Alexander never realised how comfy girl's underwear actually was, especially the insides of the bra. She wondered why more clothes were not made like that.
Sure. The cups are nice, but you wouldn't be so quick to say that about the straps. Seriously, after a few hours, those will get annoying. Tight jeans are great, though. Those feel like your legs are being hugged. :3
She currently had a pair of jeans and a black leather jacket on for once, still with military boots on her feet, however.
Hm. Not my choice for indoor clothing, but it does make for a great look.
Despite the fact that I feel like I could respond to that name normally if used
That seems like an interesting little tidbit of information. Usually, it takes a bit of time to get used to a new/different name.
The girl with the pink-white hair hummed happily. She was partly covered by Alexander’s starry mane.
Even more interesting. I would assume that that is dyed hair? Otherwise, that would be way too anime with a color like that.
“You really worry too much about what the rest of the world is doing,” Niles said.
And your lack of worry is frankly astounding, Niles.
Plus referring to myself as she just makes sense since I am physically female. Others might have different ideas on it but that’s just me. The fact that I have entirely new limbs as well feels a bit more noticeable and relevant.
Fair enough. I guess I would have more trouble with added limbs than worrying about... well... everything else. Heck, if we add the whole magic thing into the mix, I would be pretty overwhelmed with too many sensations at once.
“Levitation?” Isaac said. “That’s what everyone seems to start with in stories, and it’s the first thing usually learnt as far as the show suggests.”
I don't know why, but for some reason, it is always levitation. Weird. Definitely in an anthro setting where there is less of a need for levitation and more for something like... I dunno. Creating an orb of light, maybe? Food for thought if I ever get it into my head to write human/anthro magic again.
“Their normally children and baby’s when they do though.”
Oh, come on, dear. I told you about the you, your, you're thing and now you do it with they, their, they're? Also, no possessive indication is needed here, the plural is what you wanted.
Deciding that was enough magic for now Alexander sat down on the couch where Nicole had been. That left Jenifer to one side and Niles to the other. Jenifer lost no time leaning into Alexander again, using the side of her chest as a pillow.
My gaydar is tingling. Probably just innocent fluff.
Ignoring him she looked at what that had been watching. They seemed to be halfway through the first Home Alone movie. The TV volume was down more than normal, probably so they did not disturb her attempt to practice magic.
That's probably a smart decision. Would have been good practice, though, being able to concentrate through distractions like that. Might be something for a more advanced level.
She had been pretty content without that kind of relationship with anyone. Just hanging out with her friends had been all the company she had needed.
Huh, sounds like asexual, or at least demisexual characteristics. Don't see that often in stories like these. Well done. :3
It made her wonder how she would end up reacting to someone approaching her for a relationship. Switching genders was going to lead to so strange situations in the future, that was for sure.
Oh, boy. What a loaded question to ask oneself. Sexuality isn't quite something one can 'choose', it's more like something that one discovers about oneself. Do keep that in mind, might come in handy storytelling-wise.
It made her wonder what else she could go without, or if there was anything unusual she would need to do because of her new biology.
Estrus... fear it...
Isaac gave Niles a mild glare. “Don’t think I’m not going to make a bunch Celestia art to make up for this. This was simply practice, not adding propaganda for your false goddess.”
Niles pretended to pout. “Don’t say that! You will make Nightmare sad”.
“I don’t care”
“See? She does not care.” Isaac walked back over to where he had been sitting at the dining table.
That's just gold. I love it.
She would have to keep practicing to build up the ‘mussel’ for casting magic.
Mussels and muscles are two different things. Was funny to read, though.
“I don’t feel that hungry, but I don’t feel like I could not eat quite a bit either…” Alexander said. It seemed being an Alicorn would also allow for her to have looser eating habits. “Looks like that might be one thing the fandom guessed right about Alicorns without the show telling them.”
As far as I know, they did eat breakfast and so on every day and Tia puts quite a bit of effort into that. Although, that is probably a good idea to change since Nightmare Moon is more of a spiritual entity if you go with the comic book logic. Who knows what the primary source of food is for them. *shrug*
“We would have to assume those powers belonged to Nightmare Moon and were not just an extension of Luna's she had access to,” Isaac said; half eating, half drawing.
“Luna never used those powers past that point so I say their nightmare moons powers alright.
Dunno about the first thing I highlighted there, something rubs me the wrong way with that one.
