Hope and Shadows
Chapter 24 “Endings”
By Steven Little
My Little Pony © Hasbro
Demons run when good ponies go to war
Shadows will burn beneath the sun,
And all that’s evil shall turn and run
When good ponies go to war
Friendship and magic will kill the lies
Night will fall and the dark will rise
When good ponies goes to war
Demons run but count the cost
The battle’s won but the child is lost,
Life and Death shall bend their will
The damage done and the world lies still
When good ponies go to war.
“Dusk, Dawn, take Rarity and Cadence and check on Ruby, Spike’s not thinking straight and I think that perhaps Ruby is not so fatally wounded as he might have believed.” Twilight instructed, a set of lavender battle armor appearing on her frame.
Unlike Luna’s and Celestia’s protective attire, the magical suit of armor Twilight now wore was not polished but rather reflected the light dully and had more than one spot of corrosion marring it’s surface. After a quick grimace of discomfort, Twilight altered the armor slightly with the addition of two holes along her sides, allowing for her wings to unfurl. Before either her sister-in-law or wife could ask, she answered their puzzled looks. “Clover kept this in the chambers below the castle along with her other prized possessions.”
Twilight saw her children starring at her now armored form. “What are you waiting for, get moving.” She told them sternly.
Knowing it was foolhardy to argue with their mother, the siblings nodded quickly and ran to where the infant had landed, Tootsieflute, Rarity and Cadence following quickly behind. Using their combined magic, the four ponies were able to completely clear the ruble surrounding the fallen child without causing any further injury “Careful Rarity, don’t move her just yet,” Cadence told him. “Let me check her out first.”
“Bowing her head, the Crystal Princess, cast a triage spell that she had preformed many a time on her own son. Standing up, she wore a sad smile upon her face. “The good news is that she’s still alive.”
“Oh thank Faust!” Rarity rejoiced.
“Now tell her the bad news Aunt Cadence?” Dawn said, already aware of the damage herself.
Princess Cadence faltered, surprised by her nieces statement. “She’s injured, badly, and not long for the world if we can’t heal her, soon.” Dusk said, a grim look on his face.
“Unfortunately, you are correct but I don’t understand how you two could know that.” Cadence confirmed. “For now, all we can do is ease the pressure on her spine and try to keep her from moving around too much; mercifully, she’s unconscious, I couldn’t imagine a child suffering the type of pain she’d be in if she were awake.”
Behind the four ponies, the small battle raged on. Bonbon and Lyra were keeping a henchman busy while Vinyl and Octavia were battering away at any guard who would get within hoofs reach. Kirin, for his part, had several of Blueblood’s forces pursuing him in a vein attempt to capture their King’s favor but the lithe draconequus was too quick for them and easily outmaneuvered the guards at every turn. In a surprise act of coordination, Kirin would continue to swing around three points in the room where Applebloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo were waiting to pick off a dimwitted guard as they passed. Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Sprinter, and Beaufort battled around Spike, trying to keep the guards away from him but also being mindful not to get in the dragons way. Dinky, Julian, and the rest of the original band of rescuers, along with the ponies they’d rescued, fought back to back in groups of two or three, protecting each other from enemy forces that sought to out maneuver them, each racking up a number of knock out blows.
Gertrude and Penelope stayed out of the battle and instead elected to guard the still recovering form of Emerald. After watching the amazing display of combat prowess the green dragoness showed while trying to subdue her own brother, the griffon could not help but admire her. When the fighting broke out, both her and Penelope took up a protective stance next to Emerald, each vowing that no backstabbing stallion would dare get the opportunity to dispatch a warrior of the dragonesses caliber while she lay vulnerable.
Blueblood had wasted his opportunity to get away and instead elected to stand and watch the carnage, both cheering on his fighters and berating them when they received an injury. Twilight, Luna and Celestia had fought their way through the guards, it being too dangerous to take to the air with Solar Steel arrows being used, and advanced upon the burned stallion. “This is over Blueblood, your forces will soon be defeated, surrender now while there is still a chance.” Twilight implored him.
