It has been 6 months since their time at Camp Everfree, unfortunately a new threat appears, one much more dangerous than anything they have ever faced.
8316177 Thank you, I'm sorry if the other chapters were a bit rushed, I didn't want to turn them into an chapter of exposition any more than I already did.
Do not worry, you've done well so far, but I do recommend you to feature this on the Editors group in case you want better advice than mine. You're guaranteed to have someone actually helping you.
This chapter was well made, IMO, regarding the pacing. It feels much better compared to other chapters.
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Thank you, I'm sorry if the other chapters were a bit rushed, I didn't want to turn them into an chapter of exposition any more than I already did.
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Do not worry, you've done well so far, but I do recommend you to feature this on the Editors group in case you want better advice than mine. You're guaranteed to have someone actually helping you.
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Where would you suggest?
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There's the Writers Group, The Looking for Editors group and The School for New Writers group.
Also, you'll get more traction if you use the Shameless Self Promotion Bureau.
I hope you find them useful.
An example: someone on The writer's group posted this thread about fighting scenes that I hope you can find useful.