personally i'd sort out this equestria the way i sorted out vegas and the way i wanted to sort out skyrim. everyone's an idiot, time for my regime of generaly not being an asshole to nice people but god help the bad people. regardless of old world political crap, older world overly harshness, horrible non nord racism or elven bootlicker imperialism. but thats just me, anyway, keep writing, interesting stuff so far.
Hey are going to see Darren and Zachery show how powerful they are later because so far they seem kind of weak. also are we going to see other fallout characters? like the two wastelanders companions?
I am guessing the "no" is because, arguably the two most powerful and influential people in the wastelands are gone and who knows how much farther down the shitter it will go with their absence
This look of hope was then decisively squashed by Zachary's answer, "No."
...I love this part. Best part in the whole story. After being brought there and hit on by her friends and everybody, I'm darn sure that she deserved it.
2627229 Also, they really have no stake in Equestria's affairs (and as you noted, plenty of their own affairs to take care of), have no way of knowing whether or not what Twilight is saying is true, and most importantly... She did kidnap them.
I imagine that if I were in a similar situation I wouldn't be too inclined to help my kidnapper regardless of what sob story they told me.
Sorry, but you just jump straight in with the characters meeting each other, there's no build up or anything, it sort of ruins it for me. Otherwise it's an okay story.
2627467 YOU!!! When are you going to continue "My Little Brony: Reality vs Fantasy", huh?!?!? It's what got me into MLP in the first place! At least post onto fimfiction, or something! I REALLY want to keep reading it.
2628560 Sorry if you don't like it. But, if you think it's at least 'ok' then I'm on the right track and I can improve. At least you were willing to point out why you disliked it. Honestly there was supposed to be a little more build up, but..... plans change. And I'm still going to use the scenes I'd originally planned for the build up as a flash back in the next couple of chapters for when Twilight explains how she discovered the wastelands. Your opinions are appreciated and I hope you'll stick around for the rest of the story.....
well I'm just going to take a seat and watch this play out over here to the side of the fan.
anyway good work. its certainly long enough but it does feel a bit rushed somehow (don't ask I just got this gut feeling towards the end) other then that I have no complaints, one request though, kill blueblood; I don't care how just kill him. keep it up +1 favorite
I love the subtle nod you gave to Zachary's dead mother. Though, I have a feeling I shouldn't.
Cliffhanger
Two wastelanders and a pony...sounds like a walk into a bar joke...IMMA READ IT
back the ohter will say yes lol
Speech 100 I take it?
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I was thinking that as well. I was waiting for him to growl at Darren for making a comment about it...
personally i'd sort out this equestria the way i sorted out vegas and the way i wanted to sort out skyrim. everyone's an idiot, time for my regime of generaly not being an asshole to nice people but god help the bad people. regardless of old world political crap, older world overly harshness, horrible non nord racism or elven bootlicker imperialism. but thats just me, anyway, keep writing, interesting stuff so far.
Hey are going to see Darren and Zachery show how powerful they are later because so far they seem kind of weak. also are we going to see other fallout characters? like the two wastelanders companions?
2627026 Yes to the first. No to the second..... For now.
2627025............ I like you.
Really. You really think the "Shoot all, kill all" tactic will actually prevent a problem from escalating.
…You really should have expected that, Twilight.
Sometimes, good is far from nice.
I am guessing the "no" is because, arguably the two most powerful and influential people in the wastelands are gone and who knows how much farther down the shitter it will go with their absence
...I love this part. Best part in the whole story. After being brought there and hit on by her friends and everybody, I'm darn sure that she deserved it.
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Also, they really have no stake in Equestria's affairs (and as you noted, plenty of their own affairs to take care of), have no way of knowing whether or not what Twilight is saying is true, and most importantly... She did kidnap them.
I imagine that if I were in a similar situation I wouldn't be too inclined to help my kidnapper regardless of what sob story they told me.
Sorry, but you just jump straight in with the characters meeting each other, there's no build up or anything, it sort of ruins it for me. Otherwise it's an okay story.
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YOU!!! When are you going to continue "My Little Brony: Reality vs Fantasy", huh?!?!? It's what got me into MLP in the first place! At least post onto fimfiction, or something! I REALLY want to keep reading it.
2628560 Sorry if you don't like it. But, if you think it's at least 'ok' then I'm on the right track and I can improve. At least you were willing to point out why you disliked it. Honestly there was supposed to be a little more build up, but..... plans change. And I'm still going to use the scenes I'd originally planned for the build up as a flash back in the next couple of chapters for when Twilight explains how she discovered the wastelands. Your opinions are appreciated and I hope you'll stick around for the rest of the story.....
well I'm just going to take a seat and watch this play out over here to the side of the fan.
anyway good work. its certainly long enough but it does feel a bit rushed somehow (don't ask I just got this gut feeling towards the end) other then that I have no complaints, one request though, kill blueblood; I don't care how just kill him. keep it up
+1 favorite
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That or Dream Crusher perk.
And then he crushed their hopes and dreams...
before i read this i just want to say the title sounds like a walk into a bar joke...
SO! two wastelanders and a pony walk into a bar....
in the name name of everyone ever......DIS GONNA BE GOOD.
I guess Zachary has the Dream Crusher perk...