“You stupid slut, you really think this is over,” he asked, an off kilter sort of grin appearing on his burnt face, his left eye twitching slightly.
Twilight’s magic flashed out and took hold of Blueblood by the throat, slamming him against the solid doors of the hall he stood in front of. “Yes, this is over.” She told him in a voice that did not seem like her own.
The burned stallion hoofed at the magical bond that held him against the wall, his back legs working through the air in a pointless attempt to gain leverage while hanging several inches of the ground. “Twilight.” Luna said, putting a hoof on her wife’s shoulder.
Twilight could only stare at the stallion that had caused so much misery. “To think, that you could possibly be a descendant of Princess Platinum, my friend.” Twilight said, slowly releasing the hold she had on him. “You’ve taken her castle, a place of warmth and unity and turned it into a place of slaughter. Give me one reason I shouldn’t kill you now?”
“Because, Twilight,” Celestia said. “That isn’t you. You are no killer even if many would find the act justified.”
“You’re weak, that’s why you won’t finish me, none of you will when it’s the obvious and simplest choice to make, and now you’ve lost your chance. Any moment, the remainder of my forces will finish with you’re pathetic guards outside and come barreling in to protect their King, their God!” He shouted maniacally.
“You have truly lost your mind.” Luna stated, shaking her head at the stallions pathetic attempts to save face.
“No, I haven’t you treasonous bitch! I finally figured it out, I finally understand. You have power and immortality but lack the drive and will to use it properly.” Blueblood shouted, chuckling like a mad stallion. “But I, I know exactly what this country, nay this world needs! Females need to be treated like the subequine creatures they are! You, all of you are driven by emotions, instinct; I doubt you even have the capacity for true rational thought! Now that I am a God, I will cast all females down to where they belong, groveling at a stallions hoof, praying that you don’t displease your masters, lest you be beaten!”
Battering the last remaining guards from his path, Spike emerged from the crowd. A roar of challenge escaped his lips as the purple dragon charged towards his adversary, when Celestia, Luna, and Twilight suddenly blocked his path. “No Spike, don’t do this.” Celestia pleaded with him.
“Killing him won’t solve anything, let justice be done upon him.” Luna said, trying to pacify him.
Hearing the rumble of what he thought was the hoof beats of his soldiers coming ever closer to the hall, Blueblood flung open the door he had originally entered the room from and stood in it’s doorway. “I win dragon!” He shouted triumphantly.
Jumping out into the hall to receive the reinforcement to his personal guard, the would-be king smiled as his stallions rushed to him but as his hooves touched down to the stone, they were thrown into the air as Blueblood’s own soldiers knocked him to the ground and trampled him in an attempt to get away from Prince Shining Armor’s forces. As the stampeding herd of foes rushed over their fallen King, Shining Armor rounded the corner of the hall and brought his troops to a halt just outside the room. After a quick salute to Celestia he barked new orders to his stallions.
“Half of you get after those scoundrels, I want them in chains by nightfall, the rest of you with me!” He shouted as he and the remainder of the Princess’s forces charged into the room. Reuniting with his son, Shining Armor and his soldiers would make short work of Blueblood’s elite troops.
When the dust settled at the commotion over, Spike stood their, looking down at the broken body of his hated advisory; motionless, unmoving. Behind his remaining good eye, he could feel the searing hot tears of his anger and frustration build. Opening his maw, he let out a roar so loud, all the fighting in the room was forced to stop as any pony within sight of the castle, covered their ears in pain.
Even as she covered her ears, Rarity knew what it was; something had happened to Spike and as much as his current state frightened her, she couldn’t let the love of her life suffer. Putting her hooves down she looked to the three alicorns huddled over her daughter.
