Chrysalis places an ad in a local paper looking for victims to lay eggs inside of and kill. She gets a reply from the one pony she never would have expected, and then breeds an army to take over Canterlot
You know... this isn't the worst story. It's gotta a dialogue and a story worth trying to bring forward. It reminds me of Headless_Rainbow`s work.You fix up the dialogue a bit and editing. It could be a great story. Nevermind those whom disliked it because of the gore or death tag, it can be polished.
9115010 dialogue has always been my weakest suit, I did not bother editing and checking it because I figure most people are only here for the porn. Headless Rainbow happens to be the person I look up to, and the dislikes don't bother me at all. I want fantasy novels to be liked, and just do this for money and fun. I simply added the story to it so that people can keep reading without dying of boredom.
I am considering focusing on a larger story at some point, which would be much more story and less porn, but I need to finish up my novels for this year before doing so.
You know... this isn't the worst story. It's gotta a dialogue and a story worth trying to bring forward. It reminds me of Headless_Rainbow`s work.You fix up the dialogue a bit and editing. It could be a great story. Nevermind those whom disliked it because of the gore or death tag, it can be polished.
9115010
dialogue has always been my weakest suit, I did not bother editing and checking it because I figure most people are only here for the porn. Headless Rainbow happens to be the person I look up to, and the dislikes don't bother me at all. I want fantasy novels to be liked, and just do this for money and fun. I simply added the story to it so that people can keep reading without dying of boredom.
I am considering focusing on a larger story at some point, which would be much more story and less porn, but I need to finish up my novels for this year before doing so.