When The Cutie Mark Crusaders go missing, it's up to Applejack, Rarity, and Rainbow Dash to find them, even if it means descending to the very depths of the ocean, and their minds, to do it.
6783426 Thank you so much! That means a lot! Twilight and I have some really crazy ideas that we want to put in, and the main action should be starting soon! I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I shall try not to disappoint!
Can't wait for more! I have to say though, if rainbow already has a connection to the vita chambers and rarity will be the one with plasmids(guessing there), I'm curious as to what an will do, though I'd guess she will be the one with the mechanical firepower of guns and such since that's all I can think of being left. Keep up the good work doods!
It's an alright story, fairly stock so far. If I recall, ADAM was more about enhancement than healing. The healing aspect of it, like Vita-chambers, didn't drive everyone naddy bonkers. Er, then again in the game Vita-chambers were designed so only Andrew Ryan could use them, so they were sort of engineered to not be horrible, since he got all the good stuff.
So I was recommended randomly on one fine evening (I don't know how this happened hiatus pretty much left me to die productively some years ago ) to take a look at this story and so far the experiance has been pleasant.
You manage to keep anything even hinting towards out-of-character issues far away from the main cast which is damn nice and certainly is an easy pitfall most would fall into given the nature of Bioshock. I would say the only thing I did notice that may be iffy is that the story follows the original Bioshock story very closely.
Luckily, I happen to have done a crossover ages ago that pretty much did the same thing and I can see the unique stuff and situations you made in order to incorporate ponies fitting well into the plot structure that's not a complete scene-by-scene rehash of the original game. Looking forward to seeing more of what you guys got, you're doing great.
6788993 We are going to have a proper editor go over some of the stuff because we've been a bit rushed as of late. If you see anything wrong don't hesitate to point it out.
I'll admit i had my doubt, but wow this is good. The beginning was a little drawn out and the speaking was a touch stiff, but it's well written and has good immersion to it. The premise is very appealing and the general feel of the story is good. You've captured the dynamic between AJ, Rainbow, and Rarity quite well. However, the part with the deaths and near deaths feel kinda underwhelming. I think you could've added more drama to it, but I'm not sure how so I don't think I have much room to complain. Still I'm liking what I'm seeing!
It's a bit sad that the story has lost a bit of it's quality from the first chapters... Don't get me wrong it's still a good story but there are a few bits that could be better... then again maybe I'm just being a bit harsh
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This pleases me! Soon everyone will pay attention! Soon the world will be mine! MWAHAhahahaaaa...
I mean... Awesome! I'm glad you're interested.
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Fixed
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Thank you so much! That means a lot! Twilight and I have some really crazy ideas that we want to put in, and the main action should be starting soon! I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I shall try not to disappoint!
Cant wait for the next chapter!!!
Can't wait for more! I have to say though, if rainbow already has a connection to the vita chambers and rarity will be the one with plasmids(guessing there), I'm curious as to what an will do, though I'd guess she will be the one with the mechanical firepower of guns and such since that's all I can think of being left. Keep up the good work doods!
Help! I've been "forced" to like this story! I cannot wait to read some moar!
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"Forced"
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Twilight is really pushing this thing hard lately isn't he? Well thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it and think that it's well written.
6785229 I told him about it when talking about Bioshock.
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Well I'm glad you're getting it out there.
It's an alright story, fairly stock so far. If I recall, ADAM was more about enhancement than healing. The healing aspect of it, like Vita-chambers, didn't drive everyone naddy bonkers. Er, then again in the game Vita-chambers were designed so only Andrew Ryan could use them, so they were sort of engineered to not be horrible, since he got all the good stuff.
...I haven't heard a Would You Kindly yet.
So I was recommended randomly on one fine evening (I don't know how this happened hiatus pretty much left me to die productively some years ago ) to take a look at this story and so far the experiance has been pleasant.
You manage to keep anything even hinting towards out-of-character issues far away from the main cast which is damn nice and certainly is an easy pitfall most would fall into given the nature of Bioshock. I would say the only thing I did notice that may be iffy is that the story follows the original Bioshock story very closely.
Luckily, I happen to have done a crossover ages ago that pretty much did the same thing and I can see the unique stuff and situations you made in order to incorporate ponies fitting well into the plot structure that's not a complete scene-by-scene rehash of the original game.
Looking forward to seeing more of what you guys got, you're doing great.
6788993
We are going to have a proper editor go over some of the stuff because we've been a bit rushed as of late. If you see anything wrong don't hesitate to point it out.
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Yeah, we are getting someone to edit it
6789787 Why did you erase your last comment?
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I noticed they had posted that comment on the second chapter and I said "in the next chapter "
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I meant in the next chapter that I write
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Thank you.
I'll admit i had my doubt, but wow this is good.
The beginning was a little drawn out and the speaking was a touch stiff, but it's well written and has good immersion to it. The premise is very appealing and the general feel of the story is good.
You've captured the dynamic between AJ, Rainbow, and Rarity quite well. However, the part with the deaths and near deaths feel kinda underwhelming. I think you could've added more drama to it, but I'm not sure how so I don't think I have much room to complain.
Still I'm liking what I'm seeing!
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We are getting those issues fixed! Thank you for enjoying it enough to favorite it.
It's a bit sad that the story has lost a bit of it's quality from the first chapters...
Don't get me wrong it's still a good story but there are a few bits that could be better... then again maybe I'm just being a bit harsh
Not sure what this is or is supposed to be?
confrontation
it's
"M" (quote marks, more than just M should probably be used)