8912480
Then you may do the first chapter, too rushed out I know. that stupid someone bossing me around back home, no time to edit the oversights. And my utmost focus on the third chapter.

8912485
Can ya edit stuff?

8911226
They switched, it but it does tie in with the classic God of Wars. I'm not going to spoil it but you should go and play the new one, it's by far the best.

8912514
Sure.

"No, not really, you do not wanna know what his name literally means."

Ummm... power?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kratos_(mythology)

I mean, naming your son 'Power' isn't the best possible name you could have given him, but then again, naming your son, 'Fearless,' what Atreus means:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Atreus

Isn't exactly good parental naming either. XD

8912488
Neato! So is that a yes on the 'Theme Stone,' somehow making its way as a gag so that the ponies can be blown away by Kratos' God of War 2 theme, or no?

Also, when do you want it by, and do you have time to help me as I'm editing it so that I can figure out what you were trying to say and such in case of REALLY jumbled mistakes?

Also, please, please, please tell me that, by story's end, Kratos will have punched, kicked, strangled, or otherwise hit the mane six, spike, the cutie mark crusaders, grannie smith, a bunch of villains, and a bunch of other characters that can be REALLY annoying if you let them talk for too much to get them to top and/or to empathize a point (mainly, that they should stop being unbearable)?

8912715
I know it's hard to take seriously. I'm just...I just didn't want to say what I really felt and say that this is the most ridiculous thing I've ever seen. Like you said in the comment below your reply to me, there is virtually NOTHING in Equestria for Kratos to make this an exciting story. The only way this story can have any entertainment value is to throw a load of mythical gods into the fanfic. Kratos is such a powerful character that any challenge you put him in while in Equestria will amount to NOTHING.

Maybe if the story was the other way around, perhaps? Like, if a pony or the Mane 6/7 found themselves in Krato's world? At least we have gods and real monsters for Kratos to fight, with ponies being on the sidelines helping out a bit here and there. I don't know, but this story just doesn't do it for me. This is a crossover that I don't see working unless you get totally ridiculous, and even if you do so it'd be too ridiculous to take with a modicum of seriousness.

8912715
Also am I the only person seeing f**king PORN being advertised around this site!?! What the hell is Mature British Babes doing on here!?!

Thank god Kratos mellows out with age. If this was the old Kratos, Pinkie would've needed a neck brace.

8912909
That's excactly the thing I'm allowing in case some mistakes are spotted.

8912909
They will go into Kratos' world, and they will serve as distractions while Kratos fights the more stronger enemies (i.e. Ogres and Ancients). They will also provide stun damage for him to grab. They're also allowed to fight the medium ones, like Draugrs, but before you can jump to conclusions, Draugrs are not pushovers and must be taken seriously, but Hel-Walkers, no. The Blades of Chaos and Spike's flames are the only ones doing this job. Kratos will order them to fight because one of them is frightened.

8913367
Crushing her ears are more than enough punishment for her than death.

8912779
Played the story beginning to end.

8913708
I just completed it and it was fucking amazing

8913708
There is definitely going to be another.

God I Love your work! The effort and love you put into this is amazing! The combat! the sound effects! Putting the buttons next to the combat! The interactions! The way you make it seem like its from the game, makes it feel like I’m playing the game!! (Sqee) Not to mention how well you protrayed Kratos, and his son. In all honesty I hope this continues and concludes, since this is a side mission. I Wish you well and take your timely writing this fimfic! Hopefully the community will teat you well! :D
(Just wish I can spam the like button)

8914316
Phase 2 will introduce Sindri and Brok to Equestria after Kratos kills the Storm King.

I feel badass just by reading this

8913569
If you wouldn't mind lending an ear to a suggestion here, what if instead Kratos...just told the ponies to defend for themselves? I mean it's your story at the end of the day and I respect that, but Kratos isn't really one of those heroic characters from what I remember. I mean, I suppose his son could suggest to Kratos that they encourage the ponies to fight, but Kratos is one of those 'I only care about the task at hand' kind of characters. I'm sure he'd willingly save the ponies lives because he's not a complete dick about things, but he's probably only going to do it the one time as he doesn't care much for distractions.

I mean I'm probably just spouting complete nonsense here so just ignore me if I'm talking total bollocks.

8914442
Kratos only wanted to help because he trusts his son's instincts.

8914442
He will order them to fight a dangerous creature and defend themselves if he sees one of them is frightened, just like with his son against a Soul Eater rather than leave him alone walking around.

8914442
And Kratos only wanted to help the ponies with the Storm King's issues because he only wanted to know who's responsible for commiting such treachery, once he finds out and deals the problem one way or another, kill or persuation, he and his son go home. End of story, not whole story. Brok and Sindri will return though.

So, yeah, Pauli, when do you want my edited work back?

