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good, I look forward to continuing
Dont get me wrong, i really like this concept but... what is this grammar!?? Where are the comas and the full stops? This is missing so much punctuation.
Im telling you this not because i want to hate on you or your editor, but because i want this story to succeed and be good.
A good tip i can give you is to write your chapters in google docs since its auto correct is really good at punctuation.
Btw, sick cover art ;>
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thanks, I promise to improve
Proofread? My guy, there are a lot of errors.
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Hi, I am the one responsible for the lack of punctuation in this story, I should've paid more attention when translating the story, I'm sorry that I made it harder to enjoy a very solid chapter with much potential, please give this story a chance it is worth the read... and L., sorry I let you down in this one man, I know you said you this fic was very important to you, I'll do my best not to let this happen again... once again, sorry.
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thank you very much and don't worry I know you've been busy just take it easier next time
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Dont worry my man, i would read this story with errors and all, but i am glad you will put some more effort into it. I believe this story can be great even with its flaws
Take your time, it makes the overall quality better as opposed to if you just burnt yourself out in 2 chapters :)
As someone suggested, Google docs is great to help with spelling etc, but used in combination with Grammerly (A free add on) you can usally get 99% of errors. Highly recommend that combo.
so the tree of harmony is saying they are early and the everfree spirit is summoning a human spirit to use its new body. I look forward to seeing how this goes
Only the first chapter but I am already intrigued. The dialogue is a little hard to follow but otherwise passable.
I look forward to seeing where this story goes!
great story so far and this is only chapter 1
not a bad concept... many have commented about 'grammar' and 'spelling', ya there are mistakes, but the biggest and easiest to correct... Never, ever, ever have more than ONE person speak in one paragraph. New person talking, new paragraph. This is a must, it tells the reader 'hey something changed'. Nothing was worse than running Rarity and Rainbow dashes thoughts together... except maybe Celestia and Pinkie... <shivers in terror>
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I agree, I've been working on it don't worry
(NICE PICTURE )
Oh dear God. Talk about a strong start. Poor Lyra tho.
Quotes need to end with some type of stop, you shouldn't have quotes that don't end empty. Any kind of stop(period, exclamation, question mark) should work so long as there is one, for example in an action tag as well as capitalization after the quote as its considered two separate sentences:
"Pinkie gasped before running off to who knows where." She turned around not bothering to follow after her.
Or a comma if you're going to continue the sentence with a said/shouted/etc tag, but if you do, the continuation after the quotes shouldn't be capitalized since it's still considered the same sentence:
"Pinkie gasped before running off to who knows where," moaned Twilight.
Course' you can still end with question marks or exclamations though. You should check out the fimfiction writing guide, it's a great resource to use.