The Story of Dawn and Twilight Sparkle

by ChiefKitsune

Chapter 1: Summer Sun Realization part 2 (08/12/18)

Author's Note:

Here we go, sorry 'bout the half baked chapter earlier but I had to type and run. I know it wasn't a good cliffhanger, if anything it was the absolute worst what with being right in the middle of some action. But I felt you deserved something more than just a Prologue. Also I couldn't leave you guys with an unfinished chapter when so many ponies/people liked it so far in just one day So let me know what you think, constructive criticism is welcome as well as praise but no pony/no one wants trash.

Canterlot Square
Date: 06/989 ANM
Location: Canterlot, Equestria

After letting out a vibrant corona burst as the sun appeared to be raising from her back to the tip of her long ivory horn, Celestia sets down gently betraying her pastry filled dairy-air. Looking towards the spot where the two fillies were a few moments ago, she was a little smug that her little extra was enough. For the less excitable of the two was staring at her with her jaw between her hooves and stars in her eyes, well they both had literal stars in their eyes but that wasn't unexpected from they hyper one.

Celestia waited a good minute, with the crowds cheering, for the calm filly to snap back to it. Once she was sure she had the filly's attention she let a little bit of her smug grin out through a sparkle in her eyes and a nod to the filly. Celestia had to call upon her insurmountably amount of will to keep from laughing at the filly's expression. Her jaw was again having a meeting with her hooves, but her eyes seemed to want to join in as they bulged from her head in an expression of shock.

And with the filly in that state, Celestia left her be to join in the revelry that everypony else had already begun.

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/////Dawn.exe has suffered catastrophic failure attempting reboot//////

////Dawn.exe attempting reboot////

////Dawn.exe reboot successful////

Once Dawn's brain got back on track she chanced a glance at her sister who was still star struck(literally a paper stared piece of confetti was lodged in her mane), then looked back to where Princess Celestia raised the Sun. Thus lead to one of those moments that both fillies had the same thought at the same time. I want to do magic like her!

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With that monumental Summer Sun Celebration, a new era for the Sparkle house began. The era of Magic _{also lots of studying and explosions, lots and lots of explosions.}

Comments

[ChiefKitsune]

8947214
Well hey if I can keep up this pace and your offering I'll keep ya in mind

Also anypony/anyone spots some mistakes PM me what you found and how I could fix it, tis very helpful

[Eris Dis Harmonia]

All the cool stuff happens when I'm not here!

[Zapper Frost]

just don't do Michael beigh levels of explosions... *shivers*

[ChiefKitsune]

8947354
what do you mean?

8947817
No promises! Mwhahahaha-! *cough* I need to work on the evil laugh more.

[Eris Dis Harmonia]

8948414
... I had to scroll through over two hundred (200) things to find this story.

[ChiefKitsune]

8948687
Jeez that's a lot

[Texus]

Here we go, sorry 'bout the half baked chapter earlier but I had to type and run

My advice would be then please type when you have more time and stand still.

Thus lead to one of those moments that both fillies had the same thought at the same time. I want to do magic like her!

The problem with the short chapters is probably, you had no time so far to make me like the characters or to give me something that keeps me here.
What I wanted to say anyway, was in such sitiations and if Dawn is really a former human I always image Twilight being shocked and happy and Dawn not really interessted in Celestia to have two different reactions.

[Asolem2]

With that monumental Summer Sun Celebration, a new era for the Sparkle house began. The era of Magic _{also lots of studying and explosions, lots and lots of explosions.}

With extra emphasis on "lots" and "explosions"

[ChiefKitsune]

9766907
Eyup