Kirin temple, Fluffy should drink from it.

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A very good point

At the moment the Vote is 1:1 For Fluffy or the Black Death to drink from it

This is literally an annoying choice to make.
It's either Black or Fluffy or Fluffy or Black!
I think it should be Fluffy, because .......

“Keep your tail at yourself!” Daring shouted down to us. “I’ll break every bone in your body if you touch her in my presence again!”

"What if there is a bun in the oven?" is what Fluff said, I still don't know this pony like lingo, but it seems it made the other Fluff stop her struggle, turn to look at me as if she was about to breath fire upon me and somehow, for the first time I felt like I was truly staring at death for just one second. I really need to ask about this later

I could see cousin all the sudden turn into a really angry Lime Pie! Man, I found it funny her arguing there is no such thing as "Lady Luck" and then she goes with "Remember that one time" and it shuts her up!

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I could see cousin all the sudden turn into a really angry Lime Pie!

Imagine you would be right with your suggestion about Fluffy's condition... I am sure TBD woulkd be in great trouble then!

is what Fluff said, I still don't know this pony like lingo, but it seems it made the other Fluff stop her struggle, turn to look at me as if she was about to breath fire upon me and somehow, for the first time I felt like I was truly staring at death for just one second. I really need to ask about this later

I can't follow you here, sorry my english again Who is lingo? And who is speaking in this`?

2:1 for Fluffy it is

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Lingo definition is "a foreign language or local dialect". As to the other part, it was from the perspective of TBD.
When Fluff's cousin threaten TBD about touching her cousin and that she would break every bone if he did anything in front of her. I thought "what if" Fluff would have said something like "Its ok, I got a bun in the oven". TBD dragon would have been oblivious about the meaning, and just thought it meant some pony words he was not aware. It was supposed to be a funny dialogue and I hope it didn't get lost in the explanation.

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Yes that would be great

Sorry you had to explain your comment again

Well, I had, just hypothetically of course, ask myself if TBD would know what pregnancy means, I don't think so So even she would explain the 'bun in the oven' thing for him, he wouldn't be wiser

We have wasted a good amount of time with that, but in the end, she had accepted that I may be speaking the truth, and therefor, we had to act.

Therefore*

With new confidence. she took another step forward and kept only one hoof up.

New confidence, she took* (replace the period with a comma)

“Only the once carrying my blessing are able to open the door to this inner sanctuary of my temple.”

the ones* (or if I may highly suggest rewriting it this way; "Only those carrying" OR "Only those who carry" as it 'sounds' better. I'd personally choose the latter suggestion, but that's me)

ANYwho... Your story is progressively pulling more and more emotions from me the more established things become in this fanfic. Oh how endless it can be to express how absurdly excited I am for the next chapter!

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The next chapter is halfway written... And I told my editor about your suggestions in matter of gramma.

Again thank you so much for your supporting comments

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I adjusted the sentence to your later suggestion.

Btw, what you said about the perspective, past tense is not so uncommon I guess, but first person was new for me too. Took me three stories and two years to realise how much the atmosphere of a story can benefit from it while writing.

Hmm... interesting. I wonder who her "dad" is. Another good chapter boss.

“Then I tell your father about your affair with Ahuizotl!” Fluffy shouted back.

OH S&%! THAT'S A GOOD COMEBACK

Another chapter that had me on the wage of my seat. My vote is for BD jut to be fear.

If Daring had something with Ahuizotl it makes me wonder if she had something with Caballeron as well at some point. Of course that might just be because he wanted to steal from her since he cares about little more than getting rich.