Rarities answer was nervous, and she didn’t quite make eye contact as she carefully spoke

Figured you'd want this pointed out. Know you meant "Rarity's" There.

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Bam! Fixed! Thanks! You're the first comment on this. Lol. It's been in the feature box for 12 hours and I still don't know if people like it.

Let me know if you see anything else! Like I said, I just wrote and posted this... I should probably go back and actually properly edit this.

I'm scared to read it! What if it's terrible? Lol.

Some great writing here. The first half of this chapter really had me hooked.
I'll admit I'm less involved/interested in the "regular" kinky times of the second chapter, but I'm still going to be watching this to see where the MC memory alteration plot goes. (Going by your other works there seems to be a good chance that it was indeed Twilight's own doing which is a fairly unique and interesting take on the concept, but I'm interested to see where it goes either way).

This is kinky, clever, and provocative. Obviously past Twilight wanted all of this set up, but also wanted to be intimidated, afraid, uncomfortable, scared--this is just so good. So far it's alternated between dread and arousal, exactly how I imagine Twilight feels. Very nice!

This is nuts in the best possible way. :D Twilight, what did you do and who's gonna do you? How did this get set up? I'm intrigued by the mysteries, here. Also, great description of what she's wearing and the set-up.