The five friends let the afternoon ware on, continuing their banter about various things.
Perhaps she could get it down properly by the end of the week.
She closed her eyes, relaxing as her breathing slowed. “I wonder what is going to become of me in the end. Will I truly outlive everyone, or be killed by some other force? What about Equestria itself. Will I ever go there or will earth somehow become Equestria?” There were a lot of things to think about. But they could be put off for another time. For now, Alexander simply allowed herself to drift off to sleep.
What a morbid train of thought to end this on. I do truly hope Alex will find someone to share this with, would be quite a lonely existence otherwise. Now that I think about it... if Alex is Nightmare Moon and Luna still exists in Equestria separately from her... how will the thousand-year gap happen? Will Luna transform into another Nightmare Moon? Now that would be an interesting encounter with Celestia, especially if they happen upon one another before Tia banishes her sister to the moon...
"What are you doing here, Nightmare?!" "What do you mean?" "But... you should be on the moon!" "...what?"
Definitely seem to be at least... Mild psychological effects as a result of her transformation into nightmare moon.
Responding to the various critiques in the comments, I see ;)
Part of me wonders if her nature as nightmare moon is gonna have some... Effects on her. Does she have some instinctual opinions on Celestia? Seeing her in the show would be interesting. Either hostility, or some sisterly bond... Remains to be seen.
No urge to create eternal night, I suppose, so there is that. I wonder if she has a dislike for direct sunlight though... Meh, we may or may not see. A fun chapter all the same :)
If you need a name for Alex to go by when she ends up in Equestria, I would suggest Melinoë, the Greek Goddess of Nightmares and Madness(but madness can be many things)
10904049 I bet Celestia would notice something different about this Nightmare... since her fashion sense seems to be on the stallion side of the scale, and has zero dignity whatsoever.
The five friends let the afternoon ware on, continuing their banter about various things. It was a little surreal. Sure a lot of their conversations revolved around Alexander’s transformation into a Nightmare Moon look alike. Otherwise however it was no different than normal. Just hanging out and having fun.
Ware should be wear and otherwise should have a comma after it.
10904247 There’s lots of “wrong homophone” type mistakes in this fic. I’m going to guess a non-native English speaker just isn’t quite familiar enough to notice when things aren’t quite right when spellchecker isn’t underlining things.
10904472 Dunno where Jstarter mentioned it, but he(?) mentioned that he was from Australia. I have to say, though, the mistakes are by far less noticeable by now after Jstarter cleaned up a bit, checking their chapters a bit more thoroughly. That's really commendable, seeing so much improvement in such a short time. I'm pleasantly surprised and honestly proud of J.
as feynna said I'm from Australia, so there are a few words that don't use the American variant. grammerly does like pointing out all the non american variants. but I'm not American so... i think as like as I'm not using the completely wrong word an alternate spelling should not be to bad. (out of everything its irritating when everything tries to correct colour to color in particular. don't know why exactly i feel irritated by that one in particular. probably because i had to spell it repeatedly for spelling tests and get it correct)
10904588 I can definitely see the color vs colour part being annoying. A lot of people do not know it can be correct both ways. I try to ignore the swaps in words because in the end it makes no difference and is not worth bringing up. That being said, I did recently read a story where every time two things hit each other the author replaced the word "collide" with "colligate". The meaning of collide is obvious, but colligate means to group things (sort of). A lot of ponies grouped themselves with fists and trees and whatnot at high speed in that story. I never did mention that in the comments because... maybe it does mean something different wherever the author is? Doesn't mean I got over it though. Still makes me laugh.
10904056 interesting. so maybe not completely accurate but works well enough for the story. my experience is relay just getting them off the washing line.
yeah there is a little to the name thing. though I'm not quite sure if explaining it here would count as spoilers or not?
yes, Jenifer dyed her hair.
Niles has very much gone in the care free direction.
there is always some spelling quirk missed. : /
that did not come to mind when writing that part. more just went with while still able find people attractive, they just were not focused on more serious relationships, or relay felt like it was needed. though you are right that is not something seen often in stories.
from my own experience it can be a bit complex and change over time (though this is relay just relevant to drawn artworks, IRL has been consistent). i would imagine it can be quite different depending on the person. regardless though i don't think that statement relay is saying it is something that can be chosen, rather not being sure how they will react given everything that is going on if it does happen. more just the ideas of going through something you never relay considered could happen to you. hope that makes sense.
true that they do eat, but it can be considered unclear how necessary it is. especially with how much sugar seems to be consumed...
well that's the belonging term for Luna and they are referred to as her powers, so I'm not sure how that could be incorrect.
