Twilight Sparkle is the most brilliant pony and the most difficult adversary, but soon that will change. As Twilight Sparkle is about to be welcomed, into the fold.
"Arise, my daughter. Arise... Twilight." "By your will, mother, I live to serve... Let all who oppose my queen feel the wrath of the Swarm."
Sorry, I just couldn't resist. While this could benefit from a bit of proofreading I enjoyed it immensely and I can't wait to see where you go with it.
I have to see more before I can judge it. However, this is good so far. The part in the first chapter that I like was twilight exploring the queens body.
as ashamed as i am to say this concening the subject matter i wish to see more mother/daughter bonding between twily and chrissy before the inevitable dark story turn of conquest of all equestria and the possible deaths of celestia and luna (my fav princess btw) this is shaping up to be a great and terrifying story
I wonder what exactly has change in Twilights brain. Has her memory been altered? Has she been conditioned to respond in certain ways to certain things? Was the experience and feelings so good that she is now convinced that it cannot be bad? Is it a combination? Her body might have changed but her memory and mind might be intact. What is it that will keep her loyal? Has she lost all reason or what?
…….what?......WHAT THE FUCK!? What did I just read? That was just weird and just....weird....I wanted a typical Twilight x Chrysalis story not some weird creepy fetish....
9166018 It litterly says and I qoute "Kink warnings TF, mind control, charms, species change, and unbirthing" Right on the front, and in the tags it has and again, im qouting directly, "Sex, non con, fetish and porn." How did you read all that and come up with- "Yeah this will be a light hearted ship fic!" ??????
9166086 Well I will break it down for you. TF I have no idea what that stands for. To me it could mean a lot of things but the one that comes to mind is Trans Female. mind control is self explanatory along with charms. species change, there's are numerous ways for that to happen, like a spell, or having Queen Chrysalis bite onto Twilight's neck during sex and change her (Like how a vampire works) or chrysalis put Twilight into an egg sack and do it that way. And finally the unbirthing, it's in the word. A couple of things come to mind. One: pregnancy, by having Queen Chrysalis or Twilight being pregnant. Two: Just do number one but then have it where something happen where during the birth they lose the child or what ever happens.
Now I know that all of those are fetishes and they all have their actual meaning but instead of having unbirthing, why not have re-birthing instead? To me when I see re-birthing I know exactly what that means and I might have not read it. So That was the reason why I read the story. Because I had a different out look at the story when I read it I got something entirely different. Now you might say 'well if you didn't like it why did you read the whole thing?'
Well excellent question and it's simple. I am a finisher, and I tend to finish any story that I read but there is some things that I'll be like 'Nope forget about it.' but other then that I really hoped that Twilight and Chrysalis would have gotten it on like two rabbits. So I stuck it out to the end. The unbirthing to me is a weird creepy fetish but I know there are a ton of fetish that are out there and some are way more gross then unbirthing. So you should be glad that I finished your story, like I said I didn't know what the others warning things meant but now I do.
9166974 Let me get this straight, you are basically just saying "I was naive to all the possible implications of the kink tag and thus blame you for my interpretation. I also didn't know what unbirthing was until now so basically that's your fault as well."
Come on man, you can't just assume the absolute best then be angry when your wild and baseless assumptions don't line up with reality, that's not how this works. If you arent sure what something is, do research, urban dictionary, ask someone, dont just think "Hey, I can misconstrue unbirthing to mean miscarriage to the point that I'll be pissed off if im wrong."
You need to take your weaponized ignorance somewhere else.
9166991 Dude I wasn't arguing with you at all I was telling you what I was thinking. I never said once that your story sucked did I? Like I said I didn't know what the stuff your were warning meant. But here you are telling me that I'm stupid? Dude did you even read my comments? Because if I hated your story I would have said it. It's not my cup of tea for the ubirthing fetish but not once did I say I hated the story. So excuse me for reading your story, I won't impose on you anymore. Good day to you sir.
9167654 All I'm saying is that you should look up what the tags mean before diving in then having the gall to be surprised when something in the tags happens in the story. If you dont know what something means, then you cannot act surprised when that thing is not what you thought it might be.
Also, to you asking for me to tailor my tags and not use unbirthing and instead use rebirthing, yeah thats a big no. Thats not what the word means, no matter how much you wish otherwise.
I was sort of expecting Twilight to not be able to use magic inside, and for her control spell to wear off once Twilight was completely inside and Twilight freaks out like: "What happened!? Where am I!?" But her magic doesn't work. Her last clear thought of defeat before falling unconscious to transform.
9313008 Funny you should ask that as I was littlery just working on chapter 3, the next chapter is done and just needs edits, while number 3 is actually almost done, and will hopefully be done tonight actually.
9313050 Hopefully. I aim to have the next chapter up by next week, and then another chapter every weak for the next four or so weeks, with patrons able to see it early.
you have my interest :3
noice
It was an interesting, keep it up
Never enough Changeling brainwashing/tf!
Let's see where this rabbit hole goes, shall we?
"Arise, my daughter. Arise... Twilight."
"By your will, mother, I live to serve... Let all who oppose my queen feel the wrath of the Swarm."