8915341
You finished?

8915553

No, I was just wondering when you wanted it done by.

The story great so farbut I did find a few spelling errors in the chapters but so far keep it up.

Why is this updated even through there is no chapter 4

Kratos is such a badass.

Phase 2 will introduce an Original Pony Character, in season 8.

this is so cool

(Atreus leaps out of the dust in arrow shooting position in mid-air, Slow-Motion)

Then out of the sudden blue, his son, little Atreus, came out next, jumped out of the dust, his bowstring in hand. Of course as we heard those familiar words spoken from his lungs, aye, we knew this move...

I noticed you trying to explain many of the action scenes in brackets like the one I quoted above. In my opinion, many of your bracket explanations are completely unnecessary like the example I show above. If you’re just going to explain an action scene might as well just explain alongside the story narration, there is no need for a bracket explanation as it seems repetitive.

Another example of this is:

CRACK!! (Mask cracking in Slow-Mo)

This, in my opinion, is unnecessary when you could easily explain it through the eyes of the character that saw it happening, it only takes a few words to explain the scene.

For example:

CRACK!!

A Storm Guard flew through the air and crashed into the ground and remained motionless, his mask completely shattered revealing what was once a face now horribly unrecognizable and caked with blood. However, her attention soon turned to the one that caused all this.

She can't believe her eyes on what she just saw. It wasn't anythin' she'd ever seen in her adventures with her crewmates, a being unlike any other. A species of an unknown origin... .

This is just an example, but it paints a clearer picture for your readers plus it also maintains or even further emphasizes the brutality of the current scene. Give this a try as it leaves more room for explanation and imagery for your readers without having to use bracket explanations.

from the way i read it you got kratos’s character perfect and i don’t see any bad grammar

you are godly

8919409
That's why I'm allowin' it in case of overdoing: Criticism.

8919409
Thanks for summing that up, yo.

8919788
I've been enjoying this story so far, but it still kinda felt rushed and a bit forced, try pacing the events, put more depth and detail, make it so that it draws you in, plus can you not put the action buttons in, it's kinda annoying, no offense.

8920121
I felt like doin' it, cuz it's not called God of War without Quick-Time Events.

8920241
I know, but the story can find alternative ways to express that maybe it feels as if the world slows, and brother flails his chaos blades, pinning it in a storm guards sholder. As if another god was controlling brother, he pulls him forth and drives the opposite blade through his face splitting his head in two. do it such like this, it'll it'll be more imirsive. Bringing the reader in instead of turning them away, plus maybe make the title more uneqe.

8920253
The blades will be used later on.

8920352
That was just an example, I was just using the Chaos blades for example but if you want to use what I written and change it up a bit go right ahead.

8920352
When's the next chapter coming out anyway?

8920357
Still cookin' up ideas before launchin' it, it's already on the makes.

8920369
Alright

8920395
Plus you and other guys out there are free to suggest any ideas for the story and advices in case you spot mistakes or oversights in the chapters.

8920404
Alright, but I did have this idea, a bit later Arterius/loki gets separated from Kratos during thair run through the city getting left behind. His childish curiosity gets the better of him had he decides to go peeking about, finding a few caged royal guards, finding them horribly beaten and in pain as well as something, strange laying amung barrels and crates of stolen poession. He decides to do a good deed to release the helpless guards but they just tell him to leave them be, they don't have much longer left to live but the one guard tells him about a relic her got from his friend (A strange, golden beautifully crafted crossbow from a Griffin friend who passed) but as he picks it up, he's surprised to find it's enchanted, almost godly, it's pulsing with lightning magic, this probably should take place further down the chapter probably, but as he tries tracking his father down he's left, lost with no knolage of the place, wandering aimlessly for a while rooting throgh s few buildings along the way trying to lear more.

8920452
Good one, but that'll happen in a different way, instead of a caged royal guard, he gets a favor from one during peacetime, in Phase 2 of the story. I'm gonna treat that like in the game.

8920463
I understand that, I'd just just go a little less video game more story, the 4th one was heavily story driven anyway, try focusing more on the story elements more than trying to get it exactly like the game, character perfection is more relevant and events.

8920634
Dialougue, characters, stories, narration and action will be more emphasized, although QTEs may appear in slow-motion action scenes, also TPV will narrate the story in the second Phase of the story, so that may be more different.

8920643
Alright, just find a better way of expressing thoes parts other than brackets and litterally having the action button showing, it's a turn off for some people.

8920650
It's my idea for those buttons, I thought It'd be cool. Some people like it, well most people, some not, some, ignore it. You know like mixed. I don't know what to do, maybe it's best to let it be. After all, it's not like all chapters are filled with buttons you know.

8920738
Yah alright, I know where your coming from, I was just saying, but okay.