Jon and Arin woke up on top of each other In the middle of a giant cave. Jon looked around to find nopony around
"ARIN, WERE ARE YOU" screamed out Jon.
"Underneath you."
"Oh, hi. Are you getting sonic 06 flashback here."
" Yeah this definitely feels like the cave. Let's just hope there are no crazy glitches this time, I really don't feel like losing my mind this time."
"WILL YOU GUYS GET OFF ME!", said a very angry Twilight. Both Jon and Arin looked down to see the purple mare underneath both of them with a look of annoyance . They both got off her so Twilight could get up.
"Were are we anyway.", said Jon.
"I have no idea.", said Arin.
"Your in the crystal caticombes under Canterlot castle." said a voice.
"Whose there?", said Arin.
"Is that you Barry?", said Jon.
"No you idiot it's me.", said the voice as the evil cadence appeared in a reflection of one of the crystals.
"What have you done with my brother."
"Oh don't worry he's fine. I transported you to the crystal caticombes under canterlot castle keep you out of the way of my master plane."
"And what's that", said Twilight.
"That would be no fun.", said both of the grumps in a almost imitating voice of the evil Cadence.
"How did you know I was going to say that."
"We play games all day, we know Pretty much how all kinds of stories go", said Jon.
"Well I'd like to see you two try and guess how this story is going to end. And just a heads up, it won't be a happy one.", said the evil cadence as she started to evil laugh. Twilight lit up he horn and hit the crystal with a beam of magic.
"THAT'S SOME HARRY POTTER SHIT, I wish Barry was here so he could play with that.", said Jon. Twilight shot at the next crystal that had cadences face on but Cadence kept jumping from crystal to crystal. When Twilight shot at the last crystal. When it shattered into a million peaces, there was a Cadence with a very messed up mane.
"Get her.", said Jon as he, Arin, and Twilight all tackled the cadence before she had a chance to get away. The cadence covered her head before she lowered he hoofs.
"Twilight, Oh I'm so glade to see her."
"Nice try evil cadence but I'm not falling for it this time", said Twilight When all of a sudden She did the sunshine sunshine dance. Twilight jumped and hugged cadence. "It's really you." As the two hugged Jon grabbed a crystal and was ready to hit the cadence over the head when Twilight said "No." Jon put the crystal back and just went back over to Arin.
"We need to hurry and get to the wedding before it's to late", said cadence as all four of them ran off. As the four of them went through the cave, cadence started to sing this day aria.
"Another song? What is with this world and its obsession with music, for that matter wears the sheet music."
"Sheet music?"
"Were the hell else do you think they get the lyrics for this song from."
"Hey there's a hole lets go this way.", said Arin as the both of them went trough the hole. After a while they appeared on the other side of a huge casem as cadence and Twilight flew over.
"Were'd you two come from", said Twilight
"Our parents", said Jon All of a sudden three mares came out from the darkness with big green glowing eyes. All three of them said "You can never leave." When all of a sudden cadence took her flower bundle and threw it past them as all three of them jumped after it.
"Women", said Jon as Twilight and cadence both slapped him upside the head as he yelled out "WHAT, I JUST SAID WOMEN". all four of them ran to were the wedding was being held.
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The evil cadence, shining armor, and Celestia were all at the wedding alter with half of canterlot in attendance. Celestia was going over the wedding notes when all of a sudden Twilight, Arin, and Jon all came into the doors.
"Get away from him you bitch", said Jon.
"Yeah, what ever that means. she cannot marry my brother", said Twilight. everypony turned and gasped while her friends just had a look of disappointment on them.
"WHAT, why must she be so protective of her brother....... I mean, why must you try to ruin my special day."
"Because it's not your day, it's mine-", said the good cadence. "- Everypony, this cadence is not who she appears to be, She's a changeling. She is using the love from shining armor to make herself stronger." All of a sudden the evil cadence revealed herself to be a changeling alicorn.
"Well well well, looks like you four figured me out, to bad your to late to stop me. shining armor is completely under my control and my changeling army is already breaking threw the barrier as we speak. in a matter of minuets the barrier will be down and my army will suck out every last ounce of love that this pathetic kingdom has. First canterlot, and then all of equestria, and no one can stop."
"Okay first of all I don't even want to know where your sucking that love from. and second can you keep showing us how much of a stereotypical villain you are by monologue some more", said Arin.
"SILENCE", yelled Chrysalis as both Jon and Arins mane flew back and stayed in a straight line until they stroked it back down.
