I quite liked your story, if you need an editor or just a proofreader, let me know as I would be more then willing. Your brevity is a nice change of pace and your main character is interesting without being so overpowered that they feel cliche. Well done. I hope to see more soon.
My interest still holds. So far I like the depiction of your characters and the shifting perspectives hasn’t been grating on the nerves like other stories. Though time in the story has been just over a day, you’re keeping a nice pace with events.
I’ll also admit that I’m curious how our main character is going to progress. He knows where he came from as a human, yet his new body is overwriting that part and quickly making him a true necron. The lore has become his reality... but will he lose his humanity?
It bothers me a little that the MC has taken on the role of the Silent King so deeply. He's not recalling his own past, he's recalling the Necron's past. For all intents and purposes in this story, the MC was ripped apart with everything but his personality being discarded, and placed in the Silent King's body with all his memories to go with.
9537135 I agree 9538126 The way I see it as he was given the memories of the Silent King along with having his own. In the terms of years his are but a drop of water in the ocean. So his personality preserved itself bit the menories are mostly the Silent King thus he is transiting into the role. His emotions also suspress themselves.
9538799 Well no, it was shown at the beginning he chose to act as the Silent King. What I was mostly concerned about is that there's no mention of him anymore. He chose to act like the Silent King, but there's no thoughts from him anymore, only the Silent King.
The problem mainly being this no longer becomes a Displaced story. It becomes an X in Equestria story.
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Not exactly, Lord Ainz has felt no impact to his emotions, he simply lacks the facial structures needed to be able to form expressions.
this GIF is me whenever i see a new chapter https://mntnelf.tumblr.com/image/181952012907
Observation: This was nice.
I quite liked your story, if you need an editor or just a proofreader, let me know as I would be more then willing.
Your brevity is a nice change of pace and your main character is interesting without being so overpowered that they feel cliche.
Well done. I hope to see more soon.
My interest still holds. So far I like the depiction of your characters and the shifting perspectives hasn’t been grating on the nerves like other stories. Though time in the story has been just over a day, you’re keeping a nice pace with events.
I’ll also admit that I’m curious how our main character is going to progress. He knows where he came from as a human, yet his new body is overwriting that part and quickly making him a true necron. The lore has become his reality... but will he lose his humanity?
I look forward to where you take this story.
M O A R.
I demand more Necron!!
It bothers me a little that the MC has taken on the role of the Silent King so deeply. He's not recalling his own past, he's recalling the Necron's past. For all intents and purposes in this story, the MC was ripped apart with everything but his personality being discarded, and placed in the Silent King's body with all his memories to go with.
9537135
I agree
9538126
The way I see it as he was given the memories of the Silent King along with having his own. In the terms of years his are but a drop of water in the ocean. So his personality preserved itself bit the menories are mostly the Silent King thus he is transiting into the role. His emotions also suspress themselves.
9538799
Well no, it was shown at the beginning he chose to act as the Silent King. What I was mostly concerned about is that there's no mention of him anymore. He chose to act like the Silent King, but there's no thoughts from him anymore, only the Silent King.
The problem mainly being this no longer becomes a Displaced story. It becomes an X in Equestria story.
9538799
Hit it on the head, friend.
More plz
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HERETIC!
(note I'm loving this fic too)