Two years ago Sunset Shimmer ruined your life in her quest for power. With no more friends and no more future, you spend your winter break alone on the beach hoping to just see one last sunset. Thanks to her that's exactly what you get.
"I don't know yet, but you have my word things are going to turn out alright. Just give me a chance, okay? I promise this can have a happy ending," she says, rustling the sheets again as she inches closer to you.
This is usually the part where Hawkeye would say, "Don't do that. Don't give me hope."
This story hits hard for me for so many reasons, especially having had similar struggles to this day. I love what you're doing with this and I love the accurate way you give of building hope despite not wanting any. It's made me smile and tear up, and I just wanted to say thank you for writing something this emotionally deep that I can connect with. Especially since I still struggle with this, and it adds to the reasons to stick around, for my friends, and for amazing things like this.
I like how uncertain Sunset seemed at the confession. Having her do all this out of love would've been an easy cop-out. She probably expected these acts of kindness would be a temporary thing and Anon would eventually get better and they would both move on with their lives separately. But the confession means if she wants to make him happy she would have to devote herself to him and she's not sure if she's okay with giving up her own options and happiness to make it up to Anon. It's quite a predicament. It really makes her decide "how much am I willing to give to make this up to him?" Just the fact that she was hesitating was enough for Anon to know it wouldn't work and that one or both of them would just be miserable. She seems to be doing this less so out of altruism, but rather to make herself feel better by fixing a mistake. This just reinforces how I dislike this Sunset, though I do understand her actions. Even I wouldn't stay with someone romantically out of pity or guilt at the expense of my happiness. But Sunset put herself in this position for her past actions, and either has to suck it up and accept the "punishment" of staying with Anon, or accept that what has been broken can't be fixed, at least not completely.
Absolutely love that she didn’t immediately confess and declare her feelings back like Rust said. Regardless of whether I want them together (I totally do), this felt so much more real not a complete contrivance for the story.
I feel like he's gonna hesitate, he'll have the bottle ready to go and just before he puts it to his mouth, he'll stop. He might try a few more times but will ultimately hesitate to kill himself.
That's what I think, or Sunset knows his plans and might probably stop him before he does anything rash.
You let out a somber sigh as the fantasies of doing this more often fill your head. The monster you hated for so long looks so peaceful and beautiful as she snores away against you, but this time it's not her that you're afraid of. You push through your fantasies and imagine all the ways you'd make this relationship—or even just the friendship—go horribly wrong. All the arguments you'd have over your insecurities, all the unneeded jealousy and stress you'd bring into her life. It'd never end well for her and you know it. There's so much work you'd have to do on yourself that it'd never be worth her time, even if you could manage to fix things.
It’s nice he realizes it. Suicide is not a normal thing, it’s an aberration, brought on by the psychological effects of sunsets action and the subsequent criminalization and isolation he experienced both physically and emotionally, which fueled a depression that lead to those thoughts. And over time the persistence of the depression turned the thoughts into a plan he was planning on doing. Not the most stable conditions for a relationship. Yet that he is self aware enough to realize it is a massive step and if he can work on that, with sunsets and others help And support( he cant do it alone), he has a very bright future, at least a happy future not plagued by thoughts of suicide and constant depression.
You look away and purse your lips for a moment. "I know it might be hard to accept that I'm gone, but I know you'll be better off in the long run. I hope you understand that one day. You have a wonderful life ahead of you and you don't need me to drag it down. I hope you know that I've forgiven you. It's just... better for the world this way now."
It so sad how insidious that lie is, that grabs so many good people in its grasp, making them think it’s true
You close your eyes and shake your head, your body suddenly going on high alert with panic as you try to just get this over with. "It's you," you manage to whisper out.
Oooooh boy! He said it! He said it! Yay!
You let out a somber sigh as the fantasies of doing this more often fill your head. The monster you hated for so long looks so peaceful and beautiful as she snores away against you, but this time it's not her that you're afraid of. You push through your fantasies and imagine all the ways you'd make this relationship—or even just the friendship—go horribly wrong. All the arguments you'd have over your insecurities, all the unneeded jealousy and stress you'd bring into her life. It'd never end well for her and you know it. There's so much work you'd have to do on yourself that it'd never be worth her time, even if you could manage to fix things.
This is relatable.
And oh man those final scenes! Right from his confession to a sleeping Sunset, to his thoughts about the end, I was genuinely scared he'd do it and the story would end. The relief I got when I saw the status of the story still being "incomplete"! So, amazing work here! I really like Sunset's reaction to the confession. I love that - even though I totally hope they get together - you don't rush the thing. It's building and building and building, and honestly, that build-up is needed, and you know how to do it right, you sure know how to tug at those heartstrings. This one is my favorite from you. Looking forward to more!
You have no idea how absolutely amazing this fic is.
I don't tend to read emotional descriptions too much but I'm almost compelled to slow down my reading and savour the moment.
I can't help but feel this is all too disturbingly real of an emotional development. It makes me think you've either had experience writing or are yourself familiar with similar experiences. In the case of the former kudos my skilled friend, in the latter I hope you're ok and don't be afraid to ask for help.