"I'm afraid you made one mistake. Now that you have so foolishly revealed yourself to me, You have lost your element of surprise, and as the princess of this kingdom, it'a my job to defend my kingdom from monsters like you and to stop you", said Celestia as she flew into the air and blasted chrysalis with a sun beam. the two of them beam struggled for a little bit until chrysalis beat Celestia. she flew across the room as her crown was blown off.
"Wow, your all powerful leader is a weakling", said Jon.
"Princess!", said Twilight as she ran over to Celestia.
"Twilight, you and your friends need to get the elements of harmony, your the only ones that can defeat her."
"You heard her, Move bitch.", said Jon as he ran out of the room pushing Arin with him. The grumps and the elements of harmony ran through town avoiding incoming changelings. "Kamikaze changeling 12 o'clock", said Jon as a changeling landed right in front of them. Twilight stomped on it and the eight of them kept going. Just when they were about to get to the chamber housing the element, a small changeling army was waiting for them. All of them turned into one of the main six and the grumps.
"looks like were going to have to fight our way to the elements.", Said Rainbow. The eight of them charged at the changelings. Arin was halfway towards the battle before a changeling looked at him and he ran in the other direction as Jon jumped on top of a changeling and started to punch his head as it ran around with Jon screaming "OHMAMA" Over and over again. Rainbow dash uppercut the changeling that was chasing Arin. He then ran up and punched a changeling right before the changeling Jon was punching ran into him and the three of them ran into a bunch of changelings, knocking them over like they were bowling pins. Arin picked up Jon and they ran back at the main 6 to help them keep fighting. Pinkie picked up Twilight and used her as a Gatling gun.
"Hay let me try.", said Arin as he picked up Jon and twisted His tail making him shoot like a gun. the main six managed to defeat them but the grumps somehow managed to get them selfs surrounded. "Go on without us", said Arin as the main six went on with frowns on there face. "Why would you say that, now were fucked", said Jon. "We can handle this, we defeated grantilda didn't we.", said Arin "No we didn't. We never completed Banjo Remember", said Jon. "Then stop bringing it up."
The Grumps tried to fight them off But all the the changlings were to much and they were getting surrounded. "Well shit, this won't end well." When all of a sudden, A Pegasus figure in a trench coat and UK flage shirt appeared in the sky. the grumps looked at him Right before he swooped down and wiped out all the changelings in a second. As the figure passed by he whispered to the grumps
"I'll watch over you guys, but for now, I must kick ass.",
"Who the hell was that", said Arin.
"Who cares, lets just get out of here", said Jon as the two of them tried to catch up to the main six But it was covered with changelings. The two of them hid from there sight untill they were far enough away and followed them.
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the grumps found themselves back were the wedding was being held. they looked inside from a window and saw Chrysalis was standing there with cadence and a very dopy looking shining armor.
"Look at this guy, he looks like he's putting on his best poker face.", said jon while pointing at shining.
"now go my children, go and feed.", said Chrysalis.
"But don't eat to fast or you'll get a sick tummy. Okay no more jokes we have to Save the girls.", said Jon.
"Alright here's the plan", Said Arin in a determined voice. "I'll pretend to be in parole And she'll try and help me. meanwhile you sneak around to the other side. When she is about to suck the life out of me, you jump on her back and hit her as hard as you can while I hit her with a rock." Just then Chrysalis went out to the balcony to see how Canterlot was being taken over by her army.
"She sounded a lot smaller in the plan."
"Okay plan B, We paint ourself black and pretend we are changelings. We go towards the girls and let them free. Then we shanghigh them, and make them think of a plain."
"Were are we going to get black paint."
"Okay okay okay. Here's is plane C which I like to call absolutely cannot fail. It's brilliant and foolproof."
"What do we do Arin"
"We run up to Chrysalis-"
"Yeah....."
"And we kick her in the face." There was a good minute of silence before Jon said
"That sound like a good idea."
"Okay on the count of three we bulrush her and kick her. One......Two......." When all of a sudden a loud explosion was heard and queen Chrysalis as well as all of her minions were seen hurdling away from the castle from a pink aura.
"Well, mission accomplished I guess", said Jon.
"I guess so."
"Well lets go join the rest of them." Jon and Arin went around and entered the throne room to join the rest of main six.
"There you two are.", said twilight.
"Yeah, we were worried those changelings got you two.", said Rainbow dash.
"Well there were a bunch of them all around us, and one of them had like a bee hammer. But then, with all our strength, beat them all up.", said Jon.
