Good story but needs a proofreader

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I'll go back to my room then.

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Drache Schatten is my proofreader actually. So what is your problem with his Work?

Also, I must confess, sometimes I decide against his suggestions, so probably some stuff is my fault not his.

I want to pet a kirin!
Do: You do realize that you will burn your hands!
Pets Do
[screams in burning pain] I regret Nothing!!

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I told you she's hot

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But if you also read the end it's a two for one special. Fluffy pony for part of the time, cute ball of sexual fire the rest of the time. THERE IS NO DOWNSIDE.

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You know what this calls for?
Shots full of Fireball
1x Fluffyness
2x Horniss
3x Denied

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Ok, one of you guys explain this to me, please? I don't get this:

You know what this calls for?
Shots full of Fireball
1x Fluffyness
2x Horniss
3x Denied

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Taking shots of Fireball(Cinnamon) whiskey
Take a shot whenever you read anything related to Fluffyness x1
Take two shots whenever you read anything related to Horniness x2
Take three shots whenever you read anything related to being Denied x3

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Ohhh boy! You don't make it till the end of chapter 3 then

I like your way of thinking

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I'm positive chapter 4 is going to be a death sentence if we go by those rules there too, especially since its the naughty chapter

The perfect song for both of them. It's both country and excellent for cuddling and the fun times.

Oh now it's really getting steamy. Glad to see he's a dragon that listens to cute fluffy ponies! Keep up the good work boss!

This just keeps getting better and better as it goes.

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Honestly, despite the few minor errors your editor missed, I'm liking this so far.
Quick question, what is the accurate size of Black Death? Certainly a foot larger than a pony if the cover image has anything to do with it.