I have a few ideas on how to do things that i don't think will be considered conventional. this verson on Equestria is going to have a decent few differences from the show, though it will obviously still have its similarities.
10904588 Nah, there’s lots of things like using “lessen” instead of “lesson” where it’s definitely not a question of “variant spelling.” It’s a case of using the wrong homophone (or near-homophone in that case). Two words that sound the same but mean completely different things, and do have different spellings because they’re different words. As they said, though, other than that, it’s getting much cleaner.
I don’t even bat an eye at folks who use British spellings over American anymore, thanks to this site.
I know how that feels. I constantly re-read my chapters and still find things to fix here and there. The obvious ones are easy to spot, though.
from my own experience it can be a bit complex and change over time (though this is relay just relevant to drawn artworks, IRL has been consistent). i would imagine it can be quite different depending on the person. regardless though i don't think that statement relay is saying it is something that can be chosen, rather not being sure how they will react given everything that is going on if it does happen. more just the ideas of going through something you never relay considered could happen to you. hope that makes sense.
Dunno if something like that can 'change' over time. I like to think of it as discovering something about yourself that you weren't aware of / didn't want to admit. I suppose I should have worded that better as I didn't think you made it out that something like that was something one can choose. What I meant was more 'food for thought'. I see it perhaps a bit too often (mostly on other sites, but on this site as well) where the main character makes a complete switch for no reason at all (completely disregarding bisexuality in the process as well ._.).
well that's the belonging term for Luna and they are referred to as her powers, so I'm not sure how that could be incorrect.
Might want to clarify it a little bit. My English teacher constantly told me to do that when I thought it was perfectly clear what I was talking about. Implying things with previous statements is all fine and dandy, but sometimes it does help to make sure. *shrug*
I have a few ideas on how to do things that i don't think will be considered conventional. this verson on Equestria is going to have a decent few differences from the show, though it will obviously still have its similarities.
Can't wait to find out more, in that case. It's rare I get invested in a story like this and you're honestly making me giddy to read more.
10905025 it can be a complex subject. regardless of whats is technically factually correct, different people will experience things and get different opinions as a result. as long as people can be themselves and treat each other normally i don't think a few differences in perspective will matter much, doesn't change the end result does it?
did not think its was that unclear, but ill try to remember to have a look at it later.
glad your enjoying it so far! Hopefully i can keep up keeping it just as entertaining in the future.
as long as people can be themselves and treat each other normally i don't think a few differences in perspective will matter much, doesn't change the end result does it?
If only more people thought like you. Seriously. Live and let live and all that. But, for some reason, people still take offense to that even though it doesn't affect them at all. The world isn't going to end because a minority can be themselves.
“What exactly have you been drawing, anyway Isaac. More sun but art?” Niles asked, leaning back over the couch again towards Isaac. He was just lightly touching Alexander’s feathers, seemingly unintentionally.
Sunbutt I think I've seen this error a couple of times now
“I have not had any notable experiences with the dream world yet. Do I actually not have that power or is it another thing I will have to figure out like levitation?”
wouldn't it be interesting if the dreaming or dream world could only be accessed through the moon. Like a conduit or router for the whole planet.
11088303 Christians of old osmosed a lot of other cultures through the practice of simply changing a few key words- gods became demons or kings and grey heroes were made either more villainous or more heroic or were punished in some way in additions to the tales they were apart of. People would probably call nm a demon, a succubus for example before accepting devine power that goes against God's order.
The cults probably would be a lot less predictable but conspiracies and doubting the moon goddess would be the likely answer for most.
Excellent work Will she get to Equestria Or something might happen
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she will get their soon
Sure. The cups are nice, but you wouldn't be so quick to say that about the straps. Seriously, after a few hours, those will get annoying. Tight jeans are great, though. Those feel like your legs are being hugged. :3
Hm. Not my choice for indoor clothing, but it does make for a great look.
That seems like an interesting little tidbit of information. Usually, it takes a bit of time to get used to a new/different name.
Even more interesting. I would assume that that is dyed hair? Otherwise, that would be way too anime with a color like that.
And your lack of worry is frankly astounding, Niles.
