“You want to what!?” Twilight allowed an odd horse noise to escape her muzzle in shock.
“I'm going to ascend.” Fluttershy spoke in an oddly confident tone of voice, chest puffed out as she sat upon a crystalline chair.
Both mares had decided to meet and discuss something of great importance. Yet now the large Royal Hall was filled with an awkward silence, Twilight unsure how to proceed forward from such a bombshell.
“Ponies can't ascend, it's unnatural.” Twilight blurted out with a loud snort.
“Excuse me?” Fluttershy narrowed eyes to the alicorn sternly.
“I mean becoming an alicorn, is an act of benevolence.” Twilight quipped in a collected manner; hoof flaunted towards her friend in dismissal.
“But becoming a creature of chaos is wrong?” Fluttershy pursed her lips with frustration.
“I wouldn’t say wrong, just unpredictable.” Twilight frowned in place with a genuine look of concern.
“Without chaos, harmony wouldn't exist.” The yellow pegasus spoke under her breath with conviction, her eyes seemed to glow with newfound determination.
“But look at Discord, he's an absolute mess!” Twilight huffed as her guest gave a sudden slam of the hoof upon the cutie map.
“He's our friend and my…” Fluttershy could feel her cheeks burning brightly as anger began to course across her tiny frame.
“I'm just saying, without proper insight, you could get hurt.” Twilight lowered her head down in a sense of dismay, she loved her friend yet knew she must give an honest reply.
Fluttershy could feel tears sting her eyes, she thought Twilight would be overjoyed about such news. Instead she was inclined to be against such a choice, the pegasus slowly allowed her wings to spread outward in sadness.
“I'm not, I'll be living my life for someone I love.” Fluttershy wiped the tears from her large eyes with a limp hoof, head turned to face an open window.
“Fluttershy, just think this through!” Twilight swallowed a large lump in her throat.
“Goodbye, Twilight.” Fluttershy whispered in barely a whisper, flying off into the morning sky and vanishing over the horizon.
“Awesome, so you'll become a draconequus!” Pinkie giggled in unbound excitement for her friend, jumping out from behind the counter of Sugarcube Corner her coat streaked with fresh flour.
“Well Pinkie, Discord said I could actually become a number of things.” Fluttershy giggled nervously, the pink mare pulling her into an extra-large hug.
“Even Smooze!!” Pinkie gave a loud squee, in her mind picturing quite a sight.
“Um, I guess so?” A large pile of yellow goo spoke towards Pinkie, a pastel blue flower placed atop her sticky amorphous head.
Pinkie couldn't help but burst into a fit of giggles, her imagination trying to run away on her once again. Though her playful demeanor was cut short as she noticed Fluttershy seemed troubled, her Pinkie Sense warning something dreary was ahoof.
“What's wrong?” Pinkie folded ears back, her hoof placed atop Fluttershy’s in worry.
“Twilight.” Fluttershy frowned sore over the subject.
“Oooooh!” Pinkie shook her head, as she cantered to the counter calmly.
“She believes if I do this, I'll regret it.” Fluttershy spoke in a whisper.
“Would you?” Pinkie raised a thin brow curiously, already knowing the answer.
“Am I scared? Am I excited to start a journey of the unknown? Yes!” Fluttershy gave a flustered sigh aloud, wrapping herself in a tight hug to calm quivering nerves.
“But regret this choice? No.” Fluttershy spoke in a tone of a dreamer.
Her mind flashed to Rarity who moved away across the sea to a new land of creativity or drifting to Rainbow Dash a pony now on a Wonderbolts tour across the furthest reaches of Equestria. They chose not to live in uncertainty or fear, but to live in the moment with faith in their choices.
“If you have no doubt in your heart, then follow it from the start.” Pinkie turned to face her friend with a smile which beamed brightly.
“You wouldn't judge my actions?” Fluttershy held back a fresh batch of tears, walking over to her friend who simply giggled.
“Of course not, I only want you to be happy!” The pink mare embraced her friend with an open heart, both ponies soon locked into a long silent hug.
The strength of their friendship shined brighter even in the most uncertain of circumstances, both breaking the hug only to hold each other's hooves tenderly, each shedding joyous tears in the moment, for whatever the future might hold.
The night would bask all Equestria in a pale blue light. It had arrived much quicker than most days, as if to guide the yellow pegasus across her path into the unknown. To many the abyss something to be feared or shunned, yet tonight she found beauty within the void.
Fluttershy cantered down a large open path of The Everfree wearing a flowing white dress, a tiara made of multicolored flowers placed atop her head. She moved nervously towards her destination, Pinkie at her side with a large wagon which overflowed with various party supplies.
Her only regret this night being that Applejack was away on business in Manehattan, Fluttershy decided she was ready to take the plunge tonight. Just in case Twilight didn't quite desire to stand idly by and watch, this was her life and she wanted a fresh beginning.
After her animals each grew up and left the nest or simply enjoyed a long-fulfilled life like Angel, she had begun to feel a sense of loneliness creep into her soul. Fluttershy gave years of her life away for the betterment of others, it was time she was rewarded for such an act of kindness.