“She’s safe for now Rarity, go to him.” Cadence told her; acutely aware of how torn the white unicorn was at the moment.
Spike was furious, his daughter lay dead and the ponies he thought were his family denied him his retribution upon the stallion that had killed her. Rounding on the princesses, the enraged dragon stalked towards them. “You did this,” he shouted. “You kept me from my vengeance! Why did you protect him? Why did you keep me from him? He was right, wasn’t he? He’s a pony and I’m a dragon and you’ll, always protect your own! It’s any wonder I’ve never really been excepted around here!”
“Spike, son, please calm yourself, it’s not like that.” Celestia pleaded with him.
“Don’t call me that,” he yelled. “I’m not your son, I never was! You pretended to love me; all I ever was, was a plaything to hold your attention for a while before you grew bored with me and gave me to Twilight who treated me like her slave.”
“I did no such thing,” Twilight said, defending herself. “You begged Celestia to give you permission to come with me and the only reason I had you do chores was so that you’d grow up to be a responsible and self-sufficient young drake, and you have Spike, you have.”
“Shut up, you’re lying, you’re trying to confuse me!”
“This isn’t you Spike, this is not the dragon that I have come to know and love as a member of my family,” Luna said quietly as she approached her nephew. “I’ve seen firsthoof how much your family loves you and while I may have questioned my sisters actions about adopting you, it did not take me long to realize that you had nothing to prove to me, it was I who had to prove me worthiness to have a nephew as caring and as special as you.”
Falling to the floor, Spike grabbed his head with his claws, trying to shut out the voices of the ponies talking to him. Between those trying to calm him, the shouts of the last of their enemy being chained up, and the final throws of the battle echoing down the hall, the noise was maddening to the dragon’s heightened senses. Cutting through all of it was a tender voice that sounded like crystals, gently chiming against each other in a soft breeze.
“Spike,” Rarity said quietly. “Spike, come back to me, please. I need you to come back to me.” Tears were falling unashamedly from the unicorn’s eyes. “This isn’t you, you would never have accused your mother of betraying you, and deep down you know she stopped you for a reason and it had nothing to do with Bluebloods well being. She did it for you. If you had killed him, no pony would ever see you as anything but a mindless beast but she saved you from that, she loves you very much Spike, we all do, please come back to us.”
Spike opened his eye and beheld the divine vision of his beloved wife, his mass slowly decreasing as his rage subsided and turned to sorrow. “But, Ruby…” he trailed off, not being able to finish through his renewed tears.
“Ruby is alive,” The white unicorn told him. “She’s hurt but the Prince and Princess are doing everything they can for her.
He couldn’t believe his ears, his daughter was alive. Looking to each of the ponies around them he could tell that they were happy that he wasn’t yelling anymore but they still kept their distance, something was wrong; he could see it in their face. Looking back at his wife, he could see the tears in here eyes as she looked at him. Reaching out to comfort her, he stared in shock as she flinched away from his blood soaked claw. The shock was not that she flinched away but because his claw was soaked in blood, Equestrian blood. Looking down his arms and across his chest, he saw his damaged scales soaked in the blood and gore of numerous ponies. His remaining pupil shrunk to a pinprick as he began panicking. Looking around the room, he found his sister to one side, unconscious and covered in gashes, bites, and claw marks that only he could have made. All around the large chamber, Spike found pony after pony dead, torn asunder by his own claws.
In the back of his head, he heard Blueblood’s voice talking to him. “You did this monster. You’ve murdered ponies, tore them apart with your bare claws. Even your sister lies at deaths door because of you. How many more have to die to satisfy you? What, was all this because you lost your temper, what happens when you lose it again, because you know you will. Will you kill your friends next, your family? I know, it’ll be your kids, one day they’ll frustrate you a little to much and poof, they’ll be gone.” The voice inside his head laughed maniacally.
