Page generated in 0.037 seconds
Total duration
917 users online
521,316 hits today, 2,139,894 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
There something that is bothering me about this, Fluttershy seems kinda...out of character, i don't like the fact she sees him as some kind of pet or something, i would rather him be an equal to her.
This is really funny and interesting love the fact he being treated like a pet
718651 Yeah, its been awhile since I had written anything so I'm a bit off. Constantly finding things I can fix, and that's one of my biggest problems is keeping Fluttershy herself, but also having this other side. I'm thinking more interaction with other characters will show how she is normal to everyone else, but you.
It's difficult when everything is only between two people right now.
My point behind this is a stab at how we as humans naturally see every other animal and/or race, even within our own species, are seemingly 'below' us, as inferior, and I apply this to the ponies in
Equestria.
If it makes you feel better, deep down she sees him as that, an equal, but also sees his vulnerability, and is using this to strengthen him to make it out in his own. She cares for him genuinly and isn't trying to hurt him, only protect him with 'tough' love that the other ponies tried to teach to her, though she may have taken things a tad overboard (again).
But thank you for taking the time to read this
719144 Thank you, I'm glad to see someone enjoy my work
Didn't realize this had a mature rating until Fluttershy had a collar.
Genius!!!
Pretty sure it's the Everfree Forest, not Evergreen. Also watdufugshy.
You lost me at the collar.
i see an error 'she moves her hands forward and begins cleaning up front' what hands? really what are hands?
Wish I could be Fluttershy pet.
Wouldn't the collar be faux leather since ponies don't kill and cows are sentient?
had no idea fluttershy could be my dominatrix.
718651 No one knows what goes on behind her closed doors....or her shed
731284 Foalmula doesn't help either. Yes, I went that route.
Fluttershy is just too OoC. Sorry.
You HAD me at collar this is going to be good!
Interesting premise.
We all know the most important thing about the Everee Forest......
IT'S DANGEROUS!!!!!
728761 me too
Chapter 1: Enjoying life as a pet for some reason, obeying everything a mere half sized equine is telling you no matter what.
Chapter 2: Killing myself because I've just realized I'm FUCKING INSANE and anything would be better than staying here with a racist horse.
I'm perfectly fine with femdom, but the way you introduced it was just atrocious in my eyes. Incredibly random with very weak reasoning and poor execution.
I like the idea. It's just that the way you've presented it is, well, amateurish. Your grammar structure is confused, you can't seem to decide if you're in first, second, or third person, and the type is tiny and difficult to read. (Not sure if that's just my computer or your formatting, though.)
Don't worry too much about it! As you write, you'll settle into a style and all of this will improve, but until then it might be prudent to snag an editor. And please don't ask me, I've already tried to edit and it didn't end well.
I like it well enough, and shall continue reading.
The first chapter is so well thought through
Just started reading is this gonna turn torturous or humiliating? Cause that's icky
Sadistic and dominant Fluttershy is an interesting twist for HiE.
When you are traped as a pet by a kinky peggasus you know that you are in... night springs
More show, less tell. Also, I must concur with the moderate OOC-ness of Fluttershy. She seems a bit too coercive (even cruel; such as practically blackmailing the protagonist) at times and I have a hard time seeing her ever striking another creature except perhaps out of sheer terror. To be clear, I have no problem with her being dominant or even babying the protagonist, I just feel she should have eased them into it more. Anyway, practice makes perfect, etc.