"Well the point is that Chrysalis has been defeated thanks to the power of Shining Armor and Cadences Love", began Celestia. "Now I believe all of you have a wedding to get ready for." All the ponies ran off to prepare for the re-wedding. The main six went back to what they were doing originally, and Arin and Jon did what they do best.... get in the way and make a big mess, except this Cadence enjoyed there fooling around. And this time the two ponies in love got married without a hitch. Arin and Jon watched them kiss on the balcony when Jon said
"You know I just realized something."
"What's that?", said Arin.
"Princess is like a king, of more accurately queen, is this world. If that's true then what the hell is cadence a princess of anyway."
"She's the princess of love.", said Celestia.
"I get that, but where's her kingdom." Celestia looked at Jon for a minuet before she let out a small chuckle.
"Maybe some time I'll tell you all about it, but for now I think you two have reception party to go to." The Grumps ran off to the party as Celestia giggled at the two of them. "I have a feeling those two are going to bring quite a bit of adventure to Twilights friends."
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The main six and the grumps were walking down ponyvill going back to there homes. Everypony except pinkie looked absolutely exhausted. They were no longer wearing there dresses as Rarity was caring them. She insisted on holding on to them so she could get ideas for more dresses. All the girls went back to there houses and Jon and Arin went with Twilight back to her house.
"Man I havent partied like that since we beat Goof Troop ", said Arin
"You mean that time you grew another chin", said Jon as Arin Slowly looked at Jon with a big smile on his face and said "Shut up."
"Guys, you got a package, and it's not from the princess." Jon and Arin ran over to the giant box to see what it is. Twilight opened the box for them with her magic as Jon and Arin reached in and pulled the stuff out into the light so they could see what they got. They pulled out a SNES, PS3, GENESIS, and a T.V.
"Holy shit, look at that."
"Yeah it's like were back in the grump room. Who sent us this shit ", Said Jon as he used his magic to lift up small letter at the bottom of the box. The letter read-
"Dear Grumps
I found out were you guys are. I won't be able to send you Home but I sent you some special gifts to hold you guys over. Don't worry about power, I'm sure the power of magic Will help you guys.
Sincerely
BARRY and Suzy
It's okay mate the chapter was still good
This fic would be amazing if not for the fact that Danny Sexbang is a far better "Not so grump".
3599980 You are so wrong it hurts.
3599980 I could be posing as arin...... right now. v.cdn.vine.co/r/thumbs/31BEF1D1-C8CD-453A-8506-CDCDB5C2ABBA-10603-00000681DF2D2ED4_146ecd2c736.1.mp4.jpg?versionId=08ShRWqkTE4tkfDs0t95mdXysLwGM4pR and Dan would be filling in for the grumps with me.
3600100 Jon was an annoyance at best with his constant coughing and terrible attitude during GG versus.
3599968 thanks man. I just feel a little bad for not saying Anything and making it seem like I stoped doing this. But I plane to release a chapter ( not just this story) every week of December to make up for it.
3600150 ...so... beautiful...
3600116 The new GG is 10x worse with Jon gone. Dan isn't funny. Period.
You need a better proofreader.
3600247 I actually dident send the latest chapter to him. I just wanted to get it out.
3600310 Just the description alone has spelling errors in it.
Are you writing this in a word processor like Microsoft Office, or something like Google Drive?
Do you plan on bringing Ross and Danny into the story later? because i think that would be pretty cool.
3600317 I wrote the description and first chapter on my old laptop that is a hand me down peace of crap. The newer chapters I wrote on a Macintosh that has auto correct.
3600340 Mmm. May want to go back and fix those. The description draws the reader in. If they see it with spelling errors, you can't really fault them for assuming the entire fic is filled with typos and avoiding the fic.
But seriously, pretty much anyone that can speak English would be able to adequately edit this story. That doesn't mean I don't like it, but there's really no excuse for the painfully bad spelling and grammar.
3600201 Jon has managed 3 terribly unfunny videos since he left GG while Danny has managed an entire new album since he began GG. Jon is a lazy unfunny hack who made the worst decision of his career when he left.
3600462 Alright. Whatever you say.
3600489 Denial is the first stage one must pass on the way to acceptance.
3600333 I won't say anything yet but I will just say stay tuned. While everything in between will come when I think about it, I do know how I'm going to end this story.