Both mares soon escaped from the claustrophobic path of the forest and into a large open space full of light, the beauty of the full moon cascaded down upon them. Nocturnal sounds of nature created an otherworldly melody for those of the world to hear, flowers littered the landscape or danced upon the wind.
A scene of true beauty.
Far across the large opening in the blue spotlight of the cosmos, stood a most handsome draconequus dressed in his most dapper of suits. His goofy grin spread ear to ear across his face, those chaotic eyes drinking in the elegance of his special somepony.
Fluttershy felt faint but excited, her hooves shook non-stop as she shifted her gaze to her supportive friend. Pinkie returning a knowing wink to the pegasus, as she allowed the wagon to come to a rest behind them.
“Go to him.” Pinkie whispered with a tear rolling down her cheek, Fluttershy darting off into the opening, radiating with happiness.
Pinkie didn't have much time to prepare before the ceremony began, but she'd make sure this tiny get together, would be cherished forever.
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Click source under the picture.
It's art done by Pixel Prisim on DA!
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It's the calmest of seas, that hold the fiercest of monsters.
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It doesn't show the picture's source for me.... When I did that it just separated the pic fron the website... Like when you click open image in a new window
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I believe this was the link the author meant to use.
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Ty!
What if fluttershy gained two heads one that always lies and one that always tells the truth
Very nice story! I love the premise.
The only problem is that the frasing is somewhat awkward in places, and there's a lot of flowery language used in the first chapter. Another little nitpick is the characters. They seem a bit too extreme, and it's hard to believe that Twilight would be so completely against Fluttershy wanting to change. I feel like if she was in that situation, she would at least try to understand Fluttershy or give some opposing arguments beyond what was said in story. And the interactions between Fluttershy and Discord are a bit much. They're far too lovey-dovey and it detracts from their personalities.
I know that's a lot of criticism, but please don't stop this story because of it. I just want to help your story be the best it can, and give some advice to make you a better writer.
Wishing you all the best,
A Stranger
Fuck you Twilight you asshat
Many of mistakes have been made by ignoring advise given by sincere friends.
I do not altogether agree with how Twilight is protrayed. You got the I am sure I am right down but ignored all the consideration of friends from the beginning of the series. She would have made a list of pros and cons and debated with Fluttershy why it is a bad idea on the logic side of things ignoring the emotional ones. And let's face it, when people decide to act on solely emotions, it always ends tragically.
But this is fiction where things can have a happily ever after and we came to she Fluttershy become an Eldritch abbomination abeit a hopefully cute one.
This reads kind of like a play or a musical of sorts.
It's dialogue is very theatrical and I find that to be a unique style of writing that you don't see too often on the site.
It makes it kind of cheesy, but in a good way.
It's hard not to imagine the characters as actors upon a stage, like in a musical, and that ads it's own flair to the story.
I'll keep track of this for future updates, but I applaud what you've done so far.
Don't think there needs to be an "and" there.
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Ty, I was trying to go for that style.
Sort of a stylized approach.
Thought it might be in the spirit of the story at hand, lol.
Can't believe I missed that, Ty.
It's been fixed.
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I'm hoping for a fluff feel for the comedy, romance.
Though having some dark undertones planned to contrast.
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Lol, well she's acting stubborn.
In the next chapter she is making an appearance at Fluttershy's ritual. Though as the story progresses, Twilight will be our guide on seeing the horrors growing around her. Much like the narrator's role, the well upbringing, intelligent character, running into the horrors of the unknown, lol.
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Lol I know, I'm purposely making it lovey dovey.
Trying to stylize what Fluttershy wants to believe is her perfect romantic happy ending.
Trust me once the opening to this story is through, that dies down to a more realistic tone. Then the eldritch horror aspects of the story will shift into the more stylized tone, same with Twilight I'm stylizing them as a reference towards like the overblown nature of these types of horrors, lol.
But as some parts shift to reality others will become, otherworldly and odd.
I feel keeps it in a Surreal type of feel.
Also ty, I adore criticism!
I'd never improve without help.
Chapter 3 should be out a bit later.
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Yep it was, ty Drider lol.
Updating now!
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I'm planning a " The Dunwich Horror" type of transformation.
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What's that
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H.P. Lovecraft
It's going to be a growingly disfigured look.
With tentacles, chimerism and a few other things.
Not to give too much away.
I'm planning several looks, through the story.
One which is a Dunwich reference and another, which will be different.
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Intresting
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Ah. Okay. I can see it now, once you've explained it. And I agree, criticism is always good. :)
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why is there a romance tag on this
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Because at the heart of all this, is still going to have a Fluttershy X Discord romance in it.
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i suppose i should thank you for the warning
i rather despise that ship
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No problem.
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Can I be upset if fluttershy doesnt get a dragon tail?
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Ooooh I will be looking forward to it.
Looks very good so far, Keep going!
I know this is a bit left field... But please tell me we're going to find out that Pinkie ascended years ago and has just been keeping herself in check or something like that.
Also, unrelated to that wish, loving the start of the story.
My main complaint thus far is that the dialogue is uniform and massively stilted. Nobody speaks with character and they all use the same overly proper, unnatural phrasing. Their behavior is equally stilted.