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Iiiiinteresting...
Yoko wasn't the one I expected to die so soon. Especially with how big he is. Someone had to get the drop on him, or tricked him somehow.
Dopple's backstory IS suspicious. Especially with mentions of Ultimates in it. However, I almost feel it's TOO suspicious. You're too good an author to just outright tell us that information. It feels like the distraction to a magic trick. I feel like you've told us something much more significant in this chapter than that, but much more subtle. Greyscale is still my number one suspect for the Mastermind. But again, that feels too obvious. He does feel like an unreliable narrator, but he doesn't feel cunning enough.
Anywho, time for the return of Dumb Theory Theater!
- Dopple killed Yoko. She was using Greyscale as an alibi.
- Celestia is the Mastermind.
- Dopple's father is the Mastermind, looking obsessively for more Ultimates. He's in disguise as one of the other constesrants, secretly having the same gift for impersonation as his daughter.
- Elise killed Yoko. That Surprising Strength of hers took him off guard, and she did something to him.
That's all I've got. Wonderful emotional moments. Is it bad I was hoping for a murder this chapter? Because now we get to go into another fun investigation and trial!
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I am loving your theories! I of course can neither confirm nor deny any of them, but I can't help but enjoy seeing you try to figure things out.
I'm glad you've enjoyed the story up to this point, and I hope I can keep things up to standard going into the second investigation. Not sure when I will have it ready to publish, but I'll do what I can!
Nice chapter! I liked the heartfelt conversation between Greyscale and Dopple I ship it!, and it was a good callback to one of Monobunny’s earlier statements. You also present us with more mysteries of outside the dome! I’m already starting to ponder how the ending could’ve happened.
Ooh, finally!
Aww, poor Yoko. Whoever killed him sure did a number on him. I feel like Dopple's comment about the weapons and numbers in the MonoMart might be important.
...Did he fall down some stairs? Multiple thuds sounds like falling down the stairs and might explain why he's so wrecked.
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Ah, very well remembered! These skills of yours will come in handy in the future!
After the somewhat 'peaceful' and non-gory death of the first murder I wanted something much more extreme and horrific for the second. And for it to seem a near impossibility considering the victim... Let's just say I had to Google some rather suspect things to figure this one out, which hopefully hasn't put me on any watchlists.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy the upcoming investigation. Which will be ready, erm... whenever I can manage it? (My upload schedule hasn't exactly been as fast as I'd like, I'll admit.)
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Yes, I've been taking my sweet time before having another murder. But now the investigation can commence! Provided I can keep up a decent writing pace.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy!
Oh no another one dead. I wonder who could’ve done it, I think there are some obvious red herrings.
Is it bad that I was a little too happy to see another murder finally happen? Yoko was on my list of possible victims to die next so I'm not too surprised to see him go, but the manner in which it happened was still definitely shocking.
The long gap between the first and second murder does kind of raise an interesting point about how this story flows compared to the actual games. Unlike the games, you don't get to pick and choose which characters you spend time with, which sort of makes it necessary to see a fair amount of all of them. (Except for Reph. I assumed he was the victim at first and was a little disappointed because the guy's kinda been the Ultimate Forgettable Character so far and I'm hoping we get more about him eventually because he's had an almost suspicious lack of focus. I'd be half-expecting him to be the mastermind at this point had Monobunny not already shot that possibility down.)
As for Dopple...well, you already know my suspicions about her, so I'll just say that I'm honestly not sure if this bit of backstory is evidence for or against my theory. I'll elaborate over DM.
In any case, it's an exciting prospect to get to participate in the coming trial this time. Looking forward to it!
La verdad pensé que iba ser Burton el siguiente por tu comentario en el anterior capítulo, pero no lo fue y ahora si me disculpas me voy a esa esquina a llorar