this is a story of how quickly life can change from good to bad to worse. While also having some fun along the way, this is a story of being ripped out of one life and put in a new one, what would you do differently if you had the chance.
Which caused a sharp intake of breath from most of the guest’s tension in the room rising. I rose onto my biped form I inhaled loudly looking down at the now terrified pony “Never heard of them why?” I said loudly while changing to my standard form and sitting back on the pillow casually.
Idon't know why, but I never really was a fan of animal characters having a Human form or changing to much from what they are supposed to be.
However it is a nice story, even if I thought he was some kind of newborn and he grew up in space, but I believe I don't remember everything.
7361031 sorry for the random question but I believe I have never really read a Human turned Luna story, is there an interessting one? If it is okay I would like to get one where they have some sort of freedom in what they are doing in Equestria.
7361817 There are a few actually...like "I am the nightmare and so is Luna" (ok so they are technically in the body of nightmare moon but human is sharing body with Luna). There are more where the human is Luna but I don't remember the name and is too lazy to look it up.
Good story idea but the grammar really kills the pacing and I had an headache afterwards from all that deducing on what you were trying to say. I think english is not your first language? Either way you should get an editor and read the chapter for yourself out loud (it helps spotting the parts that sound unnatural or forcrd/ wrong). Other than that I wish you the best of luck with your story and hope you have a good day.
good going with the stor so far glad to get an update
Idon't know why, but I never really was a fan of animal characters having a Human form or changing to much from what they are supposed to be.
However it is a nice story, even if I thought he was some kind of newborn and he grew up in space, but I believe I don't remember everything.
7360535 normally I agree with you I never really liked anthro but for the future fights I couldn't think of a way around it.
No not a new born just a teenager but he didn't age after reaching maturity. Thanks for the comment.
7361031 sorry for the random question but I believe I have never really read a Human turned Luna story, is there an interessting one? If it is okay I would like to get one where they have some sort of freedom in what they are doing in Equestria.
Moar please.
7361817 human turnd luna? Sorry you've lost me
7364083 do you mean you don't like it or you don't understand me?
There are the storys where the Human is suddenly in Celestias Body, and I wanted to try one with Luna.
7364881 right right that makes sense yes it's a good idea.
7361817 There are a few actually...like "I am the nightmare and so is Luna" (ok so they are technically in the body of nightmare moon but human is sharing body with Luna). There are more where the human is Luna but I don't remember the name and is too lazy to look it up.
Good story idea but the grammar really kills the pacing and I had an headache afterwards from all that deducing on what you were trying to say. I think english is not your first language? Either way you should get an editor and read the chapter for yourself out loud (it helps spotting the parts that sound unnatural or forcrd/ wrong). Other than that I wish you the best of luck with your story and hope you have a good day.
7472504 Thank you, but I actually only like the body sharing thing in rare chases.
Don't separate with large, awkward gaps, use line breaks plz