and then cast a mind-altering spell to (temporarily?) forget about it (though why would still bei the question here - to make it extra kinky? It would be a pretty fucked up thing to do, even If the victim is yourself.) The other options become really dark in a hurry, quickly moving the entire thing into actual rape and mindrape territory
I find myself with some (rather morbid) curiosity as to what is behind all this, perhaps the author has some benign twist prepared, but as mentioned above, even the best case scenario seems to be on the questionable side (E.g. is there a failsafe in case mind-altered Twilight really doesn't like what is happening or things simply go wrong? She already seems rather reluctant with the Cakes...). Still, there is a Comedy Tag and not a Dark Tag, so lets hope...
My guess is that the culprit is Twilight's own sex drive that took on a personality of its own because it had been repressed for too long and took over Twilight's mind without her knowing and set everything up. Could be that Twilight had all these sexual fantasies that she locked away in her head and left her sexually frustrated until it reached that point. Her sex drive personality then decided to make her fantasies a reality.
11325027 I'm in deep, so I don't notice the shallow waters. I don't think this one quite deserves the dark tag, but I have outside knowledge. However, certainly don't read it if it makes you uncomfortable! Thanks for the comment! I appreciate your feedback.
11325508 It's not a bad hypothesis. Let's test it! The real question is how do we run a test like that? Thanks for the comment!
11326333 Nope. If you're down with NSFW pics, check the number on derpi. Or search for artist:Selenophile on derpi. It's based off a series of images that should be easy to identify based on what's here. There's a bunch of great alts!
Hmm… That was some surprisingly good breeder fetish popping up in what I thought would be just a standard-issue gangbang fic. Now I’m interested to see where the rest of it goes (though honestly, I’m worried about how short the latter chapters are.)
Somehow this is the most dubious of consent I've read on this site. I'm not big on pregnancy play but it was still a hot scene. I'm interested in the mystery of this, too, though partly because that hits a memory play/mind control kind of angle.
Oh, shit. She planned this to happen during her heat? Fuck, that's unexpected and hot. You're really creative, you know that? I hope there is still some more mystery to solve and more questions to answer.
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Thanks! Yeah, it's pretty fucking dubious. lol. I almost don't want to explain what exactly happened, because then you might lose that serious dub-con sensation. There's obviously some mind-fuckery going on...
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Thanks! I doubt it's good writing, but I appreciate the input. I need to review/clean up the whole thing, so we'll see if I can refine the 2nd chapter a bit to be a little more spicy.
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You know I love when you post on my stories! You're still my favorite author on the site. lol. Thanks for the comments! I'm far from clever, but some things seem to work. I have leagues to travel before I can write dubious steamy scenes like you can. The next bit is just porn, which will probably be poorly written, but I do intend to close this one out. This warrants three ends, two of which are comedy and one of which is the actual end. lol
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It is quite good writing, both grammatically and especially on story progression. Even more so considering the average standard of clopfics.
And the second chapter is plenty spicy (I assume), it's just that I'm geared towards hypno/mc and other more exotic concepts like that. So when I read the second chapter my brain goes: "Shame we moved from the subtle implications of memory manipulation to the boring vanilla stuff of getting-fucked-from-both-sides-by-a-married-couple-while-collared-and-chained-with-real-gold-and-dozens-of-exotic-spells-in-front-of-most-of-your-friends-neighbors-and-business-acquaintances-all-waiting-their-own-turn-at-your-holes." It's definitely not through any fault of your own writing.
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I guess that might be vanilla... Hmm... Should I have turned up the mind control? I thought that it was subtle without being too subtle, For example :
She somehow keeps ending up where she needs to be
She clicks everything in place with the overly complicated fetish setup without thinking about it
Something is very clearly messing with her mind, especially in the second chapter. She waivers between completely into it, and alarmed and confused. Even the seemingly positive sensations usually have negative descriptions like "It wanted to run", "she couldn't twist away", and "She blinked back a panicked tear, unsure of if it was from fear or ecstasy".
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To clarify, that was meant jokingly. I'm saying my brain tends to treat anything purely physical as "vanilla", regardless of actual kink factor. I'm pretty sure most people won't actually think that way, that's why I phrased it the way I did. Don't take my comments as a reason to change your story from what you planned, I'm probably not representative of your audience.
It definitely was just the right amount to subtle and I enjoyed it very much. Please don't start doubting yourself because of my failed attempt at joking, you're doing great.
Well, no doubt that it was Twilight herself that wanted to do this in any case.
I mean, who else would schedule this down to assigning ponies time slots?
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IKR? Thanks for the comment!
The premise sounded pretty cool. Nicely written.
Could Twilight always have had a hidden Jekyll and Hyde split personality that finally surfaced on its own?
I think it's more likely that this is Discord's doing. He'd be thinking, "Oh, Twilight, you're much too boring! It's time you lived a little!"
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Legit, one of the secret endings, non canon, is DIscord and Fluttershy sitting in Discord's house eating popcorn. Discord is like "Holy shit, she's actually going through with it! It was supposed to be a joke!" and Fluttershy is 120% toked and all "Told ya. I'm blitzed, but I think that means I get to wear the strap tonight, and you get to wear the ears, right?"
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Thanks for the comment!
Very, very hot fucking of Twilight. Oh, she's gonna be happy by the end. Sore, but happy!
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Somehow I haven't been writing much actual porn lately, so I figured I'd do that here. Glad you liked it, and thanks for the comments!
I can think of two ponies who might be crazy enough to mind-control themselves to make a rape-play fetish into the real thing. And Twi is one of them.
I feel torn. On one hand the story is well written, on the other I can help but feel that the mind control aspect is deeply disturbing for me (though that is probably a "me" problem)
Best case appears to be that Twilight indeed planned and set up everything herself and then cast a mind-altering spell to (temporarily?) forget about it (though why would still bei the question here - to make it extra kinky? It would be a pretty fucked up thing to do, even If the victim is yourself.) The other options become really dark in a hurry, quickly moving the entire thing into actual rape and mindrape territory
I find myself with some (rather morbid) curiosity as to what is behind all this, perhaps the author has some benign twist prepared, but as mentioned above, even the best case scenario seems to be on the questionable side (E.g. is there a failsafe in case mind-altered Twilight really doesn't like what is happening or things simply go wrong? She already seems rather reluctant with the Cakes...). Still, there is a Comedy Tag and not a Dark Tag, so lets hope...
My guess is that the culprit is Twilight's own sex drive that took on a personality of its own because it had been repressed for too long and took over Twilight's mind without her knowing and set everything up. Could be that Twilight had all these sexual fantasies that she locked away in her head and left her sexually frustrated until it reached that point. Her sex drive personality then decided to make her fantasies a reality.
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And the other is Trixie! Thanks!
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I'm in deep, so I don't notice the shallow waters. I don't think this one quite deserves the dark tag, but I have outside knowledge. However, certainly don't read it if it makes you uncomfortable! Thanks for the comment! I appreciate your feedback.
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It's not a bad hypothesis. Let's test it! The real question is how do we run a test like that? Thanks for the comment!
Panties?
Is this supposed to be anthro?
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Nope. If you're down with NSFW pics, check the number on derpi. Or search for artist:Selenophile on derpi. It's based off a series of images that should be easy to identify based on what's here. There's a bunch of great alts!
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What horrible blasphemy to put panties on a pony in the first place
Hmm… That was some surprisingly good breeder fetish popping up in what I thought would be just a standard-issue gangbang fic. Now I’m interested to see where the rest of it goes (though honestly, I’m worried about how short the latter chapters are.)
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Don't worry. I'm happy to disappoint, as always!