great story so far

I like this story, it's creative. My only complaint is that this Author shoves way too much into single sentences.

This sentence is 64 words long.

The poor rookie took off at maximum speed to the nearest exit of the forest without noticing his partner who was chasing him barely containing his laughter and the strange bird made of twigs and leaves which camouflaged itself so well with the environment that no one realized that it was already the third time that night that they ran into one of those.

Got to take a deep breath to read this sentence. This is one single sentence and it is 177 words long.

After the disaster in the town, name I refuse to mention, I went back to Zecora and explained what had happened, at first I was a little confused that the ponies could do something like that, then she told me how the ponies of that town were, she told me how kind they were what they seemed like and that I had never seen them act evil until I asked her why they attacked me and she did not know what to answer, it was there that I found out that she had never really met the inhabitants of the town she only went shopping, but always As she went there didn't seem to be anyone to attend to her, the face she made when I made her realize that the ponies were actually avoiding her, and the things I had heard the ponies say while they were throwing stones at me... I didn't feel bad about it anymore. had done in the village even if my body has something to do with it I don't care

Monk

Started reading this before work....now I am reading it after work and I am glad to see a equestria that isn't all rainbows and sunshine

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