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Never been first viewer.
And what a great chapter to be first viewer :3
Yes! Dash is getting some!
758986 I don't intend for Pet's love of Fluttershy to waver, I don't like the feeling. I've never been one for polyamory or cuckolding like I said, so I guess that's why. The rant is fine, it's a point not ever mentioned, but well noticed by the fans.
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Agreed.
And i'd like to say, the way you handle dialogue between Pet and Fluttershy as of recently has been reassuring that they are still 'the ones for each other,' for a lack of a better phrase.
And my previous uncertainty has been erased.
Carry on.
764163 Trainer Jet is out of usable Pokéhumans. Trainer Jet blacked out.
noo pet shes lying dont trust them and free discord so you can dominatem
OMFG this is so fucking awesome update fast please
Hmmm... Just had a quick idea.
When this series is over, you should have the protagonist leave Equestria. A Portal or some shit; just make it obvious that he's not staying there for the rest of eternity. I'd feel kinda bad if I had to be called "Pet" by a bunch of ponies that are half my size until the day I die. Even if it is Fluttershy, she just becomes ultra Flutterbitch throughout the series.
Or am I the only one who still thinks Fluttershy's still being kind of a bitch to "Pet"? omo
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Can't wait for chapter 10! I sense a ORGY 'coming' up soon!
If ya know what I mean? ;:3
Dam Jet you write one of the best clopfics
Hey Jet I'm still loving this story man, if anything it makes me use my mind but that fuckin rocks. I can't wait for the next chapter.
764911 You aren't the only one. This story is all kinds of messed up for me. I have no idea why I like it.
"Damn you side effects!" you say just before you fall onto the bed, unconscious due to side effects.
Sex crazed are we?
CHUCK IS GOD.THAT IS ALL.
Those references! I never even noticed the comparison of the Wonderbolts with the Blue Angels until now! And I couldn't help but chuckle when you referenced the Skittles slogan.
766484 Yeah, I've seen a lot of the Blue Angels since I was young, so as soon as I learned about the Wonderbolts, I immediately saw the correlation between the two. And yeah, I had to use the skittles joke just because it was RD, that is all I got to say about that.
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Cant wait too see rarity get pounded
Okay, I've been reading the story up until this point and I have to say I'm disappointed by how it's occurring. Now I do like the idea of a human finding Fluttershy and some romance builds between the two. However, I have to admit that the way it's executed leaves so much to be desired. For one thing, I really think the human is too much of a pushover. He's always getting yelled at for the most part, always seems to be used as some sort of punching bag, but yet he doesn't do anything. He's got such a weak backbone and acts pathetic. Secondly, Fluttershy is easily the worst pony in this story. She barely acts kind at all and really for the most part yells and berates "Pet" way too much. I know we can usually make characters OOC, but there is a point where they become rather unlikable and somepony I won't care about. Fluttershy's actions throughout the story are just dreadful and terrible.
There's a good story here, but there's so many things wrong with it and I am sad to see something with good potential go down so fast. If maybe the human actually grew a spine and Fluttershy act a little more in character, then this story would be fine. If you want my opinion on a new chapter, how about the human actually be the dominant one for a change and Fluttershy be submissive? In fact, that would be perfect for several future chapters and probably as the story progress, Fluttershy allow the human to be more in control, along with her friends.
Sorry if I'm sounding like a real p**ck here, but there needs to be some improvements. Like I said, there's a good idea buried in this story, but it needs some tuning up.
So you eat skittles while you write huh? I guess you and pet both *puts on shades* taste the rainbow. YEAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!
770775 Well, while I appreciate the honesty I do have a few things to say, I don't think you're being a prick, but I do think you are right with some things. I'm tired with the dominatrix Fluttershy, so I can see her changing real soon, especially with the characters I have in mind coming in, I've been having her soften up as the story progresses, because she's only that dominatrix when she see's him as more of an animal where she can be like that, but she's starting to see him as a 'pony'. She was a good idea in my head, but given the way the story went, she got out of hand to the point where even I couldn't control her.
The guy is a pushover because he's a shy, submissive guy. So he will be dominating some, others he'll be helpless against, and others he'll have to do as told to get what he wants in the end. He's not your stereotypical guy who ever woman he is with wants him on top and in charge, it's too boring and too obvious in my opinion.
Lately a lot of negative feedback as of late has got me thinking about the execution. So I think Fluttershy's current extremes should be more appropriate for either darker stories, or 1 chapter fics.
I'm trying to break open Discord's stone statue thing, but it's a lot harder than you think to break this stuff.
770917 And yes, Slashlord, I went and got some bags of skittles specifically for that and I swear to Celestia they helped write that chapter. Now anytime RD is in a chapter, you'll know I ate a bag of skittles while writing it!
770973 I do hope that I wasn't being too harsh on you. The story idea is good, but the first couple of chapters didn't really agree with me. I'm just getting tired of how Fluttershy is always acting so well...dominating. Now I'm not truly against a submissive male, but really the human pretty much is submissive almost all the time. I do have to agree that maybe some of these chapters could be used for stories more darker. Hopefully I wasn't too harsh on you and that some of this criticism should help you.
771077 Your comments are all I ask for rather than the ones just bashing on everything without offering some sort of "Well you could work on this and that would help your story...".
771112Okay thanks.I'll try and see the story when the next chapter comes.
try skrillex, with you friends and do da oliphant help stimulate the mind
Meh.
No big rants this time, since it was a pretty mellow, ordinary cloppy. I'm curious to see what happens with the drug, but it can wait. Will return after some zzz's.
I thought i't was pretty dam good
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