The Story of Dawn and Twilight Sparkle

by ChiefKitsune

NOTICE

Author's Note:

With this post "The Story of Dawn and Twilight Sparkle" will be going on hiatus for an undetermined amount of time.

Look I've been agonizing over this story for months now and I keep going back to re-read my old chapters hoping for inspiration to strike. However upon doing so, I noticed I really hate how I was doing things and how I was writing it, it feels more like the ramblings of an old nut instead of the smooth flowing story I want it to be. So this notice is to explain to all readers both current and future ones, especially the ones who read this and think "This person has some interesting stuff, I just wish they had done a better job at presenting it." Then I promise to you, who feel like this story has potential so long as I am up to the task, that I am going to focus on rewriting the whole thing over while adding more details and interactions than the simple rough way I was doing things.

So any new rewritten chapters will be added to before this, though I will keep what is here for the sake of reminding me of what I have and what I don't want to devolve into.

If you have any thoughts on this course of action let me know if you feel like it would help me during my rewrite. I already plan to combine the chapters and add more making them longer than a few hundred words a piece. But if you noticed anything specific I'd very much appreciate you pointing it out, kindly, so I can improve my story.

Comments

[LEGION55]

Aww

[ToMahkAros]

Damn it, another story to most likely be forgotten by the author.

[tezzbot]

Well, i do hope he keeps true to coming back and rewriting this story. Like he said himself... kinda, it has alot of promise and possibility. I think they CAN do better, he might not come back to this one but he can use the story as a lesson to enhance newer stories. :)

[Dark Spark]

Wouldn't it be bether to stard a new story and to link it to this one (and otherwhise)?

[ChiefKitsune]

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Maybe though this one started as a rewrite to my first story an the site asks to only publish a new story as a rewrite if you're changing the very foundation of the story. So unless clarified I'll keep it as one maybe one day I'll take down the originals

[Flaming_Nova]

If I was to say anything that might make the story better it would have to be you building more on the world and delving more into detail about the Characters and or add some myths and legends too make the world your trying too create feel more alive. So your able to draw in your readers attention and make them care about what happens in these workes of fiction.

[ChiefKitsune]

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Thanks I'll take that into consideration, and I agree that it needs to feel more alive.

[Zepher]

I suggest doing something not related to this for a few weeks or so, and then come back to it after you've gotten it from your mind. I find it helps to get a better perspective on something if you start fresh and not with what you've built up over the course of a few months. It happens to me when I play games though I stop playing them for a while and play something different and then go back to it and find a new way to play it. I hope this helps.

[ChiefKitsune]

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Thanks for the advice.