That was both hilarious and hot. Eagerly awaiting the promised heavy clop.

Fondling is magic.

Two lags, huh?

6838212 Yeah, lags. You know lags come in twos. What? Didn't know that? Get out more.

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Well, I've only ever seen them in nines.

My Little Pony: Boobs Are Magic

BAD TOUCH!

Huhh...Sunset came from Twilight just fondling her.....Either Sunset is super sensitive or Twilight is a fucking fondling-tities master!!!!

Anyway, GREAT STORY!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

I think sunset needs an adult

Sunset might need an adult, eh... Though, I suppose Sci-Twi is technically smarter than most adults, and intelligence does count for something... Mentally, would she count as an adult?

SunLight? Instant fav and follow :3

And M rating! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY

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TITSUROUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!

anyway nice story

have a like

"Actually, no. I didn't understand why she felt sore when she came through and I didn't at first. Then I put it together... She landed on her butt, while I landed on my chest... Which -turns out- is a bit more fluffy and comfortable compared to how they were back in Equestria."

Actually that would hurt a lot worse. There's a reason they tell you to try to land on your butt if you're falling.

6840957 Not when you have extra stuffing to land on. Tee-hee.

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As a girl, extra stuffing makes it more tender. At least for me.

Is it still called "clop" if all characters are humanized?

6842335 That question keeps me up every night.

6841224 What? That makes no sense. That's like saying getting kicked in male parts hurt less when you have a bigger dick.

6842903 Well, not exactly.

Magical Melons!!!!!

6843066 You're right, it'd hurt just as much whateverthe size of your dick, while it would hurt more the bigger the breasts.

Lot of little logic holes and misthink in this story. Particularly:

And a normal school day lasts for roughly six to seven hours.

Boy I'd love to know where YOU went to school, because damn. When you factor in time to get to school and time to get home from school, it's usually much closer to nine.

a world where creatures without fur walk around on two legs wearing stitched together fabrics all the time

Why would Sunset Shimmer describe clothes in such a bizarre way when a lot of ponies, especially in Canterlot, choose to wear clothes? Clothes should not be this alien a concept to Sunset Shimmer that she would feel the need to describe them like this.

A student that shared the face, name, hair, voice, speech patterns, pet dog, skin tone, fashion sense, and pretty much every other aspect that makes a person unique with someone they all knew fondly: Twilight Sparkle.

I...highly doubt that SciTwi just randomly started wearing the exact same clothes as Princess Twilight. It doesn't follow logic. Even if she shed the Crystal Prep uniform, she strikes me as the type who would dress somewhat differently, like turtlenecks and long skirts. Minor nitpick.

She landed on her butt, while I landed on my chest... Which -turns out- is a bit more fluffy and comfortable

Fluffy? Comfortable? No and no.

First of all, "fluffy?" Uhh...wow. I just can't even.

Second: Any girl will tell you (I'm not even a girl and I know this) that taking ANY kind of impact trauma to the tits HURTS.

Now she only had to wait for the halls to clear out a bit more before she made her move. If there was a crowd, there was a chance Twilight was hiding among them like an assassin ready to strike. An empty hall made for a clearer range of sight to avoid her would-be attacker.

That's...completely backwards. Losing yourself in a crowd and using a crowd as a massive pack of obstacles is a far superior way to shake a tail. An empty hall means nobody to hide behind and nobody between you and them.

The concept behind this story is cute, but the execution is somewhat lacking. As much as I love Sunset Shimmer clop, I'm afraid I won't be tracking.

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Boy I'd love to know where YOU went to school, because damn. When you factor in time to get to school and time to get home from school, it's usually much closer to nine.

Well actually I was going by the actual average for American students to be in school. I don't know if that calculates in time traveled between home and school. So I guess that would put on an hour or so if you did.

Why would Sunset Shimmer describe clothes in such a bizarre way when a lot of ponies, especially in Canterlot, choose to wear clothes? Clothes should not be this alien a concept to Sunset Shimmer that she would feel the need to describe them like this.

