It has been 6 months since their time at Camp Everfree, unfortunately a new threat appears, one much more dangerous than anything they have ever faced.
Another pointer, It's easier to know how the characters are feeling if you say the tone of their voice. Example:
Adagio and Sonata said in a very humble and low tone of voice: "We are eternally grateful"
It helps a lot, if you write in a First Person Perspective, that you let us know who's point of view is either by outright saying it or by giving a few more details that are related to the character's personality.
Example 1: (P)oint (O)f (V)iew: Rainbow Dash; P.O.V.: Pinkie Pie
Example 2: I clenched my fist with the same strength I make whenever I and Applejack compete, meanwhile, Rarity was talking to the Sirens. Because we know that Pinkie Pie is in the bed, it mentions rarity and Applejack as different entities and only Rainbow Dash competes with Applejack, we can infer that the P.O.V. belongs to Rainbow Dash.
I hope this help, you've managed so far of staying inside the plot and not feel confusing and that's harder than you may think.
Another pointer, It's easier to know how the characters are feeling if you say the tone of their voice. Example:
Adagio and Sonata said in a very humble and low tone of voice: "We are eternally grateful"
It helps a lot, if you write in a First Person Perspective, that you let us know who's point of view is either by outright saying it or by giving a few more details that are related to the character's personality.
Example 1: (P)oint (O)f (V)iew: Rainbow Dash; P.O.V.: Pinkie Pie
Example 2: I clenched my fist with the same strength I make whenever I and Applejack compete, meanwhile, Rarity was talking to the Sirens. Because we know that Pinkie Pie is in the bed, it mentions rarity and Applejack as different entities and only Rainbow Dash competes with Applejack, we can infer that the P.O.V. belongs to Rainbow Dash.
I hope this help, you've managed so far of staying inside the plot and not feel confusing and that's harder than you may think.
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Thank you for the advice.