Ok this is interesting beginning I can't wait to see where this goes.

Why do I imagine, instead of clinking beer bottles, rattling bottles of little blue pills?

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If only Shiny was so lucky...*sinister chuckle*

Now all I can think about is Cozy Glow experiencing certain "side effects" during her time as an alicorn.

Shining, you are going to need help, quick get big mac!

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*Off in the distance, deep in the orchard, you hear a lonesome, fearful. EEEENOPE!!*

I'm liking it so far, but I did notice a few small technical errors every now and then.

Plot twist this isn’t just for the Equestrian royalty but all Royalty. Look out here comes Chrysalis, Ember, Rainshine and Novo to join the fray.

Just wish ye was more detailed in how they look like

Shining, it was an honor. Your sacrifice will not be forgotten. RIP

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Oh, that's on purpose, that will play an important role in the upcoming chapters.

For reference they are anthro stage 4 if you are familiar with those charts.

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Shining: Oh um, THorax tag in! You can fuckl my wife!!
Thorax disguises himself as a mare, "Fuck that I'd rather be fucking Chrysalis!
SHining: oh ok, Braeburn!
Braeburn: Sweetheart, I'll help but bend over,
SHining; "I need an adult"
Braeburn: I am an adult

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Shiny is in enough danger, let's not add a wrecked rectum to the list shall we?

Also BAHAHA HAHAHAHAHAHA!!

"I am an adult"

Shiny: I need an adultier adult.
Celestia: Hello dear Shiny, you called?
Shiny: SHIT!!!

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Just so you know the popular pony anthro scales by shepard0821 go up from 1 pony to 5 fully human. But the even more popular furry charts on know your meme go the opposite way from 1 fully human with animalish characteristics to 6 talking animal.

So that 4 could be complete opposites depending on what scale a reader is familiar with.

As to the story itself you have some issues with tenses switching mid-sentence. I recommend going to a group like Looking For Editors and finding a prereader.

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I actually didn't know a different set existed. I was referring to the first set you mentioned. Mainly humanoid but with animal characteristics. Casting spells with their hands however even when they have horns just makes more sense to me from a writing perspective.

As to the tense changes you mentioned, can you give me an example? I've read through it four times since I wrote it this morning and I cannot spot them.

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Sorry I got my terms confused tenses was inappropriate. When the story starts:

It was a mostly normal day at the Castle of Friendship, MOSTLY. After all Rainbow Dash referring to getting Called by the Map as a "booty call" was a little odd. Twilight just couldn't get it out of her head, no matter how many treatises on ancient arcane philosophy she rearranged on the shelf.

Then later.

Sighing into his quickly emptying cup Shiny looked at his sister with a withering look. "what's the first rule of Law you learned?" Earning a shocked look from the Element of Magic, his own sister, and a fellow Princess to his Cady.

It feels like the narration is a bit confused like it can’t decide if it’s 1st person or 3rd person.

After reading the chapter title, all I thought of was this:

Good start.

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The word you're looking for is 'perspective'.

A voice cut through the Castle, one they both knew but had never heard sound like this, it was almost sultry. " Shining Armor! Come out to plaayyy! Come greet your wives!

When the does come you need an epilogue where an alicornified Sunset (due to friendship games) comes back, gets hit with the heat and is trying to understand what the heck's going on

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Hehe. *Zips mouth*

i need more just to see how freak out shiny can get

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As a SMALL teaser. I will neither confirm nor deny a random, multi location, panic teleport sequence in the works.

Flurry's birth has woken something in the other Princesses, HEAT. Thankfully it's only Celestia and Luna that are always trying to get him alone, flirting with him, conspiring with his extremely-willing-to-share wife. Thankfully it's just those two, right? RIGHT?!?

My incest senses are tingling.

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You're senses are quite acute, or maybe not. I'm not telling.

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I was referring to the first set you mentioned.

This one, in other words:

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Correct!

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Dang it, i was just about to leave the same comment and clip XD

"I'm scared, Sarge."

"Simmons... We're all scared... Except for me..."