• Published 25th Aug 2015
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Duty Vs Heart - Thallium



Summoned to her homeland by the Zebrican king, Zecora must provide her "unique" brand of assistance to an age old problem

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You did an entire clopfic in rhyme. :rainbowderp::pinkiegasp:

Goddamn, sir/madam. I don't normally like clopfics, but you have a fave and a like for pulling that feat off and doing so damn well.

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Hah, thanks!

Yeah it wasnt easy... very few clop related words seem to rhyme! Dx

At least he didn't have an orange coat :P

Main event* you have "main even" written in there.

Pretty decent, the clop was a little barebones but I'm sure it wouldn't be easy to be super descriptive while rhyming. Try to make your meter more consistent as well, as in the rhythm/amount of syllables per line. I got lost a few times where I couldn't tell where the rhyme was, either because I read too far or too little, and having two rhyming lines have a different number of syllables makes the rhythm kind of irregular.

Still, this was a very unique idea, and it was executed rather well.

6360428 XD what happens to Zecora when that happens though? Can she not say anything anymore?

That is simply the best rhyming I have seen in a long time. Not many people can get good rhymes PLUS great detail with the rhymes. Trust me, I have tried myself. You definitely deserve a like here. Great clop. 👍

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