I'm enjoying the non involvement of the main six. I know that may come off a bit hard, but it is stories like this that reminds you. The world besides them exist.
9527635 Thanks for the feedback! I know that the description of Szarekh may be a little long winded but I felt it was more important to give him a fleshed out appearance, rather than letting it be a point of confusion later on.
I understand that my Displacement setup was lazy, and I'm trying to decide whether or not I should rewrite chapter 0.
Thanks again for the critique and I look forward to hearing from you in the future.
Ok so the guards are acting incredibly stupidly. Doesn’t matter who is in charge or what they think Szarekh has done, the guards wouldn’t do this. It’s even illegal for them to do this.
. I felt the surge of rage in my being and, before he could say any more I spoke, “I will not release my charge. I will not cede to your baseless accusations. I have stated before that I am not holding her against her will. I have not been allowed to offer my defense. I now state for the official record that I will only speak further on this with Princess Celestia. I warn you now that any who attempt to enter this building without being allowed in will be treated as a criminal intruder and incapacitated with prejudice. You have heard what my position is. If this is to be resolved, I will talk no further in such biased company. I expect the Princess at her earliest convenience. That is all.”
With that said I closed the door and made my way to the living room.
“Harvest,” I asked, “would you like a cup of tea?”
“Can I have some juice instead? There's some in the fridge.”
Hmm, intriguing. Best of the vein, colleague. Do keep up the intriguing work.
I'm enjoying the non involvement of the main six. I know that may come off a bit hard, but it is stories like this that reminds you. The world besides them exist.
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Thanks for the feedback! I know that the description of Szarekh may be a little long winded but I felt it was more important to give him a fleshed out appearance, rather than letting it be a point of confusion later on.
I understand that my Displacement setup was lazy, and I'm trying to decide whether or not I should rewrite chapter 0.
Thanks again for the critique and I look forward to hearing from you in the future.
You have fucked with the Papa bear with this line.
RD will get into some serious problems when properly interagated
The story is good so far, please update soon.
*Daaaaawwww*
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Statement: Correct.
I like
Well, that was certainly a way to escalate things. I cast my vote with Szarekh.
Ok so the guards are acting incredibly stupidly. Doesn’t matter who is in charge or what they think Szarekh has done, the guards wouldn’t do this. It’s even illegal for them to do this.
I just love how, at the end he goes from SO ANGRY to so nice
He just gives no ducks about the guard
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To be real, I do same exact thing IRL