Twilight's experiment went wrong. The castle's defenses activated, trapping a bimbofying spell inside, while Shining Armor has to deal with the consequences. Smutty fun with Barb and a few other girls ensues.
And she is supposed to be smart? How does she always get into this "messy situations". I mean look;
An incident on the same level as "I cast the Want-It-Need-It Spell and now I'm getting gangbanged by half the town" or "I invited Queen Chrysalis over for a friendship lesson and now she is nearly invincible, after raping the everloving crap out of me and my friends".
When did this happened!!??
And now this; Using Sombra's own horn to somehow make a Bimbo/Mind Corruption combo?
I think Twilight herself is highly SUS of secretly being a total slut. Even IF she "denies" it.
Because, all of these sexual situations she keeps making is a big coincidence.
An incident on the same level as "I cast the Want-It-Need-It Spell and now I'm getting gangbanged by half the town" or "I invited Queen Chrysalis over for a friendship lesson and now she is nearly invincible, after raping the everloving crap out of me and my friends".
We need a prequel of this story, stat! Maybe two. Depends on the details.
11322157 And the funny thing is right even though this situation was used for good copies I can actually see Twilight trying to make another crystal heart and I mean main universe Twilight
I must say that it has been a long time since the last time I commented on any of your stories.
Fortunately, it's good that I'm back after a long absence.
I must say that the story caught my attention. Especially since you selected an image of Suirano, who for me is indeed one of the best MLP artists. Saying this, let us continue.
The idea of doing a story around Spike or rather, Barbara or Barb for short.
It is interesting that an "incest" is involved, since although Barb is adopted, he is not exactly a blood brother and we could not count it as incest, but, understandable.
In addition to that, I like the fact that you make Shining Armor a sex machine, considering that Cadence is an alicorn and the princess of love, I think you could have given Shining Armor a little more level. But hey, the writer is you, and if you say that Shining is the dominant one, who am I to say otherwise.
The final scene in the bathroom is very erotic, I must say that you took it very calmly and made it look natural, which I personally liked a lot.
I think there is nothing more to say, except that I will eagerly await the next chapter, and if possible, I would like to contact you to find out if I could commission a story from you at some point.
11323099 Because you are one, Towan. At least to me.
11321793 You will have to wait and see. But Twilight is certainly going to do her best not to follow her slutified bodies needs and instincts...for now.
11322619 It certainly won't be just fun and roses for him, although I would point out this is still intended to be a maledom story. So, I cannot promise that it will have "good" ending. Well, depends on what you would interpret as "good".
11321882 Funnily enough, the initial idea for this story was just based on looking through Suirano pics and wanting to justify such bodies. So, yeah...that picture of Barb and her proportions is her actual look in the story. At least, we try to replicate that style.
11323166 Wishful thinking, sadly. Though I did pick my avatar from one of DarkGal's stories (second one, I believe), 'cause I liked the picture and the story they used it for. In fact, DarkGal and some others have inspired me to write more seriously and influenced me heavily.
Been writing privately with Towan for some time, but I've been lurking on fimfiction before that. Its been his suggestion to start being more active here, currently through collabs with him. I've been involved with the Breakin In stories, for example.
This story is my first big project. Though, Towan is holding the reigns here, which is why he is publishing it.
11323211 Ah well nice to meet you then, and keep up the excellent work! Perhaps we can collab down the road too; I've just recently gotten into writing here myself, and I've got some similar stuff in the pipeline. Depending on how busy work is, I should be able to submit something interesting to Dezmo's contest soon.
Shining Armor: "Twilight, what stupid did you do this time?"
Finally some bimbo from you and I really liked the writing of this fic. By the way, is it my idea or is there a new fic from you every month?
nice work
Shining is definitely gonna make her sister ( Twilight ) regret that. 😏
Well, when hasn’t Twilight screwed anything up? It happens all the time.
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And she is supposed to be smart? How does she always get into this "messy situations". I mean look;
When did this happened!!??
And now this; Using Sombra's own horn to somehow make a Bimbo/Mind Corruption combo?
I think Twilight herself is highly SUS of secretly being a total slut. Even IF she "denies" it.
Because, all of these sexual situations she keeps making is a big coincidence.
Some very competently done tsundere: good work.
Excellent pacing and balance of caving and resisting which implies just how much she likes it.
Shining's kinda basic in this one, but whatevs, you made it work.
