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You planning on adding Lavos to the mix?
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Perhaps.
Good to see my guy Nidus get some time.
From the wedding to the Crystal ponies. This is one heck of a chapter and I'm looking forward to the next wild adventure.
I wonder if Rainbow Dash and Gauss will have a race one day?
The inclusion of all these warframes as gods, while not a bad idea, still ruin the story for me. To be honest I'd rather you have put another operator into the mix, this one with with at least half an orbiter and much more at their disposal, and a bit older and wiser. The warframes with individuality is a good touch, but having so many of them it makes it hard for me to like them as both story elements and characters. One warframe is the equivalent of an army, this many on a planet that hasnt even conceived internal combustion? Overkill much? It just doesnt work, you begin the story with Raven coming to this strange planet soon after the end of the Second Dream, forced to re-learn how to walk and talk, then conceive trials that emulate the War Within. Then it's back to her life in general, a good mix of strife and drama, then she grows up a bit, and that's where the problems begin. Is it about the Operator and her new life? Or is it about Equestria and it's conception? Why bother when Equestria already has its own problems, and with her perspective and personality, why not just capitalize on that instead of bringing the Origin Systems problems to Equestria? I'm not saying you should re-write it, just that it's suffering from all the same symptoms your other warframe story has. 'Running out of ideas? Lot's and lot's of snu snu!', 'Characters becoming boring? Let's add more!' etc. They're good stories and concepts but after so many chapters you seem to spiral out of control, at least that's how it looks to me. I'm not trying to be negative if it seems that way, I just dont want to see a good idea go to waste.
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Personally, the problem I have found with myself is that I actually have a ton of ideas. But as I put them on paper I quickly realize how long they actually are. I will be honest when I say that I have scrapped a ton of things I wanted to do. I am also at a bit of a crossroad with this story as well due to two major conflicting ideas, and the given fact that I am on chapter 40. It really has never been about running out of ideas, it has been having to many ideas and trying to cut back on them. My other story, that is where I wanted it to go, each idea was not brought out of desperation, it was the story I wanted to bring to life. I never expected it t become that lengthy. Which is why it is coming to its end.
This one however, has always been this conflict in my head of do I continue where it is going? Or do I include more Origin System stuff? I could make both work? I personally believe that this is pretty out of the ordinary, which I like. But at the same time, cliche is not that bad if it's not saturated. Which admittedly, I went to far in some areas. It's an internal struggle.
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As is with any writer, but ideas can bleed into one another especially when writing similar stories. Personally I hate working on more than one story because even if they're similar in some ways ideas get caught up with one another. If i get inspired to work on one I do it until something else comes to mind instead of overburdening myself with one too many, that and they have to be completely different from what I was working on. I loved your direction with this story in the beginning, but then it looked like some bleed over from your other story began to come into play. If you need someone to bounce ideas off of, I and many others in the community would be more than willing if you're not already. I personally find it therapeutic when I'm working through a block or trying to reconcile conflicting ideas.
I expect the next chapter being released in April 1st, it featuring Cephalon Shy appearing and roasting everybody with her unique creativeness for insults...
Of course it would be non-canon.