You look over to Sunset and see a hint of anger on her face, only for it to snap and leak out as a disappointed sigh and looking away. "I don't blame you for thinking that way. I know it's going to take a lot to shake off my old reputation, but..." she lets out a frustrated groan and rolls onto her back, her expression turning defeated. "I guess I'd gotten used to people liking me now. That was probably kind of arrogant to assume you'd move on so fast, huh?"
Wait, so did she purposely find him?
A hint of determination crosses Sunset's eyes as she pushes herself off the mattress to sit up on her knees. "I'm not using you. Look, maybe I am trying kind of hard to make it up to you, but if you've gone through what I have you'd understand how important it is to make it up to all the people you've hurt."
She didn’t really go through much.
"Yeah. Look, things can get better. You don't have to keep living in the lie that I put you in. I can help, I can try to change something. I made up those rumors about you harassing those girls and I can unmake them too," she says, that spark of determination quickly returning.
Man, those last few scenes made me feel like someone was ripping duct tape off of my heart!
Great chapter!
Hurry and wake up Sunset before it’s to late! Or for The Protagonist, give life another chance, trust in Sunset!
I Like that you put a slip of the tongue confession of what he plans to do and neither of them noticed. good job over all. Can't wait to read more
How much longer before we get to the mature stuff?
This is usually the part where Hawkeye would say, "Don't do that. Don't give me hope."
This story hits hard for me for so many reasons, especially having had similar struggles to this day. I love what you're doing with this and I love the accurate way you give of building hope despite not wanting any. It's made me smile and tear up, and I just wanted to say thank you for writing something this emotionally deep that I can connect with. Especially since I still struggle with this, and it adds to the reasons to stick around, for my friends, and for amazing things like this.
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There’s always one person
I really enjoy this story. It’s cute, but also a little... tense, for lack of a better word.
That’s all. Good job writing. Carry on.
Another good chapter
I like how uncertain Sunset seemed at the confession. Having her do all this out of love would've been an easy cop-out. She probably expected these acts of kindness would be a temporary thing and Anon would eventually get better and they would both move on with their lives separately. But the confession means if she wants to make him happy she would have to devote herself to him and she's not sure if she's okay with giving up her own options and happiness to make it up to Anon. It's quite a predicament. It really makes her decide "how much am I willing to give to make this up to him?" Just the fact that she was hesitating was enough for Anon to know it wouldn't work and that one or both of them would just be miserable. She seems to be doing this less so out of altruism, but rather to make herself feel better by fixing a mistake. This just reinforces how I dislike this Sunset, though I do understand her actions. Even I wouldn't stay with someone romantically out of pity or guilt at the expense of my happiness. But Sunset put herself in this position for her past actions, and either has to suck it up and accept the "punishment" of staying with Anon, or accept that what has been broken can't be fixed, at least not completely.
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Not gana lie, I fucken hate cliffhangers.
Absolutely love that she didn’t immediately confess and declare her feelings back like Rust said. Regardless of whether I want them together (I totally do), this felt so much more real not a complete contrivance for the story.
Absolutely love this so far!
The way you write this is like my demons put to print. It’s beautiful and terrifying at the same time.
I feel like he's gonna hesitate, he'll have the bottle ready to go and just before he puts it to his mouth, he'll stop. He might try a few more times but will ultimately hesitate to kill himself.
That's what I think, or Sunset knows his plans and might probably stop him before he does anything rash.
you've done it once again Holy, I am officially hooked on another masterpiece of yours. Keep it up dude you're the best!
It’s nice he realizes it. Suicide is not a normal thing, it’s an aberration, brought on by the psychological effects of sunsets action and the subsequent criminalization and isolation he experienced both physically and emotionally, which fueled a depression that lead to those thoughts. And over time the persistence of the depression turned the thoughts into a plan he was planning on doing. Not the most stable conditions for a relationship. Yet that he is self aware enough to realize it is a massive step and if he can work on that, with sunsets and others help And support( he cant do it alone), he has a very bright future, at least a happy future not plagued by thoughts of suicide and constant depression.
It so sad how insidious that lie is, that grabs so many good people in its grasp, making them think it’s true
Oooooh boy! He said it! He said it! Yay!
This is relatable.
And oh man those final scenes! Right from his confession to a sleeping Sunset, to his thoughts about the end, I was genuinely scared he'd do it and the story would end. The relief I got when I saw the status of the story still being "incomplete"!
So, amazing work here! I really like Sunset's reaction to the confession. I love that - even though I totally hope they get together - you don't rush the thing. It's building and building and building, and honestly, that build-up is needed, and you know how to do it right, you sure know how to tug at those heartstrings.
This one is my favorite from you. Looking forward to more!
Gneiss.
You have no idea how absolutely amazing this fic is.
I don't tend to read emotional descriptions too much but I'm almost compelled to slow down my reading and savour the moment.
I can't help but feel this is all too disturbingly real of an emotional development. It makes me think you've either had experience writing or are yourself familiar with similar experiences. In the case of the former kudos my skilled friend, in the latter I hope you're ok and don't be afraid to ask for help.
Wait, so did she purposely find him?
She didn’t really go through much.
WTF?
I've always been a sucker for romance with or without sex. That last scene just punched my feelings. It's love, I tell ya! DAMN ONIONS!!!