Sorry, I just couldn't resist. While this could benefit from a bit of proofreading I enjoyed it immensely and I can't wait to see where you go with it.
I have to see more before I can judge it. However, this is good so far. The part in the first chapter that I like was twilight exploring the queens body.
well... that's a 'rapey-face' cover art if I've ever seen one, and after reading the synopsis, rather fitting too.
as ashamed as i am to say this concening the subject matter i wish to see more mother/daughter bonding between twily and chrissy before the inevitable dark story turn of conquest of all equestria and the possible deaths of celestia and luna (my fav princess btw) this is shaping up to be a great and terrifying story
Shouldn't have been called "Into Her Folds"?
MOAR!
please?
Well written.
I kind of hope that if this does get continued, it ends up ending in a way where Twi ends up taking over the changelings from Chrysalis.
I wonder what exactly has change in Twilights brain. Has her memory been altered? Has she been conditioned to respond in certain ways to certain things? Was the experience and feelings so good that she is now convinced that it cannot be bad? Is it a combination? Her body might have changed but her memory and mind might be intact. What is it that will keep her loyal? Has she lost all reason or what?
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We will see.
…….what?......WHAT THE FUCK!? What did I just read? That was just weird and just....weird....I wanted a typical Twilight x Chrysalis story not some weird creepy fetish....
9166018
It litterly says and I qoute "Kink warnings TF, mind control, charms, species change, and unbirthing" Right on the front, and in the tags it has and again, im qouting directly, "Sex, non con, fetish and porn." How did you read all that and come up with- "Yeah this will be a light hearted ship fic!" ??????
9166086
Well I will break it down for you. TF I have no idea what that stands for. To me it could mean a lot of things but the one that comes to mind is Trans Female. mind control is self explanatory along with charms. species change, there's are numerous ways for that to happen, like a spell, or having Queen Chrysalis bite onto Twilight's neck during sex and change her (Like how a vampire works) or chrysalis put Twilight into an egg sack and do it that way. And finally the unbirthing, it's in the word. A couple of things come to mind. One: pregnancy, by having Queen Chrysalis or Twilight being pregnant. Two: Just do number one but then have it where something happen where during the birth they lose the child or what ever happens.
Now I know that all of those are fetishes and they all have their actual meaning but instead of having unbirthing, why not have re-birthing instead? To me when I see re-birthing I know exactly what that means and I might have not read it. So That was the reason why I read the story. Because I had a different out look at the story when I read it I got something entirely different. Now you might say 'well if you didn't like it why did you read the whole thing?'
Well excellent question and it's simple. I am a finisher, and I tend to finish any story that I read but there is some things that I'll be like 'Nope forget about it.' but other then that I really hoped that Twilight and Chrysalis would have gotten it on like two rabbits. So I stuck it out to the end. The unbirthing to me is a weird creepy fetish but I know there are a ton of fetish that are out there and some are way more gross then unbirthing. So you should be glad that I finished your story, like I said I didn't know what the others warning things meant but now I do.
9166974
Let me get this straight, you are basically just saying "I was naive to all the possible implications of the kink tag and thus blame you for my interpretation. I also didn't know what unbirthing was until now so basically that's your fault as well."
Come on man, you can't just assume the absolute best then be angry when your wild and baseless assumptions don't line up with reality, that's not how this works. If you arent sure what something is, do research, urban dictionary, ask someone, dont just think "Hey, I can misconstrue unbirthing to mean miscarriage to the point that I'll be pissed off if im wrong."
You need to take your weaponized ignorance somewhere else.
9166991
Dude I wasn't arguing with you at all I was telling you what I was thinking. I never said once that your story sucked did I? Like I said I didn't know what the stuff your were warning meant. But here you are telling me that I'm stupid? Dude did you even read my comments? Because if I hated your story I would have said it. It's not my cup of tea for the ubirthing fetish but not once did I say I hated the story. So excuse me for reading your story, I won't impose on you anymore. Good day to you sir.
9167654
All I'm saying is that you should look up what the tags mean before diving in then having the gall to be surprised when something in the tags happens in the story.
If you dont know what something means, then you cannot act surprised when that thing is not what you thought it might be.
Also, to you asking for me to tailor my tags and not use unbirthing and instead use rebirthing, yeah thats a big no. Thats not what the word means, no matter how much you wish otherwise.
Learn the vernacular, do not assume.
Nice.
I was sort of expecting Twilight to not be able to use magic inside, and for her control spell to wear off once Twilight was completely inside and Twilight freaks out like:
"What happened!? Where am I!?"
But her magic doesn't work. Her last clear thought of defeat before falling unconscious to transform.
Still, I enjoyed it.
Please check your use of your/you're. Remember, you're is the contraction, meaning "you are"
Also please continue.
... despite the obvious clop... I now want this to be a full story...
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When can we expect more?
9313008
Funny you should ask that as I was littlery just working on chapter 3, the next chapter is done and just needs edits, while number 3 is actually almost done, and will hopefully be done tonight actually.
9313045
I hope the editing goes quick.
9313050
Hopefully. I aim to have the next chapter up by next week, and then another chapter every weak for the next four or so weeks, with patrons able to see it early.
I was really avoiding this but now I wish I never did cause it is great