3600489
I would like to say that Dan has his moments, but the new Game Grumps is more like Arin and Dan sucking eachother's dicks (metaphorically speaking of course since we all know Jon has been the only one to actually suck Arin off) because of their similarities. The old Game Grumps was the shizz because Jon and Arin butted heads more time than one. Not only that, but Jon always took it to the next level in terms of jokes, but Arin stopped him before he went too far... On most occasions anyway.
Exhibit A (Dan and Arin are too much alike):
EVERY F***ING EPISODE!!!!!!
Exhibit B: (Jon and Arin argue PONY GRUMPS STYLE!!!):
Exhibit C (Jon ventures into dangerous territory, but Arin recovers... Mostly)
BONUS ROUND:
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Plot twist, it was Barry all along
3600150 well I enjoy your honesty and you do bring up some good points. But I won't rewrite it simply because you don't like it.
The grammar and who's talking are problems I will work on but the story is something I will not. If most people did not like it and it was the first chapter then I would delete it and try again. But you are in the minority. And in response to Jon and Arin so quickly willing to help pinky (and most of everything else), I write Jon and Arin as basically real life toons. Like a real life bugs bunny and daffy and take things real easy going.
In the end while I don't agree with some of your opinions as I just believe your over thinking it, I will defend your right to say it.
IT IS TIME
for me to make a bunch of excuses which I feel are relevant to this conversation
or
time to stick my nose in the argument bakery
3600587>>3600150
These humans are not john and arin. These are not humans. If you look at the wacky, joking behavior of the ponies named johntron and egoraptor, you will notice that they aren't realistic in any way. They are nothing but a medium for the sarcastic humor displayed in the show. Their personalities consist only of quick whit, well placed stupidity, annoying behavior, and rudeness. In chapter four, this story outright says that they are best at getting in the way and making a big mess, which is NOT true of the real game grumps.
Having said that, it makes complete sense that these personalities would be able to adjust to nearly anything, since "oh, we're horses I guess; Whoop de freakin' doo" seems exactly like the kind of reaction they would have to something absurd happening on the show, unless they burst out laughing.
Since only the joke-personalities are being used and since they react perfectly to everything, it makes scene to shuttle them from event to event as efficiently as possible so that they can do the next goofy thing or make the next set of jokes the author has planned. Since the characters are just contrivance's, we can't get particularly invested in them as people and any attempt at legitimate drama or internal conflict or basically anything serious would be weird and misplaced.
Having said that, I have to ask the author to never bring the game grumps out of their show character. If they act like real people in any way, then real logic has to be applied to the events of the story and that would just be so many kinds of wrong.
Yeah, that's definitely a problem sometimes.
Since we don't care about john's conflicts and growth and since he isn't really a person, he is basically licensed to do whatever brings him to the next shenanigan, like plunging a somehow working phone into a jukebox using unprecedented magic.
3600996 Good point, but in response to you believing the grumps do not get in the way and make a big mess, I present sonic 06 as my defense. A game that took them almost 120 episodes to get even close to the ending. Trust me when I say that it can be a jumbled mess a lot of the times and more often then not is there fault. In the end I enjoy you arguing against that guy but please I can handle him, if he truly get mean or acts like a jackass, I can always block him and delete his comments.
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Oh, I'm not here to white night. I'm hear because I enjoy organizing my thoughts on a matter to the point where they would actually be comprehensible to another human, and because I had a point to make. I'm here because I like arguments. Not all arguments have to have angry people.
And I've watched a good portion of the game grumps channel.
What they are best at, in the whole wide world, is entertaining. Also, I attribute a good portion of their game-play flaws to the fact that they are distracted by their efforts to entertain people, especially their terrible navigation skills.
3600549 Exactly. But I guess I can see how people could find that annoying. The new GG is FINE but I just feel it's lacking compared to the original. Ross is cool and all it's just that Dan isn't that funny to me and it just makes me want Jon back more. I can't really enjoy it now because every time I just think about what could of been.
My name's Molestia and I'm here to say;
I'm gonna smack your ass in a major way.
What are ya doin' in my basement? Get outta here.
...GET OUTTA HERE!
Awww yis.
This does indeed fondle my dildash.
7 asses.
3601371 I understand that. As someone who loves debates myself I know not all arguments or debates have to be rage filled , That one guy just came off as more over analyzing and critical then byter and I just wanted to give my two cents on the matter since I'm the auther.
3601558 You sure have made my day. As a token of my gratitude, heres a dash
Yes... The Master Plane. Too bad it crash and burned right after take off.
Edit: Good lord you need to clean this up. It's getting to the point where I want to unfavorite and dislike it.
3601483
Either way:
Oh sweet! You are continuing this.