“No, no, no no no, I didn’t, I couldn’t…” Spike trailed off, continuing to look around the room. “I did this, Blueblood’s right, I am a monster; I’ve murdered so, so many. I don’t want to be a killer; I don’t want to hurt anypony. Banish me, he pleaded from his mother. “Banish me, imprison me, kill me, something but keep me away from everypony.”
The look of utter shock was stamped on Celestia’s face, she could not believe the sight of her tortured son kneeling before her, begging the worst thing imaginable from her. “I can’t do that Spike, I wont. You are my son and what happened here today is not your fault.”
“Please,” Spike said, curling into a ball as he finally regained his normal size. “Please, you have to protect everypony from me, I’m a monster, I’m a monster, I’m a monster…” The thoroughly defeated dragon repeated over and over again, gently rocking back and forth.
“The poor boy is loosing what’s left of his mind.” Julian said, walking up to the Celestia with Dinky right beside him. “Princess, take your son back to the castle, clean him up and comfort him, surround him with things and pictures from times when he was happiest. He’s going to need some professional help after all this but for now the best thing is to get him away from here and try to calm him down. Kirin, you should probably go with her, she’ll need your support almost as much as Spike will need hers’.” The Draconequus nodded. In a flash of light, he, Celestia and Spike, disappeared from the room.
Now that Shining Amour and his troops had finished rounding up the scoundrels in the employ of Blueblood, and all immediate threats had been dealt with, Rarity’s mind once again shifted to that of her newborn. Twilight, Luna and all of the other parents in the room raced to keep up with Rarity as she charged off to where her foal was being watched after. The white unicorn’s world came to an abrupt halt when she saw the ponies trying to help her baby, her small body struggling to take in every breath. “Is she going to be okay?” She asked Dawn, her voice full of hope.
“Her injuries are very bad, but if we can get her to a doctor soon, she just might…”
“No, she won’t,” Dusk said, cutting off his sister. “I’m sorry Aunt Rarity but she’s passing to the next world.”
“Dusk!” Twilight shouted
“There is no point in sugar coating it,” He responded coldly. “Ruby has five, maybe six minutes left, I suggest you say your goodbye’s.”
“That’s a horrible thing to say Dusk,” Tootsieflute said, seeing a completely different side of her coltfriend. “I’m the one with medical training here and I say she still has a chance so you’ll pardon me for saying, but you have no idea what you’re talking about.”
A dark shadow seemed to cover the alicorn stallion, obscuring him from view. A slight wind came up and the darkness enveloping him started to swirl about him like a dust devil. When the shadows finally parted, the stallion they knew as Dusk, no longer stood there; instead they saw a skeletal pony cloaked in a ragged black, death shroud. Using his magic, he pulled a five-foot staff from beneath his cloak. Pounding the butt of the stave against the floor, a long sickle blade erupted from the top, showing it to be a scythe. Everypony gasped and took a step back. “I know exactly what I’m talking about.” The Prince said, his voice sounding much more ominous.
“Did you think that I was joking when I said I was the pony of death? Did you think I was lying when I said that I could feel the ponies that die around me?!” He asked, his voice getting louder. “Do you think I enjoy being this, that it doesn’t hurt me everytime I have to deliver a foal to judgment or straight to Elysium?”
“Kharon?” Twilight asked. “But, you can’t be Kharon, he’s been…”
“Ferrying souls for the last few millennia and is retiring.” Dusk told his mother. “I began to take over his job shortly after getting my cutie mark. As it turns out, Dawn is doing the same for Demeter though I think the old mare is departing too quickly from her post.”
“Please,” Rarity begged. “Please don’t take my baby.”
“I have no choice,” the skeletal pony said, the remorse he felt, apparent in his voice. “I’m sorry, Aunt Rarity, it’s time.”
