I've been waiting for a sequal and now it's finally here! Despite the fact that I've been waiting, it's still a shock to see it actually happened. Normally I just check to "make sure" but don't actually expect anything. Needless to say, I'm quite happy.
I'm also glad that this started right where we left off. Overall, I'm very pleased.
8999579 yay first comment hope you liked my writing style (which is similar to wondering pigeon and he might have re-phrased some lines during proofreading which led to him sorta co-writing ) and direction. hopefully new chapters come sooner as I get help to actually sit down and write the story. The next chapter might contain a surprise
8999593 Your writing style is just like wandering pigeon. I was actually thinking that before I commented the first time! *** Also, I hope you don't mind if I put some of the mistakes I found in this. I had been proof reading for the first story so I sorta feel responsible in helping out, even if unofficially, I that makes sense...
“For Celestia sake! Get these repulsive garnets off you!”
"garnets" should be "garments."
Octavia was at the ends of her nerves, she knew Vinyl can have some smelly number 2 have doing the mistake of going to their bathroom right after Vinyl made a visit there, but this was a whole new level!
You should put an 's after 2, make "have" "having", and change "doing" to "made".
“Where we keep the big black garbage bags?”
Put "do" in between the first 2 words.
an action that reminded Octavia about the big sack of bits that came alongside her roommate revolting outfit.
You could make "roommate" "roomate's"
Nononono, I was very drunk and I really want to leave so I just blurted it out, It will only be one more night, promise!
"want" should be "wanted".
how did Octavia knew how that pony looked?
"knew" should be "know".
“Well she was purple,and she was an earther like you, but I didn’t get to see her cutie mark due to the huge dia-” Horsefeathers, I almost blurred on about the diaper she wore, don’t want to freak octi even more
"earther" should be "earth pony" and "blurred" could be "rambled" (not sure if blurred was intended).
What is Equestria is she doing in club like that though?
The first "is" should be "in".
There are still quite a few more mistakes but I don't want to make this reply too long. *** I just want to point out that I am not trying to bully, degrade, disrespect, or discourage you in any way. As I said, I really enjoy this story and your writing style and will no doubt continue reading it.
If you don't want me doing something like this again then let me know and if you would like me to help proofread I can also do that. It never hurts to have lots of extra eyes!
A great continuation to the original story. I particularly enjoyed Octavia taking charge through delegating responsibility to Berry Punch. That whole scene was awesome! :)
Vinyl having inner monologues over what happened and is happening definitely sets us up for what could come next. Does she like the club? Does she feel bad if she quits? Are the bits too good to stop the gig? Is Octavia really like her mother?
This should be good times to read through. Nice work. :)
I like how Octavia's becoming somewhat of a "Mommy" to Vinyl since she got padded up and stumbled home in her messy state. I forsee her slipping more into that role as Vinyl gets accustomed to her new job.
This is a fun story so far, love the idea that Octavia is just rolling with Vinyl finally having a 'real' job now and doesn't care about the diaper so long as she is getting her part of the rent. I wonder where this is going to all lead to at this point as a sequel to this story?
Fear not, for I plan to continue this plot! Just super busy with life now, very busy job+trying to sort out new visa+oh yeah, I'm in a different continent then my computer. Hopefully I'll be able to get back to my preferred location (where my pc is) in June, might upload a new chapter before then, but highly doubtful. Keep this story listed for eventual updates! Also the busy job is due to working super hard and long for visa, so I would have way more free time once I move. So again, fear not!
I've been waiting for a sequal and now it's finally here! Despite the fact that I've been waiting, it's still a shock to see it actually happened. Normally I just check to "make sure" but don't actually expect anything. Needless to say, I'm quite happy.
I'm also glad that this started right where we left off. Overall, I'm very pleased.
Hope to see more soon!
8999579
yay first comment hope you liked my writing style (which is similar to wondering pigeon and he might have re-phrased some lines during proofreading which led to him sorta co-writing ) and direction. hopefully new chapters come sooner as I get help to actually sit down and write the story. The next chapter might contain a surprise
8999593
Your writing style is just like wandering pigeon. I was actually thinking that before I commented the first time!
