Sometimes, life just happens. Other times, like for me, it ends. I thought nothing was going to happen. Now, I'm in Equestria, seen as a monster by all but a few. But it doesn't matter. I'm a Tenno now. I fight. It's all I know.
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A few spelling errors, but good nonetheless. Despite not playing war frame myself, I like the idea of this fic. Hope to see more.
Not bad when is he getting the Liset and meeting ordis
6967026 No idea who Liset is, and is Ordis the Orbital A.I.?
could have atleast got the regular Paris or Lato instead of the crappy MK-1 stuff
6967121 Use wiki.
"Dabble" is clearly a complete overstatement.
6967121 the Liset is your ship in warframe and ordis is it onboard a.i
Pretty good, I suggest you use the wiki for pretty much everything you need to know.
I know this is your story but an Excalibur frame with a maxed redirection or shield mod, tops out at 740.
Interesting...
It is taking EVERYTHING I HAVE not to do an edit of your story and I just gave in I will. Regardless (I ain't doing it tonight. Work in 6 hours), this should be less explainy. Make him check them all. Like a diagnostics check. Though, I hate first-person past-tense. I mean, it is the person telling a story. Maybe that is how they would tell it? At the same time, you have to balance that with... readablitiy, I guess (I mean, imagine if the character was hardcore hillbilly and had that heavy accent that makes it hard to understand. It would be hard to read a story if EVERYTHING was like that. You would want to find a balance. Maybe have more thoughts mixed in. Something).
Impressive HUD, I thought as I checked the radar on the left, seeing the outline of the Castle of the Royal Sister. Eight light-blue dots pulsed near the center. Checking the bottom right, I see the outlines of the bow, pistol, and sword I asked for. (1) Now, I hadn't played the game in a while, and had forgotten them when I spoke with Celestia, but I saw them right beneath each outline; Paris, Lato, and Skana, respectively. (2) I wonder if my color scheme is that of my in-game one
1- in regards to this, I would suggest adding Celestia saying something about not knowing what he was referring to and having to access his memories to learn
2 - I don't know if these are right (I know they are MK-1, but whatever). I know one option for melee is Bo and Kunai are the secondary. Skana and Lato were both original starters, but Paris wasn't. It was the MK-1 Braton (the OG MK-1). Can't say about the new starters for certain. I skipped the quest when they added it.
There. I did one paragraph. I'm going to bed.
P.S. - I am exhausted. I often come off as a dick a lot when exhausted. None of this is meant to be dickish, only constructive.
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Yes and no. He can cap at 860 currently using Redirection and Vigor, which would explain the bonus health (which would only be 420). HOWEVER, he could be using PRIMED Vigor, which would bring his shields to 960 and health to 520 (yes, I know Primed Vigor isn't attainable yet). Numbers are still off, but I figured I would remind you of Vigor.
*"You did die, yes," she said. "But I do have an offer for you:begin a ne wlife, and become a protector*
a new what now??
very true, PONIES ARE IDIOTS!!!!!!!!!
Your spelling ability in this chapter is nothing short of abysmal. You haven't even capitalized a lot of the self referancing I's in the chapter. Your storytelling ability is subpar, mostly telling without showing. This becomes more evident with the use of run-on sentences, which should be cut short or broken up with the uses of commas. Other than that, some grammatical choice is needed to really flushbout the idea of your story. The premise, solid, though I wish that his life before his death would be more flushed out. I don't even know the guy's name. It is, all in all, a really easy fix, IF you know what to do. Regardless, I am intrigued, and will read further.
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I almost fussed at you then I read the rest of the comment.