I was stoked to see a new story out from you. Can't wait to get through the rest of this. The character seems interesting also. Can't recall reading many stories with posh high society Bondesque charming ponies for a protagonist.
I loved that tie in to the previous Pinkie story. Actually, remembering it, I want to go back and read it again.
One small edit I found: Hmm, how what shall you have tonight? "Hmm, now what shall"
"An attractive mare, white-coated and pink-haired in appearance, falls from the sky screaming and lands face first into the giant, multi-layered cake that breaks her fall, coating every nearby patron in icing and turning every head in the room." ( •_•) Looks like the trash ( •_•)>⌐■-■ Was just thrown in. (⌐■_■) (Hmm, should it be in or out? Since they're in Canterlot, it would be in, right?)
The start got me a little skeeved. That's DEFINITELY not how I would behave at a party! I can roll with it though. Any chance to see Fancypants is good in my book. (In my opinion, he is best pony.) Lastly, I now know where Fleur landed! Crowley you magnificent bastard I read your book!
hmm...I never saw you do a womanizer before...interesting. I like how you captured the posh life and the savagery behind it with all the sex, drinks, and high life living. A new pace to it and I wonder how (You) will fare well in ponyville...Also I like how you connected the (Love locked and breathless and Desired in deep water,) stories in that one article. Really interesting and that is why I love to read your stories, you always remember the other ouccurances that happen in it
Well here I am, late to the party as usual. lol. Anyway, I love how intricate you're making your universe Crowley, having this take place on the same day as the Pinkie story and giving us a subtle hint that Trixie's story is after this one chronologically. That's why we love you man, you make sensual fics into good story fics too.
1513151 You know, it's just occurred to me that Fleur would probably not have said "what", but "pardon". Still, Pinkie should have had a cannon ball in there to follow her!!!
Well, then let's see. "I've" been invited to a high class party. Okay, ah a supple young mare, time to buck. Oh, "my" friend Fancy Pants........
"I've" just had "my" life bucked. Hey look, unicorns CAN fly!!!
Nice touch with the paper, by the way. Why do I get the feeling that this unnamed filly is going to be Sweetie Belle?
“That’s peculiar,” you say aloud, “Usually the exotic dancers come out of the cake.” And then, upon closer inspection, “Isn’t that your girlfriend, Fancy?”
With a reaction that would be considered perfect, Fancypants’ monocle pops off of his face and lands in his drink, “Just… just go already!”
One life I was a perv, with a bit of a nerve, My magazine bumbled, with me likely soon rumbled. Whilst trying to fly, a unicorn did fall, Providing a messy distraction. I ain't complainin!
Well I'm not even gonna give this one a chance can't stand this guy in the first couple of sentences maybe he gets humbled later but can't be bothered waiting for that.
nice tie-in at the end. I love it.
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I was stoked to see a new story out from you. Can't wait to get through the rest of this. The character seems interesting also. Can't recall reading many stories with posh high society Bondesque charming ponies for a protagonist.
I loved that tie in to the previous Pinkie story. Actually, remembering it, I want to go back and read it again.
One small edit I found:
Hmm, how what shall you have tonight?
"Hmm, now what shall"
LAWL. Yes. And the penny drops.
"An attractive mare, white-coated and pink-haired in appearance, falls from the sky screaming and lands face first into the giant, multi-layered cake that breaks her fall, coating every nearby patron in icing and turning every head in the room."
( •_•)
Looks like the trash
( •_•)>⌐■-■
Was just thrown in.
(⌐■_■)
(Hmm, should it be in or out? Since they're in Canterlot, it would be in, right?)
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Bravo Good! sir Bravo!
and i just came......to read this story hahahahaha
> four pony orchestra
String quartet?
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That's only if they're all using string instuments.
“That’s peculiar,” you say aloud, “Usually the exotic dancers come out of the cake.”
I have a feeling that this story will be full of glorious deadpan snark.
AND IT PLEASES ME.
1514652this is the reason we love you and your stories Ozzy
I mean Crowley.....meh!
either way, let me kiss you *MWAH!* and hug you *hug* and tell you this
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So apparently we're a pimp.
I can live with this.
Gotta love the Fleur cannon
Also, I have feels for Rarity
The start got me a little skeeved. That's DEFINITELY not how I would behave at a party! I can roll with it though. Any chance to see Fancypants is good in my book. (In my opinion, he is best pony.) Lastly, I now know where Fleur landed! Crowley you magnificent bastard I read your book!
That end had me thinking a bit before I remembered the cannon. My confusion made it even funnier
Read the first chapter, I am intrigued. No time to read the rest now. Marked for reading later on.
Love what ya did at the end there.
First chapter and already three conections to your other stories. Seems quite exelent
A number of connections, and that last one an excellent reminder of a fine moment.
hmm...I never saw you do a womanizer before...interesting. I like how you captured the posh life and the savagery behind it with all the sex, drinks, and high life living. A new pace to it and I wonder how (You) will fare well in ponyville...Also I like how you connected the (Love locked and breathless and Desired in deep water,) stories in that one article. Really interesting and that is why I love to read your stories, you always remember the other ouccurances that happen in it
Oh hi Fleur, nice to see you drop in from the Pinkie story.
Well here I am, late to the party as usual. lol. Anyway, I love how intricate you're making your universe Crowley, having this take place on the same day as the Pinkie story and giving us a subtle hint that Trixie's story is after this one chronologically. That's why we love you man, you make sensual fics into good story fics too.
1513151 You know, it's just occurred to me that Fleur would probably not have said "what", but "pardon". Still, Pinkie should have had a cannon ball in there to follow her!!!
Well, then let's see. "I've" been invited to a high class party. Okay, ah a supple young mare, time to buck. Oh, "my" friend Fancy Pants........
"I've" just had "my" life bucked. Hey look, unicorns CAN fly!!!
Nice touch with the paper, by the way. Why do I get the feeling that this unnamed filly is going to be Sweetie Belle?
Oh my, I completely forgot about this one. I had it in my backlog for a while. Should probably get around to reading it now
-Glassed
What sells a story?
Lines like those, that's what!
Welp, may not be pony poo, but I'd say landing in the cake works too!
Hm, now how the heck can i rhyme this one out?
lol, the first thought to come to mind, "I'm Tony Stark"
lol; ok, that's awesome Pinkie Pie can make any party better without even trying
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I think you can figure it out
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How's this?
One life I was a perv, with a bit of a nerve,
My magazine bumbled, with me likely soon rumbled.
Whilst trying to fly, a unicorn did fall,
Providing a messy distraction.
I ain't complainin!
Hm...Could use some work...
2470118 Zecora would be proud of that rhyme
Well I'm not even gonna give this one a chance can't stand this guy in the first couple of sentences maybe he gets humbled later but can't be bothered waiting for that.