***
Also, I hope you don't mind if I put some of the mistakes I found in this. I had been proof reading for the first story so I sorta feel responsible in helping out, even if unofficially, I that makes sense...
“For Celestia sake! Get these repulsive garnets off you!”
"garnets" should be "garments."
Octavia was at the ends of her nerves, she knew Vinyl can have some smelly number 2 have doing the mistake of going to their bathroom right after Vinyl made a visit there, but this was a whole new level!
You should put an 's after 2, make "have" "having", and change "doing" to "made".
“Where we keep the big black garbage bags?”
Put "do" in between the first 2 words.
an action that reminded Octavia about the big sack of bits that came alongside her roommate revolting outfit.
You could make "roommate" "roomate's"
Nononono, I was very drunk and I really want to leave so I just blurted it out, It will only be one more night, promise!
"want" should be "wanted".
how did Octavia knew how that pony looked?
"knew" should be "know".
“Well she was purple,and she was an earther like you, but I didn’t get to see her cutie mark due to the huge dia-” Horsefeathers, I almost blurred on about the diaper she wore, don’t want to freak octi even more
"earther" should be "earth pony" and "blurred" could be "rambled" (not sure if blurred was intended).
What is Equestria is she doing in club like that though?
The first "is" should be "in".
There are still quite a few more mistakes but I don't want to make this reply too long.
***
I just want to point out that I am not trying to bully, degrade, disrespect, or discourage you in any way. As I said, I really enjoy this story and your writing style and will no doubt continue reading it.
If you don't want me doing something like this again then let me know and if you would like me to help proofread I can also do that. It never hurts to have lots of extra eyes!
8999655
Pm about the rest please.
Earther is a slang term for earth ponies :P
A great continuation to the original story. I particularly enjoyed Octavia taking charge through delegating responsibility to Berry Punch. That whole scene was awesome! :)
Vinyl having inner monologues over what happened and is happening definitely sets us up for what could come next. Does she like the club? Does she feel bad if she quits? Are the bits too good to stop the gig? Is Octavia really like her mother?
This should be good times to read through. Nice work. :)
Awesome, the sequel's here!
I like how Octavia's becoming somewhat of a "Mommy" to Vinyl since she got padded up and stumbled home in her messy state. I forsee her slipping more into that role as Vinyl gets accustomed to her new job.
This is a fun story so far, love the idea that Octavia is just rolling with Vinyl finally having a 'real' job now and doesn't care about the diaper so long as she is getting her part of the rent. I wonder where this is going to all lead to at this point as a sequel to this story?
Dang, I just got burned by a spoiler tag. Nice.
9000063 She does care about the diaper. She certainly doesn't want Vinyl coming home every morning in a dirty diaper, smelling up the whole place.
yays another vinyl story hope she be more okay using her diaper this time
Yay! Great first chapter!
Yeah, it's good, but it needs some editing here and there. I can't wait for more, though!
9003897
I just implemented the latest feedback from the proofreaders, tell me if the problems were fixed
Cover art is on!
What you ponies think of it?
9020565
very cute and cool at the same time and vinly looks so cute in that diaper and making so cool beats
Best DJ! ^^
How's the next chapter coming along?
9089599
Going, slowly, life kinda put me away from my computer for the next month so it's even slower, but good things come to those who wait.
Fear not, for I plan to continue this plot!
Just super busy with life now, very busy job+trying to sort out new visa+oh yeah, I'm in a different continent then my computer.
Hopefully I'll be able to get back to my preferred location (where my pc is) in June, might upload a new chapter before then, but highly doubtful. Keep this story listed for eventual updates!
Also the busy job is due to working super hard and long for visa, so I would have way more free time once I move. So again, fear not!
Is this going to be continued?
9770636
Eventually, kinda busy with RL for the past year, hopefully it will be sorted soon