Dusk angled the blunt end of stave toward the dying infant only to have it suddenly knocked away but his sister’s ivy wrapped hooves. “No Dusk, I won’t let you take this one!” She shouted. Dawn had undergone a transformation of her own; she was taller, ivy vines had wrapped themselves around her legs and barrel. The young Princess’s mane had turned blond and was festooned with flowers of every type while her tail looked like that of a lion, long and white with a tuft of blond hair at the end, her fetlocks took on an unshorn appearance, scarcely covering cloven hooves. To all in attendance she did indeed look like a younger version of the mare Demeter that all of them had seen in one ancient picture or another.
“You’ve taken too many foals away from me Dusk, I won’t let you take another!”
“I didn’t take anything from you, I was just doing my job and as much as I hate it, I have to do it.” The skeletal pony replied.
“I was too weak and too late to save the others but I won’t let you take Ruby, she’s our cousin for Sleipnir’s sake!” Dawn argued.
“So just because we’re related, we give this one a pass? You know what happens if a soul isn’t removed after the body dies, is that what you want!?” Dusk shouted.
“No, of course it isn’t,” Dawn said solemnly. “But after all the death and all the pain, there has to be something good to come from this. Sleipnir wont notice if a tiny spark like Ruby doesn’t show up.”
“You know better than that and you know what will happen if we even attempt to stop this.” Her brother told her.
“Wait, you mean you can help her, you can keep her from dying?” Luna asked.
“There is a way, yes, but it comes at a price,” Dusk said. “A high price.”
“I know,” Dawn told her brother. “But it’s a price I’m willing to pay.”
“And what about them?” The skeletal stallion asked indicating the ponies that had gathered around now that the danger was over. “What about our family, what about Dinky and Tootsieflute?”
“What about us?” Dinky asked, starting to feel ignored by the events before her.
Taking a long look at the mare she loved, Dawn turned her head aside and closed her eyes, tears slowly falling down her cheek. “Yes, I’m still willing.”
Taking a last look at Tootsieflute, he turned his head away as well. “So be it.”
Dusk’s horn lit up in an unnatural red color instead of the more bluish color his magic usually took. Angling the blunt end of the stave toward the motionless infant, he moved it in a small circle across her chest. Stopping just millimeters above her body, the collected ponies gasped as a spectral set of claws reached up and grabbed hold of the stave. Lifting gently, the apparition of Ruby floated with it. Dusk reached out with his magic a fastened a leash of energy to her so she would not float off. Ruby’s soul was content enough to swim around the air until she caught site of her mother at which point she attempt to get to the white unicorn. Halfway there, the tether grew taunt and pulled Ruby back to Dusk. Rarity was so shocked at what she was watching, she could do nothing but stand there and watch her daughters ghost, float around in the air, desperately trying to reach her.
“Not yet Ruby.” Dusk said. “Just sit here and be patient, you’ll be with your mommy soon enough.” The stallion said, placing the spectral foal on his back, where she merrily waited, waving at all the ponies that were staring at her.
While everypony was focused on Dusk, Dawn began the arduous task of keeping Ruby’s body alive while also repairing the damage that had been done. “Mothers, I need you’re help.” Dawn told her parents. “Her neck is broken in two places and her skull is cracked in a few spots and it’s pushing in on her brain. It’s delicate work repairing this kind of damage.”
Luna and Twilight stepped forward. “But Dawn, she’s dead,” Twilight said. “I know you want to help but you know that once something is dead, it can’t be brought back.”
“She’s not dead in the sense that you know it. Her body does not function because of her injuries and because Dusk has sort-of removed her soul to keep it from harm.”
“Sort of?” Octavia asked?
“Yes, Dusk is acting as a conduit for her soul so the body can take it back afterwards but I am keeping her lungs breathing and her heart pumping; as long as I can do that, I can keep the biological functions of her body alive. Cells are still dividing, blood is still pumping, and her lungs are still breathing. Managing all of her biological functions as well as my own are taking a toll on my magic and I need you to lend me yours temporarily so I can heal her wounds.”