Since Twilight's in panic mode I assume she'll hold out just a little longer than the rest?
We need a prequel of this story, stat! Maybe two. Depends on the details.
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She’s secretly into it, I guess.
Incest and no Shakespearicles? What is the world coming to?
Holy fuck Barb has an ass on her in that pic.
Red alert, red alert, excessive horny detected.
Deploy the KGB Anti-Horny division. Send those fuckers to Horny Gulag.
Anyways, good story.
11321852
wait for it...
11322020
he hasent been on in 7 houres so i expect him to apper within a few days. or on the weekend
11321756
Twilight is the perfect example of a d&d character with high intelligence and low wisdom
11322114
Interestingly, she seems to take the optimized wizard route of having her second-highest roll in Constitution.
11322157
And the funny thing is right even though this situation was used for good copies I can actually see Twilight trying to make another crystal heart and I mean main universe Twilight
Because Twilight in Canon even though she respects the power of magic she doesn't fully comprehend the damage magic can do example point of shadows
> tfw you get trapped in a castle with a bunch of soon-to-be sex-addicted bimbos
"Oh...oh noooooo..."
Thanks for chapter!
Have a good day!
Hoping Shining fertilized a batch of eggs in Barb! The Crystal Empire needs more heroes!
I just hope Shining Armor gets affected too and becomes an air headed himbo by the end that gets fucked repeatedly as karma.
Ok Buddy! DUDE!
I must say that it has been a long time since the last time I commented on any of your stories.
Fortunately, it's good that I'm back after a long absence.
I must say that the story caught my attention. Especially since you selected an image of Suirano, who for me is indeed one of the best MLP artists. Saying this, let us continue.
The idea of doing a story around Spike or rather, Barbara or Barb for short.
It is interesting that an "incest" is involved, since although Barb is adopted, he is not exactly a blood brother and we could not count it as incest, but, understandable.
In addition to that, I like the fact that you make Shining Armor a sex machine, considering that Cadence is an alicorn and the princess of love, I think you could have given Shining Armor a little more level.
But hey, the writer is you, and if you say that Shining is the dominant one, who am I to say otherwise.
The final scene in the bathroom is very erotic, I must say that you took it very calmly and made it look natural, which I personally liked a lot.
I think there is nothing more to say, except that I will eagerly await the next chapter, and if possible, I would like to contact you to find out if I could commission a story from you at some point.
11322619
I think the joke is that he's already pretty much a himbo in canon.
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Ironically, I am writing Shining Armor's segments and my friend does call me a himbo.
11323099
Because you are one, Towan. At least to me.
11321793
You will have to wait and see. But Twilight is certainly going to do her best not to follow her slutified bodies needs and instincts...for now.
11322619
It certainly won't be just fun and roses for him, although I would point out this is still intended to be a maledom story. So, I cannot promise that it will have "good" ending. Well, depends on what you would interpret as "good".
11321882
Funnily enough, the initial idea for this story was just based on looking through Suirano pics and wanting to justify such bodies. So, yeah...that picture of Barb and her proportions is her actual look in the story. At least, we try to replicate that style.
11323113
I recognize that pic; a fan of DarkGal?
...Or perhaps you've returned? Could be based on the writing style, if this was a collab.
Or maybe just wishful thinking. I hope they're ok.
11323166
Wishful thinking, sadly. Though I did pick my avatar from one of DarkGal's stories (second one, I believe), 'cause I liked the picture and the story they used it for. In fact, DarkGal and some others have inspired me to write more seriously and influenced me heavily.
Been writing privately with Towan for some time, but I've been lurking on fimfiction before that. Its been his suggestion to start being more active here, currently through collabs with him. I've been involved with the Breakin In stories, for example.
This story is my first big project. Though, Towan is holding the reigns here, which is why he is publishing it.
11323211
Ah well nice to meet you then, and keep up the excellent work! Perhaps we can collab down the road too; I've just recently gotten into writing here myself, and I've got some similar stuff in the pipeline. Depending on how busy work is, I should be able to submit something interesting to Dezmo's contest soon.
Reign holding? Kinky.
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I'm pseudo-interested.
Sorry, couldn't really get into this one, Shining Armor is too much of an asshole.
Necesitamos más historias de Barb
Sure, let's see where this goes.
11323211
In that case, I'll follow you, your ideas are great.