The point I'm trying to make there is "all the time". In Equestria, clothes are worn by people for special events, high society, sporting events, unique flare; but not really worn by everyone every day. I guess what I'm trying to get through with what she said would be more akin to: "A world where everyone wears a hat". Weird and something you're not used to, but you still know people that did it.

I...highly doubt that SciTwi just randomly started wearing the exact same clothes as Princess Twilight. It doesn't follow logic. Even if she shed the Crystal Prep uniform, she strikes me as the type who would dress somewhat differently, like turtlenecks and long skirts. Minor nitpick.

Eh. Comedic effect for comedic effect's sake. If I was writing a story with deeper plot and more pizzazz to it, I would have done the exact same as you said, personally. But, not so much for a silly flat one-shot.

Fluffy? Comfortable? No and no.

First of all, "fluffy?" Uhh...wow. I just can't even.

Second: Any girl will tell you (I'm not even a girl and I know this) that taking ANY kind of impact trauma to the tits HURTS.

Yes, that's been brought up to me already. But, thank you for laying it out again. I admit I failed on that, even for it just being for comedic effect. I admit that. Sorry. Heh.

That's...completely backwards. Losing yourself in a crowd and using a crowd as a massive pack of obstacles is a far superior way to shake a tail. An empty hall means nobody to hide behind and nobody between you and them.

Well, I suppose that's more set to the person. If you're faster than a person but not as sneaky as them, an open hallway where you limit where the person can hide as well as optimize the space you have to run through and away with could work out better. Again, it's a matter of who you're asking. Having a crowd to move around in and mask your movements works for some people, but not all people.

The concept behind this story is cute, but the execution is somewhat lacking. As much as I love Sunset Shimmer clop, I'm afraid I won't be tracking.

Well, thank you anyway. No sleep lost, I promise. I hope to see you around some other time all the same. You take care of yourself.

Man, this is good! I can't wait until the next chapter!

So, when's the next chapter?

run sunset run

also shouldnt lyra want bon bon to have bigger tits rather than her self as then lyra has something to play with *wink*

6863599 It would actually make an interesting idea for a story, if it turns out, that while sunset "Looks" human, her biology is still slightly different, like, that pony-turned-humans are naturally stronger/more durable or something, and thus are immune to the negative side effects of having bigger breasts (like backpain, or the boobs-dont-negate-Falldamage-part from this story).
There is a fanfic called "Death is optional" where, after sunset yells at sci-twi, that she almost killed her friends, shes baffled to find out humans were actually immortal the whole time, just nobody ever told her, it could be kinda like that, only this time no one told sunset, that breasts arent supposed to defy physics.

Finish this story plz!

"Funny" enough xD ~~~

Otherwise, I'll wait for the next chapters, knowing you'll do them good if you can (time, etc) ^^.

And I don't want to be a killjoy, but I'm not familiar enough with FimFiction. Does any picture added to a story/summary/as the main picture/ etc., is linked with a source or something (I mean, is there a way to know who the picture belongs to). Crediting in fact.
If someone doesn't mention the authorization I guess it doesn't mean he doesn't have it, and if there is indeed a link to somewhere showing who the picture belongs to, it's at least the best respect it can be done.

I'm using more often my phone than a computer here so it may explain why I'm a bit lost and why I've asked this question ^^.

Thanks anyway.

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I’ve answered the issue with the source in the comments below a few times at this point. But if you thumb over the picture, a little widget will come up in the bottom right that will lead you to the creator’s page.

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Alright.
Sorry I brought this again to you :/

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It’s not a problem.

After two years....nothing.

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Sadly so. I just can’t find the time to write. At least a time to write where I have a spark of creativity.

This needs to be finished, this is great!
Edit: Three years man?

Will you finish this story any time soon? It's really good.

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Has it really been that long? How time flies.

Love this story!

youve got to finish this, i only had to look at the cover to see this happening, tho it begs the question, if sunset is from a world of magic, has magic throughout her whole body, not to mention the portal made her body like that... are they magic?

You gotta finish this story man, it's so good!

It's a personal habit of mine to reread this every once and a while, cause it's just that good.

Hey there, are you going to continue with the story anytime soon?

And that the story of how Twilight Sparkle got arrested and send to jail!

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You can’t prove nothing.