Fair enough. I guess I would have more trouble with added limbs than worrying about... well... everything else. Heck, if we add the whole magic thing into the mix, I would be pretty overwhelmed with too many sensations at once.
I don't know why, but for some reason, it is always levitation. Weird. Definitely in an anthro setting where there is less of a need for levitation and more for something like... I dunno. Creating an orb of light, maybe? Food for thought if I ever get it into my head to write human/anthro magic again.
Oh, come on, dear. I told you about the you, your, you're thing and now you do it with they, their, they're? Also, no possessive indication is needed here, the plural is what you wanted.
My gaydar is tingling. Probably just innocent fluff.
That's probably a smart decision. Would have been good practice, though, being able to concentrate through distractions like that. Might be something for a more advanced level.
Huh, sounds like asexual, or at least demisexual characteristics. Don't see that often in stories like these. Well done. :3
Oh, boy. What a loaded question to ask oneself. Sexuality isn't quite something one can 'choose', it's more like something that one discovers about oneself. Do keep that in mind, might come in handy storytelling-wise.
Estrus... fear it...
That's just gold. I love it.
Mussels and muscles are two different things. Was funny to read, though.
As far as I know, they did eat breakfast and so on every day and Tia puts quite a bit of effort into that. Although, that is probably a good idea to change since Nightmare Moon is more of a spiritual entity if you go with the comic book logic. Who knows what the primary source of food is for them. *shrug*
Dunno about the first thing I highlighted there, something rubs me the wrong way with that one.
What a morbid train of thought to end this on. I do truly hope Alex will find someone to share this with, would be quite a lonely existence otherwise. Now that I think about it... if Alex is Nightmare Moon and Luna still exists in Equestria separately from her... how will the thousand-year gap happen? Will Luna transform into another Nightmare Moon? Now that would be an interesting encounter with Celestia, especially if they happen upon one another before Tia banishes her sister to the moon...
"What are you doing here, Nightmare?!"
"What do you mean?"
"But... you should be on the moon!"
"...what?"
This is good. The future seems to be marred by shades
Definitely seem to be at least... Mild psychological effects as a result of her transformation into nightmare moon.
Responding to the various critiques in the comments, I see ;)
Part of me wonders if her nature as nightmare moon is gonna have some... Effects on her. Does she have some instinctual opinions on Celestia? Seeing her in the show would be interesting. Either hostility, or some sisterly bond... Remains to be seen.
No urge to create eternal night, I suppose, so there is that. I wonder if she has a dislike for direct sunlight though... Meh, we may or may not see. A fun chapter all the same :)
If you need a name for Alex to go by when she ends up in Equestria, I would suggest Melinoë, the Greek Goddess of Nightmares and Madness(but madness can be many things)
10904049
I bet Celestia would notice something different about this Nightmare... since her fashion sense seems to be on the stallion side of the scale, and has zero dignity whatsoever.
Ware should be wear and otherwise should have a comma after it.
10904247
There’s lots of “wrong homophone” type mistakes in this fic. I’m going to guess a non-native English speaker just isn’t quite familiar enough to notice when things aren’t quite right when spellchecker isn’t underlining things.
10904472
Dunno where Jstarter mentioned it, but he(?) mentioned that he was from Australia. I have to say, though, the mistakes are by far less noticeable by now after Jstarter cleaned up a bit, checking their chapters a bit more thoroughly. That's really commendable, seeing so much improvement in such a short time. I'm pleasantly surprised and honestly proud of J.
10904049
Will her friends comalong as well?
10904494
That would be great
10904472
10904485
as feynna said I'm from Australia, so there are a few words that don't use the American variant.
grammerly does like pointing out all the non american variants. but I'm not American so...
i think as like as I'm not using the completely wrong word an alternate spelling should not be to bad.
(out of everything its irritating when everything tries to correct colour to color in particular. don't know why exactly i feel irritated by that one in particular. probably because i had to spell it repeatedly for spelling tests and get it correct)
thanks!
10904588
I can definitely see the color vs colour part being annoying. A lot of people do not know it can be correct both ways. I try to ignore the swaps in words because in the end it makes no difference and is not worth bringing up. That being said, I did recently read a story where every time two things hit each other the author replaced the word "collide" with "colligate". The meaning of collide is obvious, but colligate means to group things (sort of). A lot of ponies grouped themselves with fists and trees and whatnot at high speed in that story. I never did mention that in the comments because... maybe it does mean something different wherever the author is? Doesn't mean I got over it though. Still makes me laugh.
