Thank Celestia!! DId you do this because of my suggestions?

Again, I am so glad someone did this!! Cant wait for the next chapter!!

Yep, I really like the way you described it in the PMs. I thought it was an interesting story idea. Also, after this, I think I'll ship Spike with Sunset Shimmer, but she'll just be a regular unicorn and Spike will be a normal dragon, same with the story involving Spike being shipped together with Tempest Shadow

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Yes!! FInally, someone took an idea of mine and used it!! Thanks!! ANd the other ones sound great!! ALso, when will the next chapter come to be?

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What about Trixie? There are almost none with her and SPike.

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I think after Sunset is done, I'll work on the Spike x Trixie story. If not, then I'll work on Trixie's next and as for the next chapter, I'm not sure when it'll be published, but I'll try to post it as soon as possible if I can finish up some of my other highly demanded stories.

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ok. Thanks. This is going to be spectacular!!!!

A premise may have potential, but the execution falls off. I would give 3/10 for effort and featuring Chrysallis. Not unreadable, but closer to it than I would like.

I mean, my own grammar is not that good either, but having more consistency with past/present tense should help a lot (like sticking to one for the whole text, preferably past one). And paying more attention to the verbs in general. Using grammarly or one of the free analogues may be a good idea.

'The changelings still glared at him and he felt like he was lying'
'Chrysalis almost got crushed' - among the most obvious examples.

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huh, I'm surprised I didn't see those slight errors. I'll admit, my grammer can get a little messed up at times, and I appreciate the constructive critisism.

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If he fixed the grammar, would you rate it better?

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Sure, by a point or two. Sticking to past tense for the whole text would bump it a bit further. To do better would require significantly more work and/or skill. And as long as text isn't unreadable I wouldn't really recommend focusing on major rewrite if it hurts the work's progress. Few things kill the stories better then rewrites...

*Shrugs* It's just my personal subjective opinion in the end though.

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True. Each to their own, i always say.

This is only one chapter and I already love this story. Cant wait for the next one.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Spike's gonna have someone gonna be steady with him, whether he wants it or not...

Also this bit of a passage:

"Thanks, Fluttershy." Spike says. Fluttershy nods and smiles at Spike. They clink their mugs together and blow softly on their drinks before taking a few sips of their hot chocolate. Spike sighed happily. "This is some pretty good hot chocolate, thanks again, Flutters." he says. Fluttershy giggles adorably.

"You're very welcome, Spike." she replies. Fluttershy then brings up a certain subject, not to be rude, but just showing that she's concerned. "So, are you sure you don't want to pursue Rarity anymore? I mean, you've had your eye on her for so long and now you're giving up."

makes me really think that there's gonna be a confirmation between Spike, Chrysalis, and suprising (but not that surprisingly) Rarity. I can see Spike seeing something in Chrysalis that pretty much nopony else sees in her, and I can really see Rarity really trying to get back at Spike I know, it's kinda cliche and predictable, but I can really see that happening. Though I'm a bit surprised that Fluttershy's not considered a potential romantic interest.

Mind you all that happens AFTER Chryssie gets healed...so that could be a while...

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I think you just gave me another brilliant idea for the next chapter

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I read it and can complete understand what you writing. I feel this can be a great story. I felt that Fluttershy likes Spike. She ask do you want some hot chocolate... hint, hint. Spike x Chrysalis is a ship I like and can't get enough of. Now, about Rarity... I don't care if you make her suffer, because lets face it, she did Spike dirty. Do what ever you want with Rarity. Now, Fluttershy, she make me happy if she happy for some reason. It is all in your hands when it come to the story. My grammar is not the best, so for your story I will say you did a great job. I be looking for another chapter.

when it comes to chapters zoidberg PERFECTLY says what i want https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k3gUVvg2eQU

When I read the title of this story I first thought it said changling for the better but sadly I was wrong but it would be a good pun

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I like it so far.

PLEASE make more chapters i like stories that involve chryssi specifically sweet ones like this one most likely will be(ones that dont involve rape tragedy death or other things i dont like in stories) i am actually halfway through my first draft of a story of my oc and chrysalis falling in love eventually getting married and having foals(or would a changeling call them grubs?) But yes it will involve intercourse(the scene will be a bit more focused on emotion than the action itself)

You've done a plenty for me already.

He could still remember the day after he stopped chasing after Rarity that he'd always hang out by the lake,

Edit 6/5/2018:

Although, I do appreciate how you're so concerned about me, Fluttershy,

but the tree was much too big and too heavy.

For Spike it felt like an eternity

you go and get and Rainbow Dash

no to her #1 assistant for doing what was right in his heart.

He then walked over to the couch

the strength or energy to be considered a threat,

Rescue from Death.

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That was perfect.

A good start of the story