Pretty good! A little work correcting a few things as well as smoothing things out and this could have made a great first chapter. Ramirez as Pinkie and adapting almost to well is interesting. Also it only occurred to me after reading this but once Harry figures out/learns a spell to turn human he could make good money teaching it to fellow ponies. After all if the nearly magicless Alphas could beyond master a spell to turn into Wolves than it shouldn't that hard for magical pastel Ponies to learn a spell to turn into humans, especially given how much motivation the former humans would have to learn.
You know, this one works out really well too. This way, he still gets an awesome power-up AND the right people get face-punched this time 'round. I feel like it could at least use being a short story, even if you have it end quicker than some of your others. It's more in-tune with what I at least would prefer to see, since, as someone else put it, it is more "MLP than Dresden" -- or, at least less sad/ unnecessarily-dark than Dresden. I know that's half of what makes the books the way they are, and I'd hate to just ignore what he's gone through for this, but I would not complain to see a version of those books with the same magic, humor, and characters, but without some of the crap he's been through.
Lot less pony faces being punched in this time around, at least. I do like a fic where everyone talks it out.
Yeah. This definitely has potential. I like it!
Pretty good! A little work correcting a few things as well as smoothing things out and this could have made a great first chapter. Ramirez as Pinkie and adapting almost to well is interesting.
Also it only occurred to me after reading this but once Harry figures out/learns a spell to turn human he could make good money teaching it to fellow ponies. After all if the nearly magicless Alphas could beyond master a spell to turn into Wolves than it shouldn't that hard for magical pastel Ponies to learn a spell to turn into humans, especially given how much motivation the former humans would have to learn.
This would please me greatly.
I really hope you write this one day, even if it is more MLP than Dresden I like the idea of him getting a break.
You know, this one works out really well too. This way, he still gets an awesome power-up AND the right people get face-punched this time 'round.
I feel like it could at least use being a short story, even if you have it end quicker than some of your others.
It's more in-tune with what I at least would prefer to see, since, as someone else put it, it is more "MLP than Dresden" -- or, at least less sad/ unnecessarily-dark than Dresden. I know that's half of what makes the books the way they are, and I'd hate to just ignore what he's gone through for this, but I would not complain to see a version of those books with the same magic, humor, and characters, but without some of the crap he's been through.