I was a bit confused because you didn't send it to me edit.
Anyway, just letting you know that I changed my name, I'm Norspark, in case you want me to check it out sometime.
3602547 sorry I didn't send it to you. I was just to exited and wanted to get it out after so long.
Are these Cutie Mark Crusaders? Hoshi's looking much better!
3604476
Why? That's part of what makes them so funny, if they breezed through the games without difficulty it wouldn't be nearly as fun. Also they aren't necessarily terrible at games because they aren't usually taking it dead seriously so it's hard to judge how good they actually are.
So, I picked up this story about half an hour ago. In all times, because wibbly wobbly. Anyways, I noticed improvement in chapters 2 and 3 from chapter one, but when I reached this one, I felt like you just gave up. I understand that you didn't put this through an editor, and if I may put in an opinion of my own, perhaps you could do so at a later date? Simply to fix things up.
Anyways, to continue my rant/comment/words-on-the-interwebs, Spell-Check isn't a truly reliable source of errors. I saw a number of errors still put through, as well as a right word with the wrong spelling. Such examples to give (as my statements are rather trivial without evidence) are as follows: Plane over Plain, Plane instead of Plan, Were instead of Where, so on and so forth. Also, Spell-Check is unable to perfectly analyze grammar flaws, such as periods where there should be commas, and sentences ending without any sort of punctuation (aside from quotation marks, as where it happened most was at the end of dialogue).
Another small problem that Spell-Check seems to miss occasionally is missing words and improper capitalization. More examples to prove my point are as follows(Underline for improper capitalization/missing capitalzation, strike through for missing words,):
I will be honest here, it took me longer to find missing words than most other mistakes. But they are still frequent enough to make a point out of it.
I feel like I missed a lot of my original rant in the sea of thoughts, but I digress. Your writing is not the most horrendous I have seen, nor does it seem to be a complete issue with you. Reviewing some of your replies to comments, I see that it's not English overall that you have a problem with, but rather words with multiple spellings. An example of this is your reply to Winter Storm (specifically, the second one), where you spelled most of it impeccably. The exceptions are your use of 'peace' instead of 'piece', and the lack of a hyphen for auto-correct, however auto-correct is not always spelled with a hyphen so it is acceptable regardless. I would add more to rant on, such as a word count of how many times you used "your" instead of "you're" (I actually only counted two times, feel free to prove me wrong anypony), or recount common typos you had. However, I do not feel like expanding this too much longer.
In closing, I am trying to assist you as best as I can, as I have a friend that writes similarly to you (albeit I think his writing is worse). I would gladly offer my services as an editor if you so choose, and I'm not trying to be harsh or point out every flaw I can. Rather, I am trying to offer help in way of criticism in hopes to see you grow as a writer. It is also beneficial to have more than a single editor, as a second or third will often catch details that their predecessors missed. I leave you with my regards, and hope that I have helped at least marginally. Farewell, and may the tides of fate be in your favour.
3599980No. Just no. Both not so grumps are awesome, but the comedic click between Jon and Arin was perfect. Whatever you think, though.
Okay, great story, and you've got the characters down, but please get an editor. So far, the grammatical errors are the only downside to this story, and if you fix those, then it would be golden.
3606382 Thank you so much for the feedback. If your truly willing, I would like to have you as a story editor. The other reason I didn't send it to be edited was because the guy has a busy life and I want to have it out as soon as possible and not a couple of weeks later (nothing against him, I just prefer it if I had concrete time instead of whenever.) .
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Sure, I would definitely accept the offer of being an editor. I would try to edit and return the story as soon as I could, because I'm sure everyone else would like to see advancement as well.
Also, glad my comment was appreciated.
3678421 Stay tuned
the lack of spike bothers me....also will dan and ross be in th story, if so can ross bond with spike since their both treated like shit
wait, will this be updated? I know it says the fic is incomplete but I saw when the last chapter was made, and it looks like it's been a while. I actually want to make my own game grumps fanfic but since this is incomplete and people are suggesting the other game grumps, I'm scared people will think mine is going to copy yours, because it's going to have all of the grumps in it.
4571762 Don't be afraid to do it. If you do it in your own way, then your not copying anyone. Also yes, I will update this, I just have not been enthused about writing Latley, but I plane to at least dedicate 2-4 hours a day writing.
Well, I think he needs to do a better job. First Impressions before I even start reading? This is gonna be good.
Good job, BARRY.
5645206 Why yes. Yes it is.
5645211 Why yes. Yes it is.