Were you inspired by my Island story?

Aaaaaaaand here we go! *Jumps in*

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not really, it was mostly tatsurou's suggestion.

Ahh, some good, kinky and sexy fun. This should be good.

Starting off strong my friend!
Looking forward to this.

Oh I'm liking this so far.

as much as I REALLY love the idea of the fic, I just gotta say that it doesn't really seem like they've changed at all from the last fic... Sure, they're treating him differently from how he described it, but is treating him like some nameless hunk really much better? I mean, in the first fic, he had relations with Tempest because he CONNECTED with her, while, here, it doesn't seem like he knows any of them more than just acquaintances.

My suggestion: Put them in their place; make them realize that they will NEVER get him by lusting after him, but they CAN be with him by BONDING with him.

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I can't help but agree with this. Make them earn it. Also while I appreciate that you have kept their Brest size to a resanable level (so far). I was questioning the various girls attire. Skin tight clothing is not comfortable and at sleepovers, at least in my experience, comfortable sleep attire is usually what you're aiming for.... unless they all planned to be taking it all off anyway.

Either way I like what I'm reading so far, keep it up.

YES SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Well, that makes three, because I'm also of the feeling that the Mane 6 really have a tough go at it to attempt winning Spike's trust again, especially after what happened in the first one... They really have to earn it. Maybe not fire and brimstone (would be aprops since it's about Tempest and Spike) but the girls need to take a walk in Spike's scales or Tempest's suit--metaphorically of course...

Spike opened up to Tempest with his feelings Tempest opened up to him, which is a hell of a lot more than what of the others have done...I have to wonder how Starlight handles things with this as well.

...Off topic, I surprisingly think that Starlights's gonna go after Spike--well not in the same way that I'm assuming Twilight and the gang's gonna do to try to get Spike's forgiveness...IT's gonna be interesting at least...

Hoo b0i

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I agree with all three of you. The six need to be told off again. Treating him like a piece of meat is almost worse than ignoring him. They’re paying the wrong kind of attention.
I am loving the story so far even with the small criticism. I personally would love to see Starlight get involved with Tempest and Spike in a similar way to how Spike got involved with Tempest. It doesn’t have to include sex. Just bonding through conversation alone would be great. I know this is your story and you may already have plans, but I just thought I throw that idea out there.

Twilight snapped her head towards the pegasus, "WHA-!? Nopony told me it was Strip Poker! I thought we just trying to get him to look at us right now!"

Cadance: My kinky radar is buzzing!

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I have to agree. This is showing their is a attraction for him but not showing much else. We will need to see during the trip that they each notice their own faults in their handling of their relationship with Spike and want to improve on it. I think even making some of them fall back into their unfortunate habits during this sleepover will show that as they are trying things aren't perfect yet. We can see the offender beat herself up for her mistake and it would show just how much they are trying but even then it isn't a overnight fix. It will mean so much more and make the moment when he really have a heart to heart with each girl more powerful and let us see their is a foundation being built between each of them that can really become something. I hope honestly that Pinkie is the plumpest of them all she SOO need to be a bbw type of woman to make the body types as diverse as we can get them between the girls.

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They are all correct. Let the feels be heard and make them earn his love. Honestly, the only one's who should have the easiest time at that should be, Starlight and Trixie. The rest can sit and drool. At least until much later in the story!:

Other than that, great job. This chapter felt like you were testing the water anyway to see where to go. Hoping for more greatest in the future chapters and thanks for the sequel.

I liked the first story and I'm enjoying the second, but fuck that ridiculous mid-scenario cliffhanger. Name a single person who likes that crap and I will show you a bold-faced liar!

I was hoping for a sequel. And so far I am enjoying it.

Please tell me Dash is small in the chest department

If Spike had wings.....

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Hopefully not. Flat-chested women aren’t women at all.

Yes!!!

MOre soon please!!!!!!

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You realize any women who are actually like that are going to get mad at you for saying that, right?

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Eeeeeeyup.

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Flat is Justice! There is a certain appeal with flat chested women.

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I honestly prefer my girls to be top heavy and bouncy.

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Here here!