10904056
interesting. so maybe not completely accurate but works well enough for the story.
my experience is relay just getting them off the washing line.
yeah there is a little to the name thing. though I'm not quite sure if explaining it here would count as spoilers or not?
yes, Jenifer dyed her hair.
Niles has very much gone in the care free direction.
there is always some spelling quirk missed. : /
that did not come to mind when writing that part. more just went with while still able find people attractive, they just were not focused on more serious relationships, or relay felt like it was needed. though you are right that is not something seen often in stories.
from my own experience it can be a bit complex and change over time (though this is relay just relevant to drawn artworks, IRL has been consistent). i would imagine it can be quite different depending on the person.
regardless though i don't think that statement relay is saying it is something that can be chosen, rather not being sure how they will react given everything that is going on if it does happen. more just the ideas of going through something you never relay considered could happen to you. hope that makes sense.
true that they do eat, but it can be considered unclear how necessary it is. especially with how much sugar seems to be consumed...
well that's the belonging term for Luna and they are referred to as her powers, so I'm not sure how that could be incorrect.
I have a few ideas on how to do things that i don't think will be considered conventional. this verson on Equestria is going to have a decent few differences from the show, though it will obviously still have its similarities.
10904588
Nah, there’s lots of things like using “lessen” instead of “lesson” where it’s definitely not a question of “variant spelling.” It’s a case of using the wrong homophone (or near-homophone in that case). Two words that sound the same but mean completely different things, and do have different spellings because they’re different words. As they said, though, other than that, it’s getting much cleaner.
I don’t even bat an eye at folks who use British spellings over American anymore, thanks to this site.
10904630
ok.
for a second i thought you said he replaced the word with the toothpaste brand
10904738
ha ok.
Sleep little nightmare don't you fret, you may soon find yourself quite upset. Magic may be a hard grasp to get, but you'll get there sooner yet~
10905012
I did not know what i was expecting, but a rhyme was not it.
(quite well done)
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I know how that feels. I constantly re-read my chapters and still find things to fix here and there. The obvious ones are easy to spot, though.
Dunno if something like that can 'change' over time. I like to think of it as discovering something about yourself that you weren't aware of / didn't want to admit. I suppose I should have worded that better as I didn't think you made it out that something like that was something one can choose. What I meant was more 'food for thought'. I see it perhaps a bit too often (mostly on other sites, but on this site as well) where the main character makes a complete switch for no reason at all (completely disregarding bisexuality in the process as well ._.).
Might want to clarify it a little bit. My English teacher constantly told me to do that when I thought it was perfectly clear what I was talking about. Implying things with previous statements is all fine and dandy, but sometimes it does help to make sure. *shrug*
Can't wait to find out more, in that case. It's rare I get invested in a story like this and you're honestly making me giddy to read more.
10905025
it can be a complex subject. regardless of whats is technically factually correct, different people will experience things and get different opinions as a result. as long as people can be themselves and treat each other normally i don't think a few differences in perspective will matter much, doesn't change the end result does it?
did not think its was that unclear, but ill try to remember to have a look at it later.
glad your enjoying it so far! Hopefully i can keep up keeping it just as entertaining in the future.
10905021
Surprise rhyme is the best rhyme :) loving the story so far!
10905039
If only more people thought like you. Seriously. Live and let live and all that. But, for some reason, people still take offense to that even though it doesn't affect them at all. The world isn't going to end because a minority can be themselves.
Sunbutt
I think I've seen this error a couple of times now
wouldn't it be interesting if the dreaming or dream world could only be accessed through the moon. Like a conduit or router for the whole planet.
I'd say it's a bit too early for changelings in this story. Let's try to avoid them for now.
The way you've written this 'Niles' character he comes across as extremely creepy. Uncomfortably so.
This inspires a question. What would happen if the various cults on earth got wind of an actual goddess. along with devout Christians
11088303
Christians of old osmosed a lot of other cultures through the practice of simply changing a few key words- gods became demons or kings and grey heroes were made either more villainous or more heroic or were punished in some way in additions to the tales they were apart of. People would probably call nm a demon, a succubus for example before accepting devine power that goes against God's order.
The cults probably would be a lot less predictable but conspiracies and doubting the moon goddess would be the likely answer for most.