It has been 6 months since their time at Camp Everfree, unfortunately a new threat appears, one much more dangerous than anything they have ever faced.
Well, you can go from point A to point B and it can be seen your structure, now all you need is to give more content into your story. More details, more in depth and not feeling forced (Kai deciding to train Sunset felt as if he wanted just because and while it is understandable why Sunset wouldn't like Goku for being a Saiyan, there wasn't much in depth on how she felt or more contact between them to feel justified to attack on the air or to separate from Goku) but you are improving.
Well, you can go from point A to point B and it can be seen your structure, now all you need is to give more content into your story. More details, more in depth and not feeling forced (Kai deciding to train Sunset felt as if he wanted just because and while it is understandable why Sunset wouldn't like Goku for being a Saiyan, there wasn't much in depth on how she felt or more contact between them to feel justified to attack on the air or to separate from Goku) but you are improving.
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I was on the thought that she wouldn't like him because he is a saiyan.
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I may need to put a few more chapters between this and the enxt one but that will have to wait.