“We can do better than that my daughter,” Luna told her. “We will heal her ourselves, you just concentrate on keeping her alive.”
Luna and Twilight both stepped up, enveloping Ruby in their magic. The task before them was painstakingly delicate and took what felt like hours. Little by little they moved each shard of bone back into place in the infants spine, careful not to damage her spinal cord. The fractures in her skull were treated with an equal level of care, all the while, Ruby’s spirit sat on Dusks back, sucking a claw and watching her mother.
While the alicorns focused on healing the foal, Julian called the attention of his daughter. Walking over to the prone form of a trampled Blueblood, Julian asked a single question of the yellow pegasus and light blue unicorn, tending to the wounded around the room. “Is he dead, will he live?” His voice was calm and impassive.
Fluttershy gave a light shudder but answered anyway. “Yes, he’s alive but only barely.”
“Can you stabilize him, enough for transport?” Julian asked, his voice remained emotionless.
“We have other ponies in need of our help and to be honest, after what he did, I wouldn’t waste the time on him.” Tootsieflute told him, the anger palpable in her voice.
Julian glared at her then gave out a weary sigh. “My dear, you are a healer, your skills belong to the injured and the dying regardless of who at what they are, please try to remember that and answer my question.”
“Yes, yes he can be stabilized but why, what are you going to do?” Fluttershy asked.
“Then please do so,” the chestnut stallion told her. “Dinky, as soon as they’re done, please bring him outside.”
“You didn’t answer my question Julian, what are you going to do?” Fluttershy asked.
“I’m going to give him what he wants.” He said as he calmly walked out the door.
The two unicorns and the pegasus sat there and watched as the chestnut brown earth pony strode out of the room. They were shocked, Dinky double so for she had never seen her adoptive father act like this. He didn’t get mad; he never even raised his voice; this pony that had fought gods and demons side by side with her mother.
“How can he be so calm when his own family was threatened with death and torture?” Tootsieflute asked. “I’m sorry Dinky but this guy your mom married has some serious issues.”
“You’re wrong, you are so wrong Tootsieflute. Even now, after everything Blueblood did, all the lives he’s taken either directly or indirectly; I feel sorry for him.”
“What, why?!” The light blue unicorn asked.
“He’s made my father angry.” She answered simply, picking up Blueblood in her telekinetic field and following her father out the door.
The guards had already finished rounding up the remainder of Bluebloods forces and evacuated all the injured and were gathering the dead for proper burial when the alicorn twins finished their work. Having repaired the damage to the infant’s body, Dusk ever so gently returned Ruby’s soul, letting it gently sink back into her mortal form. The ponies gathered around, waited on baited breath. Gradually the small foals eyes opened and she began to cry. “It is done.” Dusk announced. “Good bye.” And then they were gone. No fan fair, no noise, not even a blip of light to indicate how they managed their departure; Prince Dusk and Princess Dawn were simply gone, even their hoofprints had vanished from the stone floor, as if they had never set hoof in the castle at all.
Did... did they just kill themselves...
Well that sucks, I've grown quite attached to the twins.
Finally an update! Blueblood, what a misogynist! Poor Spike, he's gonna need some serious help after this. What did Dawn and Dusk do?
5204125 In exchange for the chance to save Ruby, they traded their own souls for the infants. That is the price for using light spells to revive the dead, especially when you're borrowing the powers of the divine to accomplish the task.
That is one of the reasons necromancers are more common than Light mages, considering Necromancers don't answer to any gods for their misdeeds.
i have mixed feelings cuz you were building it up like there would be an epic battle between the alicorns and blublood but hes defeated by being trampled on -_-' and that ending, i dont know wat to say about it, but it felt like a cliff hanger and u didnt show how twilight luna celestia rarity and everypony reacted to this
remove the quotation mark.
Banish me", he pleaded from his mother.
