Now that's a colt in a lot of trouble if I ever saw one. I hope we get to see more about his parents as the story goes on. Also, have you changed the usual structure a bit? The other colts got a treat from their mares by the next chapter. I guess this one will have to try a bit harder
Pear Butter: IIIIIIIMMMMM ABOUT TO WHOOP SOMEPONYS ASS
On another note,
Stepping back, you eye your creation with some pride. There are enough blankets that you’ve managed to make several ‘rooms’ within the tent. By Discord’s chaotic emeralds, it feels like forever since you last made something like this! You’ve totally forgotten how entertaining it could be. Now all you need is for mom to bring you a plate of… of…
That was a Sonic reference wasn't it? Clever Bastard
9649574 Nah, nothing like that. Unfortunately, I've been swamped trying to update Chris's Batty Family as well as packing up and moving out of my apartment.
Now that's a colt in a lot of trouble if I ever saw one. I hope we get to see more about his parents as the story goes on.
Also, have you changed the usual structure a bit? The other colts got a treat from their mares by the next chapter. I guess this one will have to try a bit harder
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He's so getting locked in the attic at night now. As well as a leash during the day
Please have it be an S&M relation to straighten us out
Hmmm... I'm gonna remain cautious, this is heading down an interesting route, curious to see where it ends up going.
Good show my dude, good show! Pear Butter got some stronk leeegs
They better at least fuck once in Fort Awesomeness.
Oh I just can't wait for the ending.
Granny Smith: "And that's how you were born!"
Applebloom: "..........................."
Pear Butter: IIIIIIIMMMMM ABOUT TO WHOOP SOMEPONYS ASS
On another note,
That was a Sonic reference wasn't it? Clever Bastard
9649574
Nah, nothing like that. Unfortunately, I've been swamped trying to update Chris's Batty Family as well as packing up and moving out of my apartment.
Nicely written.
Well paced and mechanically proficient.
Incomplete.
Being stuck in the close headspace of a second person protagonist this unlikable feels very claustrophobic and unenjoyable to me, personally.
Such is always a risk with first and second person narrators.
But the fic's other qualities made it overall a page turner.
You sir, have a fascination with Discord's testicles. Not unreasonable, to be honest.
Yes...you should have....
But you didn't... but you didn't....