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Righteousness, so happy to see an update!
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Thanks! Things got rough, but I'm not dropping this story for anything
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Far be it for me to disparage someone for life's reasons... glad to see you updating regardless
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Eh, I can admit to having wasted three days on gaming, but any other day was life. (I am human, after all! )
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Bet, been binging on Elden Ring myself. Self care is important, so don't forget that.
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Oh yeah, I've gotten my check ups recently!
First of all, I didn't understand why you chose such a title for the chapter. Bread and Flutterbutter? When I read this chapter, I still didn't understand the meaning of this title. Although, this is not the main thing.
This time I liked Piper, although she showed herself so little, but the paragraphs that are at the moment pleased me with their content.
At some point, I was very confused in the plot, and did not understand what exactly happened. Then some mystical character named Maxie appears. This, again, confused me.
However, when Fluttershy could hear her brother's name, for some reason I thought that her reaction would be more tangible. I don't think she could be like that, almost indifferent to her brother's trouble. I think you've missed about a thousand words because of this moment. (Provided that it will be a shortened version).
Oh, and again there is a lot that is not clear... to be honest, I already started to feel not great when I read that part with the question mark (?)
Grandmaster... bulldog... a prophecy...
When will I be able to see familiar characters? How many more chapters do need to read, to see Celestia?
It's a good chapter, but I still wish you good health, and more inspiration! Thank you that no matter what, you take another step on your creative path every time.
At you put in a picture of some kind? This would help brighten up the visual presentation.
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Let's see if I can clear some things for ya, because most of that was probably lost in translation somehow.
The title is called bread and Flutterbutter due to a gaming quote known as "bread and butter", which is a term for basic combos in fighting games. Combine this with how Discord calls fluttershy Flutterbutter in this chapter and boom! chapter title. (That, and this chapter has an underlying theme with the basic principles of Mitchs magic core, something Maxie states in the chapter.)
Then there's Maxie. He's not new to the story, this is just his first time having a name. Every time Mitch has fallen asleep while hurt or injured Maxie has appeared and spoke to him. This time he actually took control and conversed with Discord and Fluttershy during the cave scene. He's the Nightmare bound to Mitch's core from the cave pool and forest scenes, if you don't remember him, he just know has a name.
Fluttershy was shocked to hear her brothers name, but the phone itself died moments after, so I'd expect a bigger reaction, we just didn't see it....yet.
Familiar characters, Like Celestia? If you haven't noticed by now, none of the MCs in the tags are main characters of the series. The royal sisters and the elements of harmony won't be playing too much of a role in the story, as this story will revolve greatly around background characters and cut off from the "Harmony saves the day, or friendship prevails stick". They will show...just be patient. (I will say, though, next chapter is the Crystal Empire...so there are at LEAST 4 familiar faces you could like there during the time of season 5 and 6.
Glad your enjoying Piper though! I was worried she wouldn't get much love...but perhaps I was wrong. Sorry that that stuff I explained wasn't clear...but I cant predict how the translators work, I just edit my stuff and pray for the best