I answered without a second thought. "Name's Jekyll now die bird," I growled out before I clicked my fingers igniting the gas within my palm and using it like a flamethrower. "Ha, knew it'd work."
huh this feels familiar
(the name is the same as the protag of a displaced fic known as monster is as monster does but in that one he gets powers of blacklight from prototype but without video game restrictions, now come to think of it the way he got his name as jekyll is of him with a Griffen as its dying, granted in miam that jekyll isn't the one responsible for the death of said Griffen)
yo, Is it funny I downloaded the first version of this? XD also I have a few tips for ya, do. not. use. colored. text, its glaringly bright on a white background, and hurts my eyes, most likely others eyes as well, I will give this re write a reading, but I do wish you'd have posted a blog asking if we wanted a re write, or give others a chance to download the story before you take it down, or, just leave it up, I loved the first story, abit twas a bit cringy at certain times, but I do recommend you do as I said next time before you delete/re write a story, as many fans like to read the same story more than twice, good thing I have the old version downloaded :P and the new one to, lets see if this is as good as the old, shall we?
Welp.....I like this one better than the last one,better spelling and all that,try n update every few weeks or half a month,like I do with my stories,please message me if you update this
"Wha," the loud honk of a bus was the last thing I heard as I felt my right arm and leg be pushed into my body their bones splintering and acting like shrapnel shredding my insides. I then felt the buses' wheels run over my spine snapping it in half and turning any organs that were still left from the initial impact to a sticky red paste. I barely felt the warm asphalt beneath my skin and on my exposed flesh as my mind shut down...
I just found out about this fic and thought 'hey why not?' Click the next chap and got an error instead
Dude
Your rude
Not cool
9609039
Oh thanks for notifying me of this I’ll fix it
more chapters this one is more interesting then the last one
9609304
I’m gonna try to post more ASAP and this time that doesn’t mean 2 years.
9609382
cool make the next one AWESOME
9609388
Suggestions are appreciated pm me any you might have also what do u think of it being in futaquestria.
9609393
it being in Futaquestria makes it funny as fuck he is either going to fuck a mare or get fucked by a mare
9609416
Want a small spoiler
huh this feels familiar
(the name is the same as the protag of a displaced fic known as monster is as monster does but in that one he gets powers of blacklight from prototype but without video game restrictions, now come to think of it the way he got his name as jekyll is of him with a Griffen as its dying, granted in miam that jekyll isn't the one responsible for the death of said Griffen)
yo, Is it funny I downloaded the first version of this? XD also I have a few tips for ya, do. not. use. colored. text, its glaringly bright on a white background, and hurts my eyes, most likely others eyes as well, I will give this re write a reading, but I do wish you'd have posted a blog asking if we wanted a re write, or give others a chance to download the story before you take it down, or, just leave it up, I loved the first story, abit twas a bit cringy at certain times, but I do recommend you do as I said next time before you delete/re write a story, as many fans like to read the same story more than twice, good thing I have the old version downloaded :P and the new one to, lets see if this is as good as the old, shall we?
9609815
I didn't mean to copy anybody. I just like the name.
9610193
I know I know, I was just pointing it out
(and the fact it came first)
didn't mean to imply you did a plagiarism, just stating a similarity I had found intriguing
Please continue
Welp.....I like this one better than the last one,better spelling and all that,try n update every few weeks or half a month,like I do with my stories,please message me if you update this
please tell me the MC is not evil and has a hate boner against celly or the ponies
There are some grammatical errors and the pov changes are confusing but other than that this is pritty good
9614267
He did in the last version of this but I don't know how much it will change so far it is really different from the original
JEEZ, how fast was that bus going?
Its gonna be the wrong lever