Well... fuck. I was not expecting that to happen. Next story is going to be SoL/Adventure where Luna and Twilight search the world for a way to bring their foals back, right? RIGHT?
Also, what is Julian going to show Blueblood?
Exchange two demigods for one infant? I'm sorry, but that kind of does not seem to be fair.
And I never liked neither Rarity, nor Sparity anyway.I really hope that the twins will come back.
Wow, I know you said main characters were going to be gone. But I never thought it would be Dusk and Dawn, let alone like this. So will there be another chapter?
What I think has happened:
Dawn & Dusk have had their connection to their physical forms cut. They still exist, but only as spirits for now. They will likely have to wait at least a generation before they are allowed to take physical form again.
Oh my god! A chapter! Brace yourselves!
Right, i've gotta say it now, because i've been waiting till this story actually ended to place my paragraph of praise.
But damn, you just gotta be slower than me at uploading. And thats saying something.
Seriously, your storyline has had me hooked from the get go. Heck, i'd even go as far to say that this is one of the three fanfics that actually got me even into this fandom. All the way back in August 2013. Ya did good back then, ya doing even better now!
Now. I'm not one for being vocal, I prefer the more sincere approach.
So thank you.
Thank you for making this, showing it to the world.
Thank you for pouring not only your imagination, but probably also your blood, sweat and tears into this.
And thank chance that I actually saw it! Because without this, we'd be one brony short.
Because the world could do with one more brony, Right?
5204264 Close but no cigar
5204275 All will be revealed in the next/final chapter. And Blueblood's not dead. Wait till the next chapter and you'll find out his ultimate fate.
5204409 Maybe.
5204961 Yes
5207136 All right then. Also I was able to approve something into the dA group.
Rarity had a sex change operation.
Spike now narrates his own life.
Total mistakes....2(well more like 3, but meh.)
Gods I love this series.
i meant that blueblood was defeated way to easy and that u made twilight seem like she was about to fight blueblood by equiping a set of armour
5208165 It was supposed to be a show of force hoping he would reconsider but if not, they would kick his ass. unfortunately Spike happened and then he got trampled by his own guys. A cowards death for the biggest SOB out there, except he's not dead.... I have something much worse for him in store.
I will have to address some of the other issues when I make the editing corrections.
the full wrath of the princesses
if u dont mind me asking but i was thinking on writing a fic but i dont know were to start
thats why im asking to give me some ideas or something, the fic would be about the next generation of the main 6 go check out kilala97 on deviant art and the stories of fimfiction
Every year Spike would visit Blueblood in the prison . And on schedule a single long scream would ring out of the cell block.
The new guard asked what it was about.
Ole older guard only said "Merry Hoofmas, Spikes just delivering some roasted nuts to our number one prisoner.
i think blueblood fate is eternal life.... with no eternal youth.
he will just age with a broken body, and with no way of dieing.
-le gasp-! Gone?! Nooooo!
Do not make the resident Time Lord angry, you will live to regret it for the rest of time.
Julian got rid of the TARDIS... so my first thought of true punishment is out (forcing him to stare into the untempered schizm)
Well that sucked for Dusk and Dawn. I really got to wonder how Luna and Twilight will take losing their children like this and if they'll ever have kids again.
Yay, kirin Ruby lives!
My condolences to the Princesses for the recent loss of their children.
YOU'D BETTER BRING THEM BACK!
Great story, really want moar pls Five Eeyups to you, friend
5327575 Dusk & Dawn have become bearers Life & Death , Surely they will show up some time.
Will their be another story after this one too?
5358539 yes
5359679 I remember them saying something early I think at Dawns birth about the difficulties she and dinky will have, I take it this was one of htem?
5361281 hard to say really
5361709
So...this says it's incomplete. Judging by the name of the last chapter, I'm gonna go out on a whim and say that it's a mistake?
