Discord, bored of the world after ruling it for centuries, senses his up coming demise and visits another world overflowing with chaos. After seemingly picking a random creature, he offers the biped a tempting choice to keep things chaotic.
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Not gonna lie as much as i love smite (been playing since season 1 back when rama had mana free astral arrows and sylvaunous could out range towers) but the description puts me off from the story
Nice to see this story continued.
10641936
A shame, it's certainly one of the better tales that deal with OP humans.
It LIVES
I see a small nod to the Bionicle franchise with a certain name
Nice to see an update, I hope we will see more frequent updates.
10642039
I know nothing of Bionicle so that's unintentional.
10642053
Ah, okay.
I thought it was a reference because there was a Toa named Li'kan
It's alive! The yearly chapter is here! now to wait until 2022
Thanks for the update. =)
It seems your back. Good!!! I hope you can update Adam the Robot Soldier and Warframe as well. Also, Personal Question for this Story? WHY doesn't Carl stop wasting his time gathering 'Allies' for a Resistance Army ( Which is Highly Unnecessary, and probably make Unnecessary Casualties by OOC and Corrupt Celestia/Day Breaker's Wrath), and just use his God Transformations and One-Shot her Ass and be done with it??!!
He has a Smite Version of the Omnitrix (Ben 10), but with Mythological Over Powered Gods!!!! So, why is he wasting time, to gather 'Allies'? Besides, some of them are Pure Assholes/Dickheads to Carl anyway. 🙄
hope the Cthulhu update comes out soon in that story it would be a great asset but may also be a bad one anyway Cthulhu all the way can’t wait to see that in this story hope that daybreaker is not gonna be the only enemy hope there are gonna be more as i love this story
10642153
There will be other gods that'll provide laughs and conflicts HINT/SPOILER It involves the underworld of Equus.
I only wish I could grant you a Time Dilation bubble so you had more free time whenever you wanted to work on this great story.
Even if only for a moment, I'm glad it's back.
I'm still curious about that feral changeling queen.
10642228
She's still recovering in a pod.
I I don't know why but I feel like there should have been a random attack of something at the base because you made the Badlands scenes more peaceful.
Yay the storie back
Missed a Period at the end and I believe you meant to say "You can come with us or ASK a Changeling to find you a room until your house is built."
Ok, that's the zebras, minotaur, and unari. Looks like the resistance is coming along nicely.
10641975
The description makes me think that the human has a omnitrex but with gods and honestly i would prefer the powers of one god that he has to learn
10642428
Oops nope, it was meant to be "ask a Changeling" thanks for pointing it out, fixed.
10643933
thank you, yay now... onto the drawing board.
Speedrun!
I just read the entire story so far in a day and a half and now I don't know what to do with myself while I wait for the next chapter. Holy shit. Holy shit. Holy shit.
I love it.
The story, not the waiting.
OK,
I just caught up with the story, and I'm pleasantly surprised. I think its well done and well-thought-out. Not only that, but I like the characters and their interactions. All in all, it's a fairly decent story, Its no work of Hemingway, but it kept me entertained and kept me interested.
Im really enjoying it and looking forward to more.
The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments
Time to reread the whole story again
Everything is so stiff in the story, everything happens because the mc does it and everyone else remains side characters. It would have been decent if the mc had any depth to him and over time he slowly realizes that he does too much and learns to delegate and trust others, but so far it feels like I'm reading about 2d stick figures.
You need to add more character development, slow the mc down and get him to talk to everyone. Build actual solid connections and learn that not everything revolves around him.
10655507
Thanks for the feedback, I'll definitely work on that.
10656680
It's not about doing what is wrong or right. Everyone has flaws and doing what makes you happy makes for a lot more interesting story because of the shortcomings and how the characters need to overcome them. One thing I see a lot of people fail on when they create OP characters is that they focus on the action and amount of "cool" that the character can generate, which makes a story just filler. The only stories that actually did well with an OP mc is a comedy where the power only adds to the humor and other ones where the main focus on character depth. I've seen authors write OP mcs and hit a wall where the character has already done everything and there is nothing left for him to do with the powers they have. Then there are the ones where the mc goes around fixing everything and meeting too many people. The story breaks down because there are too many characters to remember. Then there are stories where everyone likes him, those are the worst. These are the Gary Sue pitfalls.
One thing you'd want to remember is "Don't be a hero", no one likes the pure hero because it's too easy to predict what they are going to do.
Anyways, good luck! Read more and the things I've covered will make a hell of a lot more sense.
10658435
Good advice, but I do plan to have Carl fail a few times.
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Good catch, Fixed.