The final part of the Unity Pact Saga. Be prepared for love, life... and conflict. Old enemies will return and new enemies will test the mettle of our heroes in New Humansville and abroad. The Natural Magic of the world has not finished its plan yet.
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Sentence feels off...
Other than that, the story feels kinda as if all the characters simply fall into their roles with little resistance. Kind of like Cutter. I find his transition from being anti-human to one training under a human a bit unrealistic. The story says he was broken down, but I don't feel he has been broken down. That whole transition feels lacking, almost as if you didn't want to make the audience feel his angst and his mind being forced to alter its thought process from 'what I'm doing is right' to 'what I did was wrong'.
Maybe it's just me, but I'm just not feeling it. It feels too easy.
How many humans are going to want to move to "pastel Earth" when Sunset Shimmer shows up and reveals a passage to -a- human world?
7440880 I'll fix the typo when I can.
As for your other concerns, perhaps I was not explicit enough about Cloud Cutter's mentality. He knew he was in the wrong before they even left Trottingham. He was not yet teachable yet though, that is what Darryl and Rose had to bring about. They had to put him through some figurative heat to soften him up before they could teach him.
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Good question... Not sure many would though after settling in. However it is a good thought to consider too.
Fuck me! Three more downvotes since I posted the last chapter!? Just how bad was it!?
7441206 I can't speak for the down-voters (I don't down-vote a story simply because a chapter has something I don't like and/or agree with) but the whole broken pony-penis part at the beginning of the chapter felt just a little bit.... over the top. I'm not particularly squeamish when it comes to reading fiction, dark or otherwise, but that part kind of made it a bit hard to enjoy the rest of the chapter. It might have worked if it was handled more comically, but the inclusion of the blood sort of makes that impossible. i'm still enjoying the story as a whole, though. So try not to let yourself get too discouraged by some of your more fickle readership.
As always, looking forward to the next chapter.
Boring days, boring days are good.
It means you, and maybe those around aint fighting for their lives from moment to moment.
7441464 Very true, but in New Humansville just how long can that last?
Why horrible, graphic penis trauma in the middle of a touching romantic scene?
WHYYYYY???
also
Rose
7441734 Cocktease? More like Cocktear
Gotta hand it to that stallion, most guys would be like:
Insert horrible penis in a cast joke here. And yes there is one.
On a much more serious note. Something is dreadfully off with Full Spectrum.
Going to try to comment on something other than Archmage Pecker Wrecker now. (that's her new name)
Isn't it eerie how prophetic Full Spectrum's name turned out to be? I mean how did she pick it?
Also, she kind of acts too calm about all this, when she's been one of the most traumatized and unstable humans in this story.
Something is missing from the scene with Luna overseeing Midnight Haze's experiments with the giant, magic blood-pool o' resurrection. Or rather someone is missing. They appear to be proceeding without the foremost expert on that thing, the pony who now has the memories of the Grand Magus who made the thing.
The Celestia portion of the previous chapter seems to imply that Celestia already knows how to get around the problems that Haze is running into. Where Haze is wondering if it would even be possible to make more of the pools and attune them to other species, Celestia already seems to know it's doable, and is just wondering whether it would be the right thing to do.
Should that be 'stout board perched close to the ceiling?'
Also, now picturing Vaiawa acting like a house cat, and batting at people as they walk by.
7444091 That is an amusing mental image of Vaiawa to say the least.
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I love finding ways to exploit a system without (permanently) harming others.
(Get me the skulls of Stephen Hawking and Albert Einstein. I want to make a school... oh, and Bruce Lee's too so he can be our PE/health class teachers. )
Didn't we leave new humansville on a cliffhanger about changling hives and Latin princesses? What did I miss?
7440880 Finally fixed, thanks!
7441734 Fixed, thanks!
7445219 and sun tzu, he can be social studies teacher..........
That's...disturbing...kind f reminds me of a teratoma...
Um...are you actually calling Full Spectrum that?
It Catalyst who wrecked poor Starbusted when she yanked him up into the air then dropped him on the floor.
But that IS an excellent new name!
Also, those two gryphons rape-dressing the balzak are the catbirds' answer to Rarity!?