Can't wait for the undoubtedly epic Griffon War to happen! Well that is...if the next story happens to take place about 185 years later....Still I really like that you used the Miasma as a sort of end-all be-all of villains. Honestly, it's the only thing that makes sense of the corruption of Luna, maybe even influencing the corruption of Kirin (and part of my head-canon!).
You have me on the edge of my seat to find out what more is really in that book Twilight found. I have no doubt that it will be a very important (and well-written) piece of the bigger plot.
One thing I have a minor problem with is some of the names. Julian throws me off just a bit, and so does Beaufort. In fact you use a lot of names that are more actual English language names. Pony names should stay within the realm of things like Sparkle, or Rainbow, or Crystal. Not saying you should ponify names with unnecessary horse puns, that's worse. Just make sure they aren't real names is all. Obviously this is for future reference, since these characters already exist
This plot is amazing, even better than Celestia's, and she fills it with cake! In fact the biggest problem I have is the fact that you kind of seared off half of Discord's beautiful personality. But I suppose this doesn't take into account his actual reformation in season 3. Oh well, just gonna have to keep reading on despite the fact.
Did I write all that? Huh... That'll do, Javi. That'll do.
5469926 Wow, a lot here. hmm, lets see. the story is not finished, i am currently still working on the next chapter and the epilogue. I'll be working most of tuesday on it. real life has been sucking recently, sorry bout that. The names were a bit of a hard one for me, i kept trying to think of decent names, but nothing came of it, as it stands, Julian's name will most likely get changed to Time Turner but I don't know how some of my readers would take that. There will be more stories in between this one and the final installment of the series, kind of like a side story or two wile I gear up for the outline and final prep for the last story. Hope this answers some of your questions and possibly raise one or two more.
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Oh, good to know, and I totally understand. Real life is a total jerk, and after writing all that beauty, you deserve a good rest.
Thank you for the clarification. If you need help with names, I'm here, with nothin to do on the weekends. Much love and hearts and other icons of affection of that ilk towards you and your story.
P.S. Sorry if I make my comments too long, the questioning just keeps me thinking
5204065 I don't think they died. I think that they no longer have bodies and only the dead and newborns can see them but the Newborns only for a short time because Dusk became Kharon and Dawn became Demeter.
I'm guessing you stopped continuing this series cause, all of us have been waiting for a very long time, we would appreciate it if you would at least give an update dlazerous.
Thanks
5650238 I'm working on it right now actually, rl has been extremely stressful as of late and i haven't had much time to work on it at al. sorry to keep you all waiting, I haven't abandoned this, I assure you
5683790 Congrats, you found the reference.
Well **** I think I may have to go back and delete the latest post because this was do a lot better.
The Characters do not piss me off as much as last time but at times when they all together you start to forget who is there but it is hard to write of a big group , I could say more but that is me being nit pointy.
I need to knew all the more on your " Alicorn " because the leg lose bit.
After Endings, you can make me love Characters just if you hit the right feels or just be a troll and end it here
but me being a side what to do next is going to be hard so best of luck to you my good sir and I will try not to let the nit pointy me out. o7
Wait... Da f**k just happened?
David? Please update this story. I mean, if you have free time, that is. If youre busy with life and whatnot, i understand. However, I'd really like to know what happens next!
5873228 I promise you, I am working on it, life just sucks right now.
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Oh its okay, if you need any help, your fans or dare i say friends are just here for you. Just say the word!
Is there any news on the next chapter yet.
5909509 Sorry, things have been rough around here lately and I've been finding it herd to get the time to sit down and write lately, I have not given up on this though, I will finish this story, I promise.
5913598 its no problem at all I was just asking I understand having to find time and the real world getting in the way. I keep rereading the series. Almost 5 times now.
How are the next chaptets coming along?
6024508 things are on hold at the moment until I can get things settled in my life. I'm not giving up on the story, I work on the last two chapters when I ever I get a moment but it's been going slow.
6026362 Are you going to have them face the measmer?
This still being done or is it dead?